Pony On Earth
Pony X Human
*Don't like the categories? Especially that slice of life one, then don't read easy as that.
After taking over his co-workers duties, Ari runs into Luna when she teleports before is very eyes. So used to his ordinary life, Ari jumps at the chance to 'spice' things up. Together they attempt to wait things out until someone back home can save Luna.
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Very nice start, you have my interest. I'm curious to see where this goes. It's hard, for me at least, to find a decent PoE with Best Princess.
My only input would be to put spaces between the paragraphs, that way people won't be intimidated by the massive wall of text. It also makes it look neater and it's easier to find your place again, if you get distracted. That's just my opinion though.
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Yeah, I find its hard in general to find a good PoE, so that is why I'm making this novel.
I have fixed all chapters -including the new one- so that they are spaced. Thanks for he tip, i usually do that for my stories, but after doing a lot of English classes in college I grew accustom to no spacing. I keep forgetting that online you don't need to follow that rule seeing as you have infinite space.
Thanks for the support
8044898 I agree. Spacing out paragraphs seems to be pretty common and standard writing etiquette in fanfiction land.
You had my curiosity, and now you have my attention.
I quite like Luna's old equinish tbh, it's charming
Are you going to have some kind of life lesson at the beginning of every chapter? I hope so because that is really interesting to read, a great eye-opener as well.
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I like her old enqineish as well, but it would get very annoying for the reader if she always spoke like that. Just like how in some stories it's really annoying to read someone mimic A.J's accent.
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Yeah I plan to have them in all chapters I do. If you want to know there purpose read on: Their mostly as a way to see the progression of Ari's mental state. How he changes from one frame of mind to another.
Thanks for the support
Omg, I love the daily updates and I was so scared at the police part, I thought it was over
I thought everything was going straight to H-E double hockey sticks right there.
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It's hard to do daily, but I tend to finish my chapters between 1-3 days when I have time. Thankfully, I recently found myself with a lot of time so I'm taking advantage of it.
I was thinking that the story needed a bit of spice to make it more engaging to the reader so I placed in that little suprise twist. Seeing the reactions there will probably be more down the line.
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That was my exact mind frame when I was writing the chapter as well. It's really fun to write parts of the story where the character falls down. The hard part is picking them back up for me.
Thanks for your support
Man, what a dick. They even helped you unpack. But I had a bad feeling about him since he found Luna out on the roof.
Keep up the good work.
This new addition has just made my day, im very fond of this stories plot so far and I can really seeing it go places
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Thanks for the help and for the support.
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Don't know if April fool's or not. Either way thanks for the support. This winky face is 4 u ;)
Very vivid
I'm gonna love reading this.
Whelp to the tagged folder you go.
Are you still writing this, or are you just taking a break for a bit?
i'm loving it already cant wait for next chapters :D
ps spike with moushtash
and twilight annoyed 
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I like to put at least 1 line between each line
Like this...
I'm sensing he rolled in his sleep and is hugging Luna in the morning
Name drop
Swallow your pride and bare with humiliation
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I waited until there were a few chapters so I can devour them in one go