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This is a humanized fic, but it isn't clop, so yeah.
The old chapters are now updated! Working on new content. Couldn't have done this without the help of DrReinmann, my editor.
Rainbow Dash mysteriously appears in the bedroom of average teen guy Leon Miller, a good ol boy from Oklahoma. This is the story of how she copes without her friends, and how she meets new ones. Oneshotting, so I can't state much more than that.This is planned to be full length.

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 85 )

it's good, could have been longer though

It's not anywhere near done.

Expect at least six more chapters. I'm going for full length but my plot arc might not allow that. In any case, I'll have some more up tonight.

well, SOMEONE has been busy lately, huh? keep up the good work.

Yeah, I have to punch myself every once and a while as not to skip ahead over small details. :twilightangry2:
I tend to write for me and not the reader. It's a flaw I know and accept.

It's better and has alot more potential. Go on... :trixieshiftright:

This...is honestly very bad. It's a distilled regurgitation of "oh, this is how humans and ponies are different" cliches combined with a distilled regurgitation of "oh, you're a cartoon character here" cliches, and it just isn't an interesting read.

That's your opinion. Not the popular one, but yours and therefore okay. Sorry I bored you. :moustache:

Glad I could change your opinion! :rainbowkiss:

This. Is. So. Awesome! :rainbowkiss:

Alas, it being a clopfic would, IMO, make it 20% cooler, but hey, we can't have everything... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png

Anyway, awesome story, keep it up - watching eagerly for more!


I doubt i'll do anything more than allude to any clop-like material. If I decide on romance. I'm on the fence about what RD should be doing in what I have written. (I've about three chapters ahead of you guys, but only one is near upload ready.)

Thumbs and tracked. It looks like this gun be gud.:derpytongue2:
Oh, and try to separate your dialogue. I hate reading a big block of text.


Nah, I get it, no pressure.

S'my personal preference, and it seemed like a great set up, but hey, you're the author. I'll still read and like it regardless.

God, anatomy... This cannot go well for RD. For us, hopefully it will be hilarious! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png


I could'a clop'd it, not my writing style though.

I'm not even sure I could write clop. O.o


Fair enough.

Maybe not for this, but perhaps you should try writing some at some point to expand your literary horizons. :twilightsmile:
Again, obviously, no pressure.


Maybe, one day. It'd have to be really good though, I hate writing sub-par stuff. Makes me mad. :pinkiecrazy:


I completely understand.

Well, if you do, I'd be glad to read it. :twilightsmile:


Follow me, I'll make sure to drop you a PM -if- I do any clop. Or you know, another normal story.


Fair enough - I look forward to either. :yay:

its good a few typos mainly repeats like when the food arrives you say on the edge of edge of. other than that, great story so far

a few things
1: great chapter, went by a little quick but i liked it :pinkiehappy:
2: A brony on the football team, surely his teammates are unaware :applejackunsure:
3: Artificial grass on the field? shameful :trixieshiftleft:
but yeah, great chapter, can't wait to read more

Make them longer, please. :twilightsmile:

I like to give out short but good chapters every 1-3 days. :scootangel:
Yeah, no-one could know. I should know, I play football. Haha.
Fixed. Thanks! :moustache:

I can imagine Dash would go crazy if she ever got to fly a jet. Like a F 22 Raptor, to name one. She'd probably be "Yeah it's cool, but I'm faster.", but hey...

the human equivalent of the wonder bolts = The Blue Angels ... just saying:raritywink:

Excellent work so far man! I think this deserves:

:yay: :yay: :yay: :yay: 4.5/5 yays

this is very well done:pinkiehappy: looking forward to further chapters.:yay:

Maybe later today. If not, tomorrow.

very interesting,
I liked the chapter but the part with Leon's dad seemed a little rushed. It came out nicely but you could have built up to it or something
i dunno, just keep doing what you're doing and i'll keep reading :pinkiehappy:

It was intentionally quick, Leon's father will come to play later in the story as well. The reasoning for the tears is blurry, I don't know that anyone will get the true meaning behind them. :rainbowlaugh:

You'll know in a few chapters. :trollestia:

You actually used the word 'literally' in the correct way. That's a rare thing these days. I applaud your well versed vocabulary! img.ponibooru.org/images/4e/4e279f453b7807e296e924b5aefc253f

Would be easier to read if there was a space in between paragraphs.

I really liked the bit with his dad. It was sad, hopeful and confusing. Please make moar? :pinkiehappy:

For some reason my formatting goes to crap when I put the text into here from word. :fluttercry: I'll work on it next chapter

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Dude's father's a ghost? Go on... :trixieshiftright:

I knew people would take this many ways. All as planned. :trollestia:

teh second chapter.....:pinkiehappy:
i like it, but i'm sure you got that due to the smile

very good character development so far and it can go so much further even into a sequel if you want but focus on the beginning for now and keep up the amazing work (seriously OC's are hard to add in stories successfully):rainbowkiss:

I'm going to make this full length, so I may not need to make a sequel. :moustache:

okay i was just making a suggestion if you want to do that but full length is just as good!

I may have read worse before but not really sure haven't read them all yet.:derpytongue2:

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