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Years ago when the Celestia sisters ruled in peace and harmony, a new princess was born. The Sisters were baffled looking down on the small pony, who although having just been born, was extremely small even on baby pony standards. They called her FallenStar, because on the night she was born thousands of stars had flown through the sky as if wishing to join one of their lost was because of her small size, that he sisters decided to keep the new princess a secret until she was big enough to hold her own against the world. Everything was perfect until Luna turned into Nightmare Moon. The jealousy of their eldest sister over threw her love for her little sister, and Luna was lost to them as Nightmare tried to install the eternal night. Celestia knowing how much this upset their littlest sister finally decided to seal Nightmare into her beloved moon for a thousand years. Fallen heard of her eldest sister's plan and she knew that even if Luna wasn't there any more she would have to save her because she couldn't stand for the sun and moon to be torn apart by such trivial matters. This caused our little heroine to devise a plan. So the time came to curse Nightmare and right before the curse was finished and the jelous pony sent to the moon, A small figure opened her wings and flew for the first time right into the beam of light, sacrificing herself to save her loved sister.

Now a thousand years have past and the curse is uplifted, thus sending a small cutemarkless Alicorn back to the land of Equestria. The pony arrived like the fallen stars she was named after and crashed landed with a boom in the farthest acre of the Apple Family Orchard where our story begins.

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Comments ( 17 )

:trixieshiftright:

Ok... I'm interested...

well, this has potential. But i'm a cricketer and I have something that are Important. You need to describe more! Don't stop half away, attack the story of the dear life. How, What, When, If, Who, Which etc. Lot of question are arising from the story and you need to filled it in. I'm not gonna hit the dislike button, but you need to go from A to Z. Try to use more words and describe more. Good luck.:pinkiehappy:

870870 Alright considering i finished this at oh i don't know 3 or 4 in the morning and i just wanted to get it up but I will revise and try to add more description to what i can thanks for the support

870799 I hate rhyming..... But I can apparently do it well.....

870810 It gets better.... or at least i think so... but nothing has really been written down.... all the awesomeness is inside my head..... *sigh*:unsuresweetie: hopefully I'll have a new chapter by the end of next week.....

870937

Oh, I know THAT feeling.

Gah, having whole plotlines embedded in your brain EXCEPT one crucial part drives you to insanity.

870939 So so true..... and its the little details that get you! I can even image how late i'm going to be staying up this week to have enough motivation to write the next chapter. Motivation WHY U SO ELUSIVE?!!

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AGREED! MOTIVATION! GET YO BUTT OUT HERE! WE NEED YOU!

870989 CALLING MOTIVATION TO THE STAGE ALL MOTIVATION PLEASE COME TO MY BRAIN!:trollestia:

So far so good:pinkiehappy: but, what does derpy have to do with this?:derpyderp2:

871013 She comes in a..... FUUUUUU- Actaully.... the part about derpy is in another story i'm writing....... mother of Celestia that's embarasing..... But i think i can find a way to mix that wall eyed mare into this story as well!

Oh no! Somepony's missed the like button! Of all the things that could possibly happen this is THE. WORST. POSSIBLE. THING!:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair: Yeah right love and tolerate is my game i won't freak because of someone not liking my story.... :twilightblush:then why did i just make all that fuss about one measly dislike? :facehoof:

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....Wow, good thing I pointed that out this early in the story:derpytongue2:! If that was a mistake then it's all right:twilightsmile: but I can see where Derpy can be involved in this story. Well, even if derpy isn't going to be in this story, I like the plot and I'm waiting for the next chapter....Also you got Derped:derpytongue2::derpyderp2::derpytongue2::derpyderp2:.....bad joke/pun...sorry:unsuresweetie:

871122 Haha Well even if it's a bad joke it made me laugh~ Thanks but just for you I'll include some Derpy in the next chapter if you like:derpytongue2::yay:

Shit. This is amazing.
Normally, alicorn OCs are Mary Sues, and therefore hated, but it seems you did it right.
Grammar and spelling could be improved, but I could see no problems with the OC

This story is pretty good and i am waiting for the next chapter! :pinkiesmile:

However, you need to work on the Shift errors.:derpyderp1: Let me explain, Basically in one sentence you would use two Tenses, future/past/present, and it becomes confusing when a reader is trying to understand the story.

Other than some simple spelling errors, I liked the plot and the idea is very creative. :twilightsmile:

888759 Thanks and i know what you're talking about.... i hate those namby pamby stories like that..... *COUGH*HiE*COUGH* thanks for reading!

897616 Okay i understood that I'll try and keep that in mind while I'm writing the next chapter.:raritywink:

Love it!! :rainbowlaugh: Write more!! :heart:

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