Drop that Beat

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OneAmongOthers

OneAmongOthers #1 · Mar 30th, 2017 · 6 · 5 ·

I've read encyclopedias with more interesting content that this. It was very bland, boring and full of "Let's just fuck because I can't think of anything actually interesting to write." Go back to the drawing board with this one as you really need to work on this a lot more.

DezzarTac

DezzarTac #2 · Jul 26th, 2018 · · ·

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Precisely. I'm most bothered by the fact that your comment has been downvoted. You weren't particularly rude, with exception to the 'interesting' part. I've decided to even out your rating at five; why not, eh?
While it's been over a year since posted, the work has not been improved; I'll have to read 'Lifeguard on Duty' to see whether the author improved overall.
The dialogue was stiff and almost observant. The pacing was erratic, and I'm ignoring spelling and grammar. The fundamental writing itself was in error. See ya'll at 'Lifeguard.'

MisterEdd