An End and a New Beginning
I felt numb. Just sitting in the waiting room of the hospital, my head down as I was bent over, looking into the cup of coffee in my hands. This all had to be a bad dream; I'd wake back up in my bed and all would be alright.
Pinching my arm didn't do a damn thing.
With a dread filled gulp, my mind lingered on what the doctor had said.
He wasn't going to wake up. My little brother was in a coma.
The crash had done a number on him and they'd had to put him in a medically induced coma that they said he'd be lucky to wake from.
I could feel tears starting to well up and I just stared down at my feet as they started to fall.
Goddamnit, I promised Mom. I promised Mom I'd keep David safe and now I couldn't uphold her last wish because he went and got into a fucking crash! And now he's probably going to jo- No, don't think that, don't bloody ever think that! He's not dead damn it!
“Mind if I sit next to you?”
Taking myself away from my mental chastising to look up, it took all my effort not to laugh. Standing before me was a silver haired man with a goatee, clad in what was probably the ugliest suit I had ever seen. Some weird amalgamation of yellow and lime green that looked like someone had turned up the saturation to a hundred and ten percent. I was sure he'd make my eyes bleed if I stared at him too long.
Before I could even tell him to piss off and leave me be, the man sat down in the seat next to me with a small groan. This old man better not try and start to chat, I'm definitely not in the mood for conversati-
“I always hate visiting hospitals,” the guy started to speak and I couldn’t help but let out a bemused groan. Great, he's starting to attempt a conversation. Of course no-one ever likes visiting hospitals; usually because someone they know is in them you daft old man.
“Look Mister,” I said, looking up at him and trying not to sound like I was being a total asshole. “I'd really prefer not to have a conversation right now. I'm definitely not in the mood for a chat at the moment.” Sheesh, didn't this guy see I was to be moody?
“So much untapped potential here and it's simply squandered,” the man said, tsking as he shook his head a little. Great, this asshole was ignoring me.
“Look man, I said I don't wanna talk alrig-”
“Like your dear brother David,” he said, looking at me with a glint in his eye and the faintest hint of a smirk on his lips.
Okay, what?! I looked up in confusion as I heard what he said. How in the heck did he know David's name? Let alone the fact he was my brother.
The smirk on his face grew as he let out a low chuckle, “That got your attention didn't it? But yes, dear David Hoard; a real shame too. Always awful to see young people cut down in the prime of their life and he would have had such a long and lovely one too.”
“How in the hell do you know David,” I growled at the man. His words did little to help my already sour mood. My brother was not fucking dead you insufferable old cunt! The doctor clearly told us it was possible for him to get better!
“Relax my dear Keith, relax,” the man said in a calm tone, not even sounding worried as I glared daggers at him. “I don't know your brother per se, but let's just say I'm an observer of the situation and leave it at that,” he said, ending it with devious chuckle.
Okay, now I wanted to punch this guy in the face. An observer of the situation? An observer of the frakking situation?! How in the hell does this guy damn well know our names if he doesn't know us! My teeth were definitely grinding as he started talking again.
“Truly is a shame though. He would have lived to such a ripe old age, had a delightful trio of children for you to bribe with toys and candy,” the man stated, sounding like he was almost sad.
I just blinked in surprise at what he said. That was oddly specific. David had told me multiple times that he didn't even want kids, let alone three of them. And the way he said that… it almost sounded like this guy was looking into the future or something akin to that.
“Okay my dear lad, would you like me to cut to the chase or shall I keep on chatting while you listen like you do to your grandmother, hmm?” The man gave me a toothy smile and I swear one of his canines looked longer than the other.
“Hey, I listen to my grandmother you daft old man,” I snapped at him. That insult only added more fuel to the fire as I glared at him. Yeah, my Mema tended to ramble but I still listened to what she had to say; I was the only grandki-
The man just grinned cheekily at me as I stopped my internal rambling. “Just get to the point!”
“I'm here to offer you a deal,” he said with a smile on his face and a glint in his eye, “A deal to help your brother.”
I was silent as I just stared at him. He may as well just have offered to turn off the sun. What the hell? How could he even help David if trained doctors couldn't?
“How in the world could you help him?”
“Look over at the nurses Keith,” he simply said with a smug look on his face and I did as he asked. Turning to look over at the nurse’s station on the other side of the room, I looked at the woman there behind her computer. Huh. There was nothing wrong, she was just typing something. Probably just mundane work stuff like a report or something.
“Look longer boy,” he said next to me as I kept looking.
Okay, I'd play along with him. As I watched the woman I started to notice it. She hadn't moved at all. No shifting in her chair, no looking at me for looking at her. Hell, she hadn't even blinked!
“Time is such an irresistible plaything,” he said in an utterly calm tone as I turned back to him and noticed his eyes had changed. The whites had turned green. “Just stop the seconds from ticking and so many ample opportunities are presented for you to use.”
The man; well, now it was debatable if he even was one to begin with, laughed a little as I looked at him in horror. “Relax Keith, I'm not here to hurt you at all. If I was, I'd have turned that coffee into solvent or something equally ghastly.”
“T-then why are you here? Wh-what are you?” My voice cracked a little as I promptly put down my coffee; trying not to look scared shitless and probably failing horribly.
“I’ve already told you what I'm here for. As for who I am, well, you can simply call me Discord.” He gave me a toothy smile. Okay, Discord is the name of the thing currently scaring me shitless, good to know!
“Y-you can help my brother?”
“Well, if you wish to be technical, I can help you help your brother,” he said, poking me in the chest to emphasize the point.
I jumped back a little at his prodding and stared at him in confusion. Help me help him? There was nothing I could bloody well do to wake David up from a coma! Unless this Discord was going to give me bloody magic powers or something like that, I couldn’t see how in the world he could help me.
“W-what do you mean by help me help him?”
“Exactly what it says on the tin dear boy,” he answered with a low chuckle that definitely sounded fiendish as he popped his neck. “I'm offering you a deal many don't get to see in their lives, no matter how hard they beg or plead of me. I'm offering to heal your brother to the peak of physical condition if only you sign this.” Reaching into his pocket, Discord pulled out what looked to be a folded up piece of parchment. “Just sign this and I can promise you both your fates will change forever.”
I stared in surprise as he handed me the paper and I unfolded it. What the hell! For what I knew, a goddamn daemon had just handed me a contract to sign, claiming ‘it'd change our fates forever’. What's to say he wouldn’t drag me to the depths of hell to be some butt slave to Satan or something.
“I… I dunno,” I said, my voice filled with trepidation as I began to read the paper. I groaned as I realized it was almost all a load of legalese on top of more legalese. I wasn’t sure if half of the damn thing even was in English! Of bloody course, it'd be confusing as hell to read; there's probably some soul selling catch in there somewhere. “I… I don't think I can take your offer…”
“Oh alright then Mr. Hoard, but if you want to turn down the only option for your brother to ever wake up again, I'll be on my merry way.” With a dramatic sigh Discord stood up, taking the document away from me before he slowly started to walk away.
“Wait!”
I stood up as soon after he'd taken a few steps. Damn it! I.. I couldn’t turn that opportunity down! I didn’t know what the fuck this Discord was but if he could stop time… maybe he could fix David and wake him up? Who bloody cared what the cost would be if it helped him. Even if I ended up a daemonic butt monkey, it'd have saved his life.
“I… I'll sign it… if only for David.”
Discord gave me another low chuckle as he turned to face me again. “Oh the things love for family makes one do. But, as I'm sad to say, the contract expired five seconds ago… however, we can shake on it if you'd like?” With that, he held out a hand.
All of a sudden my courage disappeared as I stared at his hand.
“Going once….”
Goddamn it! Just shake his bloody hand!
“Going twice….”
Goddamn it! Shake his fucking hand! Do it for David, damn it!
“And the deal is go-”
I took his hand and shook it as I looked at him. “Fine, we have a deal but you better heal him or else.”
As I said that, he began to chuckle and took over the handshake. Holy crap, he had one hell of a grip! After a few seconds, I tried to pull my hand away but he wouldn't let go. “Could you let my han-,” the words died in my throat as I could see the sleeve of my coat start to smoulder.
Discord started to chuckle as I looked at him in horror. I tried to yank myself away but couldn't move at all as my arm grew unbearably hot. “What the hell!” I cried out as I kept yanking at my arm.
As I watched in panic, the feeling in my arm started to fade before I could feel anything at all in my arm. The panicking turned into full blown terror as my arm detached at my shoulder!
“What the fuck!!!” I screamed as he let go of the severed limb and it fell to the floor before turning to a pile of ash.
“Oh maybe I should have mentioned the fine print.” He grinned, pulling the contract back out of his pocket. Snapping his fingers, a pair of old lady’s reading glasses popped into existence on his nose. He let out a short cough, apparently ignoring the fact that I was turning to fucking ash in front of him.
“By signing this contract, the signee agrees to relinquish their soul to the issuer. In exchange for this, the signee’s Vitae will be transferred to the subject. This is non-negotiable and will go into effect immediately after signing.” With that, Discord snapped his fingers again and the contract vanished in a puff of colorful smoke.
By now, almost all of me was numb. I couldn't even feel my body below the neck as he looked at me with a smile and spoke again.
“Well, my dear Keith, that means your soul is mine,” was the last thing I heard before my senses faded into blackness.
beep… beep…. beep….
As I came to, the first thing I heard was the steady beeping of a pulse monitor. Oh thank God, that had to have been a dream. I must have passed out; the stress or something had to have made me faint and I’d had a horrid nightmare. There's no way that could have been real. That had to have been a dream…
As I slowly opened my eyes, all I could see was a blurry white above me. Blinking several times did help, but my vision was sure taking its time to clear up. My damn contacts must have fallen out and I was as blind as a bat without them.
Grumbling a little under my breath, I couldn't help but notice my voice sounded a wee bit higher than it did normally. Laying there, I started to feel something weird behind my back.
Well, weird might not be the correct word. It felt exactly like that oh so annoying sensation of your arm falling asleep, but that wasn't it. The fact the feeling seemed to be coming from behind me was what was odd. It wasn't on me, yet it felt like it was.
My vision had cleared enough to see now as I looked about the room. I was most definitely in a hospital bed; the ugly white walls and medical equipment told me that much at least. But the hospital wouldn't do that for someone simply passing out; well, not without charging me an arm and a leg for it at least.
Smacking my lips a little, I shifted in the bed and wiggled up into more of a seated position. Huh, they covered me with a blanket at least. How nice of them. Looking down at myself, I smacked my lips a few more times before I realized I had that gunk built up in the corners of my mouth and pulled up my arm to whi-
That wasn’t my arm.
It was still kinda human; had a hand and everything but that's where the similarities ended. Instead they were slender and covered in soft brown fur. Lifting my other arm into view only resulted in the same thing coming into view as I just gawked. Did that mean?
Slowly reaching a hand up to my face, touching my cheek revealed the same thing. I was now covered in fur.
“What the hell is goin-,” I said aloud; well, more rasped out as my throat felt like sandpaper. But that wasn't why I stopped mid sentence.
I sounded like a damn girl. What in the hell was going on??
I needed to see the rest of my body. I had to see what I looked like. With a feeling of dread building in my stomach, I pulled away the blanket.
Long brown legs and a red tail disappeared into a hospital gown as the gown bulged at the chest with a pair of breasts. My eyes must have been the size of dinner plates as I started to hyperventilate. Houston, we have a problem; a very big fucking problem. And a feminine scream tore itself from my lips.
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Oooh is this a fic by BLUE MOON?
Hmmm I shall give this tale a read!
Jolly good start, keep going.
Wee bit fast paced
Hm... I have to agree with mango. The chapter, while interesting is... a bit too fast paced. There's no time or idle thoughts for the reader to mull over before being hit with more heavy information.
this seem good I well have to keep an eye on it :D
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Before I start reading, just wanted to point out : the gender pronouns switching is very confusing and will quickly turn off new readers. Having typos in the story description is a big red flag as well.
People won't put much effort into reading/caring about a fic if they think you don't care enough to proofread your own work.
8027117 I can guarantee that the actual story text has been thoroughly edited and proofread.
But of course you're right... one can't see that by looking at the description.
Sorry, I'm not a fan of TF/TG stories.
So... Is this a transport to equestria story, if so I'm going to list out some of the things this dude gave up for family.
Berserk,
No Evil,
Rewatching 'UNO the movie' for a fifth time
Meatspin,
All of the abridged series's.
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Yeah, it was a wee bit faster paced than I'd like to admit but why, it is just the prologue
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I will
Well, I can say that the next few will definitely be slower than this one.
8027117
My attempt to be witty failed
8027321
Well, then why did you read it?
8027416
And his dangling bits too
8027643 And you're just a noob :3
8027689
Im not a noob... Just a little out of practice
8027706 NOOOOOOBBBBAAAAAAAAAAAA
This is mighty interesting please don't stop.
8027708
Nuuuu
8027768
Oh, I won't don't worry
8027780 yuss
8027780 okay but I do have a question does Keith become an Alicorn?
oh discord, you best hope that contract never gets called out, handshake and signing don't matter, magical law man, if it's for the soul it needs to be signed in blood.
It would seem that i don't need the inquisitorial shovel Just yet...
8027911
Nope, just a pegasus. But more of that shall be revealed next chapter
8028011
Oh boy, I actually forgot about that XD
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Heh, well, it's only just began.
8028098
can't wait not many stories like this that show such possiblity. I hate to sound rude but do you have an estimated date for the next chapter, it’s fine if you don't? I understand what it's like to have writer's block.(
) But like I said this shows much potential.
you have my attention and a like
also do you have a set update kind of pattern or is whenever you feel like it and have chapters done? feel free to not answer to avoid people nagging insanely for chapters and causing stress that leads to depression and hate of lifen
(im fine just drama 
)
Subtle fallout equestria reference? Hmm, could it be...
the main character has the same color patterns as a certain Pegasus named Calamity?
8028098 I was expecting you to say something about my abstention with shovels
8028296
Not exactly XD
But didn't realize that XD
CHSSHHT This is Huston, we have confirmed a loss of shit, please standby CHSSHHT
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To answer both of your questions in one go, I'm not the kind to set a timetable but I can say that I'm attempting to set aside a little time each morning after work to do a little bit of writing. Granted all my progress this morning on the next chapter was just out dear protagonist going "STOP F
KING SCREAMING" to himself mentally 
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Well, I did have to resist the urge to mention slannesh in the whole daemonic buttslave thing
8027643 The TF part I don't mind. It's the TG part I wasn't so sure was in this story.
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Yeah, it did kinda pop in last minute
8028638 ok thanks for that bit of information, also that sounds like most peoples reactions to something abnormal for them so you nailed that
8028702
Of course
Pretty interesting so far. I'll be tracking this.
8029196
You do that my good man
It's too early to say, the introduction is good.
8029196 Why must you never give me good comments on my fics? D: D: D: D: D:
8029623 I do though! :/ :/ :/ :/
Edit: I missed one: :/
8031336 but you duuuuunt :'(
I cri daddy
Go on with this one, please yes!
Some decent suggestions in the comments as well. Pacing should slow down a bit.
I will be honest, the title is kind of bland .-.
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Don't worry it'll.be slowed down next chapter definitely
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Well so is Trigger
8032962 I say bland because of lot of human into pony stories start with "Becoming."
Also I demand an update all friggin ready you nub
8031344
A strong start.
Premise is a bit tired, must admit, but lifted by solid writing. Especially nice to see the 'deal with Discord' premise done for something so noble as saving a family member.
Hoping to see this continued soon.
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Yeah, tis an overdone concept but hopefully my plans for it'll make it unique enough.
I definitely enjoyed this. Although, I'll admit it would have been nice to see a transformed protagonist do something other than scream for once, it was otherwise very solid.
8037476 If you'd flippin update it .-.
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I was busy all weekend :|
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Yeah, I admit it's cliche but it's better than ooohhh boobies,let's play with them!
Besides I wanna keep a teen rating