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Majin Syeekoh


[9/12/2016 10:17:06 PM] Obselescence: god is dead [9/12/2016 10:17:10 PM] Obselescence: syeekoh killed him


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Twilight breaks into Starlight’s room to figure out why she locked it.

Now she’s in, and regretting every second of it.


Reading by Steven1992 and Scribbler!

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Umm wow :rainbowderp: was a very good read :rainbowkiss:

gross violation of privacy

And yet there's a princess who enters ponies' dreams. Yeah, nice contradiction Twilight.

For such a...disturbing, shall we say premise, it's very funny and rather well done.

This was absolutely hilarious :rainbowlaugh:

7974016 Thanks!


7974026 Funny how Equestria works, isn’t it?


7974049 Not an unexpected reaction, to be honest.


7974052 Again, compliments are appreciated.:twilightsmile:

7974071 And thank you, as well!:pinkiehappy:

7974076 wow, that's a quick response :rainbowderp: and Your welcome:twilightsmile:

7974082 I get super nervous whenever I post a story.

7974084
Why would you be nervous? (I mean, I get the same way, but your stories are always awesome<3)

7974113 Habit, I guess.

Hard to break ingrained habits.:twilightblush:

That was awesome.

I look forward to reading more of your work.

:moustache: "Glad she caught you and not me and my stash of stuff..."
:duck: "I didn't make that plushy for nothing"
:pinkiegasp: "Look at those guns! Wowzers!"
:flutterrage: "Discord has video"!
:twilightoops: "AJ Spike wants all the gals" chugs the cider
:ajbemused: "more like all the mares get Spike..."
:facehoof: Face plants into open cider barrel.
:rainbowhuh: "Leave some for me!"

It's stupid but not a bad stupid. It's a good stupid. It made me crack a smile and it was entertaining. Good job

7974133 Smiles are always a goal I strive for.:yay:

I am greatly amused!

Haha, you perfectly captured Spike's naivety. :rainbowlaugh:

7974170 Yeah, Spike was super fun to write in this story.

Extreme tendencies of love expression.

7974245 Isn’t it sweet?:pinkiecrazy:


7974314 Yeah p much

7974314

Appropriate avatar.

Crazy minds think alike, I suppose. I'm glad Spike has someone who openly appreciates him. His fragile ego could use it.

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You start a sentence with the word "now" three times in four paragraphs. Might wanna work on that.

7974367 It’s literally three different characters saying that, but I understand how that can seem repetitive in prose.

I’ll make sure to watch out for that in the future. Thank you for pointing out something that I can work on concerning my writing. I certainly appreciate that you took time out of your day to read through my story and point out something I can improve upon out of what I assume was an honest desire to help me.:twilightsmile:

Zyrian
Story Approver

Um. Excuse me for a second.

Freaking what?!

7974384 I’ll let you believe what you wish; it doesn’t affect the story either way.:scootangel:


7974404 It’s exactly what it looks like.:eeyup:

7974318 By sweet you mean dangerously pursuing the person thy love via perverted means then yes it's sweet.

7974424 I completely agree with the sentiment you just expressed.

This is a novel mix of edgy and farcical which you haven't done in these proportions before. I'd say it's more amusing than your average but it had scope for a couple more laps which might have intensified the reaction. (Maybe something culminating in Starlight Glimmer defending her voyeurism by noting that Luna doesn't take her dream warding job so seriously purely from duty :trollestia: and Luna backing her up because Starlight managed to let her stalk Nightmare Moon or something :trixieshiftright: )

But that's just me being greedy. It works and I'm glad you wrote it.

Though I'd be curious if you explored why she has practice in stalking, possibly from a more serious angle. Some poignant trauma over Sunburst maybe which made her feel repulsive to others? (and explains her abrasiveness in Our Town...because she gave up on trying to be socially graceful since it couldn't outweigh her inner hideous?)

(yes, I still love the Guilt story and can't help wishing you'd do more like it even though clearly that's not the frame of mind you're in the vast majority of the time :twilightblush: )

7974467 I’m glad you enjoyed it for what it was.:twilightsmile:

And yes, my inclination is far more towards the making people laugh hemisphere, and failing that making them question my sanity.

Well, thanks. Now my dog is pissed at me cause I woke him up laughing.

7974510 Can’t please everyone, I guess.:unsuresweetie:

Glad you enjoyed it, though!

I laughed, and it's very much in line with the way you depict these characters and this world, and I absolutely love sociopathic Starlight when you write her that way, but...

All I could think of while reading this was that episode of Dif'rent Strokes with the bicycle man.

7974599 I will fully admit to coming up to within a nanometer of that line when writing this story.

I’m glad you were still able to find it humorous, though.

I'm calling the police.

I laughed because I'm a bad person.

I'm also slightly uncomfortable with myself for finding this hilarious.:twilightblush: That's good, so kudos.

7974663 I think Neil Gaiman once said something along the lines of we’re all horrible people pretending to be good people, so I assure you that you’re in good company.

Not what I expected.... It's better! :rainbowlaugh:

...So does Starlight make collages of ALL her friends?

7974806
Starlight's just lucky Twilight didn't see her collage... that's why it was placed in the closet.

This is soooo meta, it's like Twilight is looking at bronies and find them weird, but at the same time, they're not that weird, damn that sooo deep.

I also laughed. I don't know why but I laughed. Good job.

“Well, it’s not like I have control over how he positions himself while he’s asleep,”

That's too much informations, I don't want to hear more, plz have mercy. :pinkiecrazy:

7974666

Except for the ones of us that don't pretend...

Sanity questioned. But, is it my sanity or yours?

*hugs tight* Fantastic one shot Syeek!

I can't even :rainbowlaugh:...!

Since somehow no one's said it yet:

Goddamnit, Syeekoh.

7974026 Also, she just entered a locked room which she was asked not to enter.

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