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Raptormon132


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Diamond Tiara's father, Filthy Rich is sent to prison, and Diamond Tiara is left in foster care without the riches she once had.

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Some things can only be learned the Hard way. Good Story!

8134769
Thank you. :twilightsmile:
Now that I've finished this story, it's on to the next one. The next story I'm going to write is a dark clop-fic.
It's one I got resent inspiration to do after rewatching and remaking my blind reaction to episode 21 of season 1, Over a Barrel. And I think it's a good warm-up before I start writing the big one.
Here's the image I've designed for the clop-fic as a clue to what it is going to be about. And please do tell me what you think of it.
cdn-img.fimfiction.net/story/duxk-1493679940-358602-full

JackRipper
Story Approver

Just stopped by to say hello. It's been a while, Raptor. :twilightsmile:

8134874

It has been a while, JackRipper. So nice of you to drop by, and read my latest story. :twilightsmile:
I hope you like it. And I'm writing another one soon.

JackRipper
Story Approver

8134896
Funny you should mention it, I have a story coming out tomorrow afternoon that you should consider checking out! :pinkiesmile:

8134897
If it doesn't contain spoilers from seasons 5 - 7, sure, I'm game. But if it does, I'll save it in my "Read It Later" shelf.

JackRipper
Story Approver

8134904
Nope, it doesn't.

But you're seriously slackin', get to work. :rainbowwild:

8134801 you're welcome. What about tiara's mother, couldn’t she take care of her daughter? About the picture, looks interesting, I guess some mindcontrol spell or a spell that changes her into a human or something

8134953
It's actually Wand-Lighting Charm. vignette2.wikia.nocookie.net/harrypotter/images/4/43/Wand-lighting_charm.gif/revision/latest?cb=20140912023113
But there is going to be the use of the Imperius Curse, which is a mind control spell. And you've guess it. It's a dark clop-fic that's going to be a crossover between MLP and Harry Potter.

WHAT?! :pinkiegasp: Diamond Tiara has a mother?! I hope that's not a spoiler! If so, don't tell me, because I'm a blind reactor that hasn't got up to that yet! I've been spoiled by too much already, and I don't want to be spoiled more than I already have!

8135019 Yeah we've seen her mother since season 5.

8135019 okay i won’t, as you wish.

I think her situation would have been worse if Spoiled Rich was in the story.

8136454
You realise that you're the third one that has presented a spoiler? So much for avoiding spoilers.

8136492 sorry I'll edit it right now.

Greetings,

You have submitted this story to the Reviewers Cafe for review.

Here it is.

Cheers!

8348820
Hey there.

Thanks for reviewing it. I'm glad you liked the lesson that Hard Ball teaches Diamond Tiara in the story. I should tell you some trivia about the story.

Trivia Time!

The concept of Diamond Tiara not liking Firm Hoof's egg salad sandwiches was inspired by the video, "ANGRY GRANDPA'S EGG SALAD FREAKOUT!!".

The scene with Hard Ball confronting Diamond Tiara was inspired by a scene of Q and Guinan from Star Trek: The Next Generation, from the episode "Déjà Q".

From how you mentioned about Diamond Tiara having a mother, I didn't know she did, and that is a spoiler to me because I'm a blind reactor to the series that hasn't seen her yet. For the record, I thought Diamond Tiara didn't have a mother, or at least had one, but died when Diamond Tiara was still a baby. I guess I really need to catch up with the series. I guess if that certain episode Diamond Tiara's mother appears in wasn't made, or if the very least happened sometime after I make this story, this story probably would've had a bigger impact on you?

Also, with some of the errors, I realise that there are some errors, typos, and misspellings that I go unseen from me. And I do have some issues with grammar and structures at times, which I'm not afraid to admit. And I really do need help with that certain weakness. If it's classed as "reject" (which I assume is really bad) because of that, I'm really sorry for that.

Thank you for reviewing it.

Huk

"Begging. Doing things yourself, being no lower or higher than anypony else, being the most hated filly in town, and living with the fact that you were responsible for what happened to your dad. It's your fault Filthy Rich is in jail. He was a great guy, and you probably ruined his life because you selfishly wanted everything. You're a pitiful excuse for a pony. You don't deserve to stay with somepony as nice as Miss Firm Hoof. Without your family's fortunes, you have nothing, and you are nothing. The only way you're ever going to survive is on the kindness and charity of others."

Why do I suddenly smell... ice cream and synthehol, hmm :duck: ?

Seriously though, the story is a bit too heavy on the telling IMHO. Still, not a bad read :trollestia:

I want a sequel. I need a sequel. We want a sequel. We need a sequel.

On a serious note though, this story really needs a sequel, I would love to see more of Hard Ball, and she was not a bully, she was someone who gave Diamond the hard truth, and around 4,000 words, I thought it would be marginally bigger. But still, you did a phenomenally fantastical amazing job.

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Thank you. :twilightsmile:

I should tell you that what inspired this story was a scene from an episode of Star Trek: The Next Generation. Here's the Star Trek scene.

As for a sequel, I actually wasn't planing on making one. I planned on making this, and that was it. I'll actually be too busy with other stories I'm writing. I'm planing on writing sequels to "I Will Not Fail", and prequels to "A Pop Star, a Princess, and a Prisoner", and I've started the first one right now. You're welcome to check those ones out too if you'd like. :raritywink:

8586381
The resemblance is certainly there, and I'll check out the others too.

8586440
Awesome. I hope you enjoy them. :twilightsmile:

8586536
I have no doubt I will.

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