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Lise Eclaire

If you happen to cry, I will be there. If you happen to smile, will you do the same for me?


Seeking her destiny, Flurry Heart has set off on a voyage through space... yet memories are not so easily left behind.

Written for the Imposing Sovereigns contest.

Special thanks to KingMoriarty, Fahrenheit, and Wing for editing.

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Comments ( 15 )

Huh. So, you decided to catch that phrasing and go wild with it? :trixieshiftleft:
Good! :pinkiehappy:
Very interesting concept you have here. It might be interesting to explore it further.
I don't envy the folks trapped on that planet with Flurry, though. Interesting times await them. :pinkiecrazy:

8037375 O:)
And I thought you'd be interested in the Academy :P

8038317 Who said I'm not? :rainbowderp:
Exploring further doesn't necessarily mean "into the future". :raritywink:

8037375 What phrasing?

You painted a heap of world here, you did. Many, many things. Lots of high concept. I think I'd have liked to see the more full shape of some things - like why Celestia feels jealous of there being another instead of happy, as an easy example.


What phrasing?

That no alicorn was born in Equestria.


Why am I so weak willed?!? :( I'll try to make it into a multi story based on this starting August... (just for you two! :P j/k)
And you can blame FoME! He set the word limit O:)

Oh good; this concept needs more love. That's not to say that this wasn't an enjoyable story, it's just that it's highly capsulized. I'm somewhat to blame for that, what with establishing the word limit, but this is still the last leg of a long physical and emotional journey. The payoff isn't quite there when we never actually see any of the fights that preceded it.

Still, some great sci-fi and fascinating worldbuilding (though I do have to wonder why ascendants so resemble star ponies, and where they fit in the grand scheme of things.) Thank you for it, and best of luck in the judging.

Also, sorry for the delay in reading this. I forgot to add it to the appropriate bookshelf and only realized that when looking through the blog listings. Thank goodness for redundant backups.

8045712 I know, I was joking O:) (Don't blame FoME for the shortness. It's all me :))
Hopefully the situation will be rectified this year ;)

Well that was an interesting story.

Great worldbuilding, and it left me with more questions than answers.

I'd be delighted to see the next entry in Flurry's Voyage :)

So, for various reasons, decided to go review a bunch of fics submitted for this event, including this one. Enjoy.

8062045 Thank you :D Hopefully, I get to start a multi chapter based on this, and keep this as the teaser :)

8051031 You always say that! :P

8062064 Well YAY! Look forward to it. Like I said, not sure how into some of the ideas I am, but still interesting things that would be awesome to explore further and see more detail about.

This story was rather fun!

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