• Published 7th Jul 2012
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Element of Generosity - pononymous



Rarity is doubting her ability to be the Element of Generosity, so Spike tells her a story.

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Her 2-Week Notice

Disclaimer: I do not own My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic or anything affiliated with the show.
I'm just not that cool.


Rarity slowly walked through Whitetail Woods, her saddlebags on her hips and her hair meticulously styled, approaching a dimly lit cave. She walked in, just as she had twice a week for the past two months since Spike's sixteenth birthday. This time, however, her saddlebag only had one side filled with gems for Spike. The other was filled with something far more important that she had to give him.

"Spike, where are you? I've brought you some more gems and I've got a package for you to send." She called as she came to a stop near the end of the light coming in from outside.

"I'm over here." Spike's voice resonated from one of the caves tunnels.

Spike's head and neck slid out of a tunnel and were immediately followed by the rest of his body. When he was fully out, his tail curled up in front of him, bringing up a couple of torches. He grabbed the torches from his tail, lit them with a small gout of flame, and set them into their brackets on the walls.

"There, I'm sorry I didn't set those up before you got here Sweetie." he said when the last torch was put in its place, casting light over his horde just the way Rarity had designed it.

"That's fine, but what did I tell you about calling me that Spikey-Wikey, it sounds like you're talking to my little sister."

"Sorry Rarity." Spike replied, laying down on his pile of gems.

"Oh, stop being so dramatic." she walked over and gave him a peck on the lips. He gave her a grin in return and she giggled at his antics.

"Would you to send something to Celestia for me please." Rarity said as she levitated a small, draw-string velvet bag with a scroll tied neatly to the top.

"Is that a friendship letter? I haven't sent one of those in a couple weeks." Spike reached over and caught the bag as Rarity lowered it into his palm with her magic.

Rarity walked over to his side, expecting him to breathe out a jet of flame over the bag and scroll. She didn't want any of the stray ashes to get on her pristinely white coat. As Rarity levitated a few loose gems back into their piles while she waited, she turned back to Spike and noticed that he was looking at the bag she had given him.

"So what's in the bag? Do you want me to send that too?" Spike asked. Rarity looked away from him and towards the gems next to her.

"I don't want to talk about it right now, could you just send it to Princess Celestia please?" Rarity answered, still not looking at Spike. This only made him more interested though. He quietly opened the letter and started reading it, but what he found was not the embarrassing tale he was expecting. The letter was from Rarity to Princess Celestia, but Rarity was describing how she was undeserving of the Element of Generosity because of the thoughts of Greed and Jealousy she had. Rarity had heard him mesing with the scroll, but was to late. She was about to yell at him for invading her privacy when Spike spoke up in a melancholy tone.

"Rarity, is that true? It's in this bag?" He didn't wait for her to answer. He tucked the scroll between his fingers and held the bag up on his palm. Using his other claw, he stuck two talons into the top and opened the bag. He pulled out a golden necklace with a purple diamond on the front of it. The Element of Generosity.

"Spike, you read the letter. I don't deserve to wear that anymore. I've become a selfish bi-"

"NO," he turned his neck around to look her in the eyes, "nopony calls my little Rarity that, especially not you." He could see tears forming in her eyes, so he set the bag, scroll and Element off to the side and sat back on his haunches. Then he reached over to Rarity and scooped her up next to him.

"I-it's true though, I didn't even want to bring you those Sapphires. I wanted to make them into a DRESS!" She cried out while pressing a foreleg to her face and sobbing against his scales. He wrapped her tighter in his arms and tried to comfort her, but she continued. "I was thinking of different designs the whole way here! I-I kept thinking about how you already had so many gems, you wouldn't even need any more until after your Sleep anyway."

"Shhh, Rarity. Let me tell you a story." He slowly stroked her mane and back while wiping the tears off her face with a talon, then Spike began his story.


"I once knew an earth pony who was terribly afraid of the dark. He knew it was irrational, but it had become a phobia that he couldn't get over. He had tried spells, therapy and even some of Zecora's brews, but none of them could help him. So he went on living his life, horrified of the dark. He had to keep a lamp on in every room of his house, it was expensive, but he couldn't sleep without them.

"One sunny day he decided to take a stroll through the park to enjoy Celestia's sweet sunlight, and read an adventure book. He was just to the part where the hero was going to assault the tyrant's castle, even though he knew he stood no chance, when he heard a cry and a splash from nearby. He looked up from his book, but he didn't see anything different, just the few trees providing shade and the well next to the path. He was about to continue reading when he heard splashing and a little foal wailing from the well."

"Is this even a true story?" Rarity asked, skepticism written across her face.

"Hey, who's telling the story here? Okay, so he gets up and gallops over to the well. He hears the little foal yelling and gurgling while also noticing that the bucket wench has been snapped in half. He realizes that the foal must have been trying to get a drink, but fell in when he went to reach for the bucket with both hooves instead of one. He knows he has to help the foal, but even looking into the well makes him tremble and turn away."

"He wanted to gallop off and find a unicorn or pegasus to help get the foal out, but he knew the little guy probably got hurt from the fall and wouldn't be able to last that long. He took a deep breath and yelled down into the well 'I'm coming down to get you, hold on!' Then put his front hooves on the edge of the well. He slowly crawled over the black abyss and pressed his back hooves to opposite side of the well. He took a deep breath and closed his eyes."

"He let the weird colors swirl in front of his vision, anything other than the darkness below him, and tried to concentrate on a picture of the green grass, blue skies and bright Sun he had been enjoying just a minute ago. He slowly moved one hoof down at a time, making sure to keep three hoves against the bricks at all times. After only a couple of feet down he started hyperventilating. He tried to focus on his picture of the park, but it was fading to a pitch black emptiness that seemed to stretch on forever and wrap around him tightly at the same time. He felt like he was about to go into a panic attack when he heard the foal cry out once more."

'Hurry mister' the foal sobbed, 'my leg really hurts!'

"He regained his focus and started making his way down just a little faster than before, ignoring the rising panic in his chest. He finally made it to just above the water, so he reached his head down and luckily grabbed the foal by his mane on the first try. The extra weight made it a little harder to hold himself up near the slippery bottom of the well, but then he noticed a flash of light above him."

"He made his way half way up to the top and nearly fell before a silver glow surrounded him and the foal, and gave him enough time to prop himself up again before the glow quickly faded. Since the unicorn trying to help him was either very young or very old, he began climbing up the well again. As the edge of the well came into view, he quickly whipped his head around and grabbed the foal, tossing him out of the well and towards a grey unicorn, who tried to wrap him in magic again, but the effort made the old pony pass out."

"Then his phobia finally caught up to him. He saw the void beneath him and couldn't stop himself as he brought his hooves to his body. He plummeted down into the well with a resounding splash. He barely heard the foal cry out to him as he sank beneath the water, paralyzed with fear."


Spike paused a moment and asked "Was he a coward Rarity?"

"What?" her voice cracked as she spoke.

"Was that pony a coward because of his fears?" He asked a little more forcefully.

"Of course not! How could he have been! He overcame his fears for that foal, even though it cost him his LIFE!" She nearly shrieked in outrage that her beloved Spike would even suggest such a horrid idea. "He's easily one of the most courageous ponies I have ever heard of, he deserves his own holiday even!"

"He has one." Spike replied calmly. "It's the true reason behind the Summer Sun Celebration. Not many ponies remember anymore, but when Twilight and I were taught under Celestia she showed us a statue in her garden of a pony standing over a well. Twilight asked about the statue of course, but Celestia told us we would have to wait until we were older before she would tell us the story behind it, at the time she only told us it stood for Courage and Selflessness.

"Later on in our studies Twilight became more focused on Starswirl the Bearded and forgot about the statue, but I remembered and asked Celestia about it. She told me that story. Then she told me of how she would come once a year to the town and holding that foal on her back, she would raise the Sun directly in line with the statue of the stallion and the well."

"Of course, time passed and the next generations of townsponies were simply glad that Princess Celestia would visit their small town once a year. They would tell the surrounding towns and hold a celebration. Princess Celestia realized that the meaning behind her actions had been lost, so she moved the statue to her gardens. The celebration had become tradition though, so she still continued it, moving to a different town every year."

"What was the name of the foal Spike?" Rarity inquired.

"You never miss the small things do you?" he chuckled to himself, "The little foals name was Starswirl. Twilight probably would've know this story if he had ever published a biography instead of a research article. Speaking of Twilight, now we're off on tangent. I've picked up more of Twilight's habits than I thought."

"That was a nice story and history lesson my dear, but I'm still not worthy of being the Element of Generosity." Rarity huffed.

"Do you know why Celestia chose that stallion as a symbol of Courage Rarity?"

"Because he overcame his fears of course." she replied.

"Actually, it's because he had the greatest of fears to overcome, just like you have the greatest of greeds."

"Exactly Spike! That's why I shouldn't be the Generosity. I can't overcome my selfishness at all, my thoughts are always about how I could make something better looking for my own dresses, my fame..." she trailed off in shame, remembering her jealousy over Fluttershy's short modeling career.

"That's perfect," Rarity quickly looked up at him in confusion and anger, but he continued on "if you didn't care about the things you give away, you're just being apathetic, not generous. In the same way that the stallion was courageous for overcoming his fears, you are generous for overcoming your greed." he said with a poke to her side. "When you were jealous of Fluttershy's modeling career," she was shocked at his insight, but glad that her love knew her so well, "you may have really wanted to steal her fame for yourself, but you didn't. You chose to help her to the best of your abilities, and that is why you were chosen to be the Element of Generosity."

Rarity closed her eyes as she thought about what he had said, and her own greed buried inside of her. She knew that she had overcome her greed and vanity at different points, her memory wouldn't let her deny that, but she had focused on the greed that was there and not the generosity that overcame it.

As Rarity was thinking Spike picked the golden necklace off the velvet bag he had rested it upon and put it on her neck. Rarity opened her eyes and looked down at the purple diamond. It glowed slightly and hummed with the power of Generosity for a moment. The humming stopped after a few seconds, but the glow remained. Spike then grabbed the letter Rarity had written to Celestia and shredded it with his claws. He then tilted her head towards him and kissed her thoroughly.

"I love you Rarity, every part of you." Spike said after he broke the kiss.

"I love you too Spike, you've always been there for me, and I know you always will." Rarity said as she pressed closer against his warm scales.

Comments ( 57 )

This is for all the Bronys who say that Rarity is the least representitive of her element just because she loves jewels and wants to be famous.
She's still a huge flirt with Spike though, I agree on that.

Guessing ur fav characcter is Spike?

869482
I look forward to the dramatic U-turn from "d'awww" to "ow-chika-bow-wow". :raritywink:

Sometimes generosity isn't materialistic like giving someone money or cloths. But giving them kindness, comfort, help when the time is needed.

A very nice story. I normally don't really care for Rarity x Spike, but I have always considered the fact that he might have a chance when they're older and the age difference doesn't matter as much.

Well written, and a nice little tidbit with the foal actually being Starswirl.

A fave and a like for you, good sir.

Surprisingly nice story, although it ended a little too anti-climatically and without any deeper reflection on Rarity's part.

One thing though. It's usually conventional when utilizing a very long quote (such as the story that Spike relates) that is split up into paragraphs that each paragraph starts with a quote mark. That confused me for a moment when trying to follow the story, I had little idea that Spike was still telling the story.

"Rarity, is this true? Is it in this bag?" He didn't wat for her to answer.

He wrapped her tighter in his arms and tried to comfort her, but se continued

Princess Celstia realized that the meaning behind her actions had been lost, so she moved the statue to her gardens.
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Just a few grammar mistakes. Yeah, it was good. But..I dunno. Very anti-climatic. I'll read the sequel. You got a follow out of me, though. So yippee. :twistnerd:

That is a very well crafted view of generosity. You sir have worked a masterpiece.

This was really good. However, how big is Spike compared to Rarity?

i dont think rarity isnt generous, i just think she's a drama queen :rainbowwild: great story loved it!

870818
Yes, just look at my other story.

870822
There's more than one kind of Lust.:pinkiecrazy::trollestia:

870835
I agree, that's why I chose the example of Fluttershy's modeling, Rarity gave advice and encouragement even though she was jealous

870923
Thank you very much, I don't particularly care for the pairing either, but that's probably because I like Rainbow Dash better.

I actually wrote that backstory as the reason Starswirl became so obsessed with magic and time travel (I've always figured that those who want to go back in time the most have the most regrets). Starswirl developed a huge case of Survivor's Guilt and dedicated his life to figuring out a way to go back and save the stallion, thus his research into magic and time travel that allowed Twilight Sparkle her Solid Snake/Terminator roleplaying.

871057
Hmm, well, most reflection would have been in her thoughts while Spike was talking, and I still don't like Rarity all that much.
Thanks for the information, quotations have been added. Edit: I just redid the ending while fixing the grammar, so see if that's better.

871254
Thank you, thank you and thank you. I didn't actually want to end this part of the story there, but if I moved on to explicit clop directly after all that fluff I felt as if it wouldn't fit together. I could put the clop in a new chapter instead of a new story if that would work better.

871285
My gratitude goes out to you. I had the feeling this would be well recieved.

871413
The same size as in the picture. He would be able to scoop her up with both of his claws, but her legs would stick out. It'll make writing the clop interesting to say the least.

871435
Now that you mention it, this was pretty Spike-centric and Rarity didn't have a whole lot of drama, other than trying to quit being the Element of Generosity. Thanks:pinkiehappy:

871629 Ah. Yea, size differences can be such a bitch.

Also, so the Unicorn that helped the foal and the Earth pony was older Starswirl using the time travel spell to attempt to save them both. Nice little twist there, but without the comment I probably wouldn't of figured it out.

871700
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I hoped someone would get that, I just can't resisting putting things like that into my stories. I'm always hoping that will give it that little extra zest it needs to be featured.

871711 It is a nice little Easter egg. Sparity fics rarely get featured out of the gate; however, they do seem to have a high update feature rate I've noticed.

871858
I'm going to delete all the non-story related comments now, I don't want this turned into a blog thread.

871861 Solid plan. Have you decided if you're going to make it a new chapter or a new story for the next part by the way?

That is one effing cute picture

872288
Thanks, I was hoping a comfort story with a little sad mini story thrown in would work out.
Where are they? Could you please point them out so I can fix them?

This is a very nice little story. I like the short inner story very much. It's put together in a very nice way and has a very clear purpose, which is always good. So, good job! :twilightsmile:
There are some random errors in it, but they're not distracting.

872828
I'm glad you like the storyception, I was a little afraid people would say it was off-track or something. Could you please copy/paste the errors into a comment so I can fix them? I've reread it a couple time now for editing and such, but I don't see anymore errors. I'm probably fixing them in my head as I read, like I normally do.

872884 That's what I was doing too. I can pick them out for you though:
"ressonated"
"immediatelty "
"drakness "
"Whas"
"sligtly"
"thouroughly"

872899
Thanks! Fixing...Done.

It is a good story I admit. However the entire relationship between Rarity and Spike is hardly explored at all. The story of Courage though a good one was a rather shift and you don't have much to tell the difference between this story and the story being told in this story... if you get what I mean.
Your view as to why Rarity is the Element of Generosity is a good one, though I'm surprised that Spike read it... and he hadn't sent a friendship report for sometime.

The story has a good concept, but the execution of it leaves much to be desired. The flow of the story seems to come in bursts/stages if you get my meaning there and there is a lot of loose elements that raises many questions without many answers. Plus everything was resolved too quickly for my tastes. I believe Rarity should of spent some more time thinking about things though after hearing the story from Spike.
... Oh Zecora? Back in the time of Starswirl? That's a rather large and glaring mistake.

873335
Congratulations on being the first to notice that Zecora was in the story. What book(s) would you like Twilight to bring to Rainbow Dash and Spike while they are in the hospital in "The Life of a Dragon"? I'll be sure to include at least one of them.

That's because the story isn't about their relationship. How they got together is left to the imagination of the reader while I focus on this one point in their relationship.

I'm not sure about the flow of the story, it basically goes like this:
Rarity gets there, asks Spike to send a letter, he opens it do to curiosity, they talk a little about her wanting to quit being the EoG, Spike's tells a story to show overcoming problems (fear, greed, etc.) are what virtues are about, Spike explains his view on what Generosity means, kissy faces.

It flows well to me and nopony else has complained so far. If you give some suggestions, I'll see what I can do to fit them in though.

As for how fast it was resolved, how long does it normally take to change someponys mind? Just as long as it takes to find the right words.

873410

Uh... I'll get back to you on that one (Is Life of a Dragon Dash-Spike shipping BTW?)

Perhaps it isn't about their relationship, but some better clues or ideas about their relationship would make things a lot easier to understand. Honestly I had no idea about their relationship at the begging and almost none at the end.

The flow of the story isn't the order of scenes and what the scenes are, its the transition between them... and personally I can't feel that. You just seem to jump from one to the other, without much connecting them. There isn't any build up or hints as to what might happen next, it just... happens.

Suggestions.... maybe Rarity shows a bit of nervousness before or during her request for Spike to send the scroll, which then can lead give him a better reason to read it over simply curiosity. The talk of how Rarity feels that she doesn't deserve to be the EoG is very short before Spike's story appears, so that could be lengthened with Spike trying and failing to comfort her before remembering the story. As for the story itself well I think Rarity should be a little confused and reluctant to hear it at first and when the story is being told you separate from the rest of the story using a break/scene change and do something like put it into italics. After the story there is the talk about vitrues being overcoming the problems with Rarity still unsure about it, so Spike urges her to think about it. As something as big as that isn't decided in an instant. It takes a lot of thought and soul searching. Oh and please don't have Rarity think about one thing then Spike bring that up right away, its very jarring and feels wrong.

873458
Yes

Hmm, I don't want to add too much to the beginning of the story, it is a one-shot, but if I add something in the description of the story about them getting together and stuff would that work?

Well, I'll try and add in the nervousness about sending the letter, as well as her trying to get Spike to send the letter a little more forcefully before she hears the story. I'll also try for some more thoughts on Rarity's part after the story, but I'm not very good at that kind of writing. I would try and seperate the story more, but as you can see in one of the previous comments, some people already had trouble knowing that Spike was telling the story.

873513
Adding it to the description feels cheap to me...

Separating the story being told from this story should make it clearer to tell he his telling a story.

871629

Yo Bro I faved that story and Im watching you. Nuff Said, k thx.

873853
That's going to be awhile, I still have to catch back up to Elise asking Rarity to the Gala, then the Gala itself, then Spike and Rainbow Dash have to start hanging out, then date, then CLOP CLOP CLOP CLOP. For now, go read Xenophilia for some RD clop.

874000
It's okay, somepony listed a few of them already, so those were probably fixed. Though I did do some editing to the beginning if you care to reread that.

spike got all "gandalf wise man" in a short period of time

important thing you missed though

DOES HE STILL LIKE MUSTACHES?

874375
Somedrake has to be the man in that relationship, and it certainly won't be Rarity.
How could you think otherwise?

Great job, With bot the characters as well as the story. In both what happens in the chapter as well as the story Spike tells Rarity.

Keep up the great work and i can not wait to see what else you write.

874693
Thank you very much, did you happen to notice the Easter Egg in the Starswirl story? 871700 Did.

874714 No I did not... but now I do.

I think I enjoyed the Starswirl bits more than the actual story, to be honest.

Spike goes all Yoda on Rarity, and he's supposed to be like 16? I don't buy it, really. 16 year-old boys are stupid, hormonal, and egotistical-- not wise. I would know, I was one. As far as size difference goes, I'm guessing that he's in one of his growth incarnations that we saw in "secret of my excess", but not a huge one. If they're still size-compatible to "kiss thoroughly", I'm guessing that he's gained enough height to make it hard for him to get in the door, is all.

I'm a little head-scratchy about Rarity and her element-- but no more so than Applejack or Rainbow Dash. Applejack is a proven, chronic (TERRIBLE) liar in several episodes-- and Rainbow Dash has all the jadedness to match hers to portray the element of (brutal) honesty. I've never really questioned Rarity's element before, though (her intentions may come across as controlling or overbearing, she does mean well).

877307
I enjoyed it more than the original story as well, I like describing the stallions fears and him overcoming them a great deal.

Well, as a "baby" dragon he was raised by Twilight and grew up in a library, so him picking up some intellectual traits from her and the books he probably reads when he's bored (and not helping Rarity) isn't too much of a stretch, right?

I tried to describe him as the size in the cover picture I used for my story, but his size while raiding Sweet Apple Acres, or the next one after that works as well.

I'm glad I put a new thought in your head, that's what the point of this whole story was.

Also, thanks for the watch. I'll try not to dissapoint. :twilightsheepish:

So..many feels!:raritystarry::moustache:

893614
Yay! I caused people to have emotions and feel alive, my life is awesome now.

This story is so sweet. The thing I don't understand is how Spike is 16 and still so wise. All of the other teenage dragons are just Cranky-Doodle-Donkey holes. Oh Spike, you're the most interesting dragon in Equestria.

871997 ... N... Neh... IT'S SO CUTE!!!! :fluttershbad: Fluttershy is the only pony capible of carrying this ammount of cute.

934553
Well, I blame Spikes wisdom on being raised by a Librarian/Scientist (Twilight Sparkle) and being taught by her as he grows up. I find that I tend to take after some of my parents traits/habits so I thought it would be reasonable for him to start being more interested in books/science/math/etc. than dragons raised in the wild, surrounded by other guys(huge factor), and having no access to books or other learning materials.

1313593
You didn't google that, I know because otherwise you wouldn't be saying yay.

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