• Member Since 13th Jul, 2013
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StrikeJMT


Well, I'm more of an editor than a writer. But that won't stop me from trying.

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During the age before the rise of Nightmare Moon, Humans raged war on Ponies, Miniatures

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ah shit nigga

not the miniatures

D:

7973970 Don't fuck with those miniatures.

They can fuck shit up but hey, we've got out own.

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During the age before the rise of Nightmare Moon, Humans raged war on Ponies, Miniatures, Griffons, Dragons, and Zebras alike for centuries on end.

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Not bad keep up the awesome story and youll get my favorite rating.

7974685 They don't like the name little people.

Why cliffhangers good chapter tho

This story is amazingly misanthropic. The premise alone makes it unworthy of more likes than dislikes.

I'm going to read your story now

Well I'm sold you got a good story started even if your chapters are shorter than I'd like

7976511 I understand the chapters are, well, short. This will only last till about chapter 10. After that, you can expect an average chapter length of about 5,000-10,000 words

Pretty good now lets see how he likes timber wolves.

Mmmmwwwwaaahahahahahahahahahahaaaaaaaaaaaa:trollestia:

Interesting story. I can't wait to see how you continue things and what happens to our protagonist.

Ahh so faust will be a character in this story.

Keep up the great work.

So the misanthropic and misguided premise only exists as a way to have your main character be the only human in Equestria? There were so many other ways you could have approached this beyond tossing your entire species under the bus as a bloodthirsty genocidal horde. A teleporting accident. Magical accident. Explorer misplaced. Time travel. SO many other ways.

7991581 Are you insisting that I should have done what literally every other HiE writer has done? I never promised a happy story, or a happy ending.

Awesome. I love the introduction of frostbite. I can't wait to see what happens as the story goes on and now we know Grey's name is actually Jon.

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You seriously think no other human in Equestria writer has gone the misanthrope route? That's like half of all the stories.

" It was started by the humans, during the age when Luna and Celestia were both children. The humans had no sympathy, no care in their hearts. They sought out to destroy as much as they could, not for gold, power, or honor, but just because they could."

You expect the audience to BUY that?! That goes against basic human civilization, basic human LAW and basic human DECENCY. That's so blatantly misanthropic and misguided and wrong.

7992329 No. I don't expect you to buy that. I expect you and the rest of my readers to have realized by now that I don't give away all the answers in the first five words. Understand that just because something is stated, even if the characters are to believe it's true, doesn't make it fact.

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I bet its gonna turn out where the humans were framed by changelings who took their form to start the war.

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Even if you went the route that "I hate haters" suggested, do you not realize how problematic even that is? Because now you've basically just set up a scenario where all these species committed genocide of an entire race based solely on the manipulation of somebody else. What exactly are they supposed to do with that information, and what exactly are they going to say to the one survivor of that race? "Oops, sorry? Our bad?"

That's sort of scenario would be zero comfort to the trillions of innocent people slaughtered. Not to mention the fact that it is still an emotionally sleazy and manipulative way of creating only one person to be put down in this magical land. It's sort of equivalent to the "girl stuffed in the refrigerator cliché." Horrific act of unspeakable proportions as backstory. That's sort of thing is very over done. It just comes across like you honestly couldn't think of any other way to get your character Into Equestria so you went the genocide route.

That comes across as very uncreative to me. And immensely disrespectful to thousands of years of human history, human culture, and human creativity. There were so many other, better ways you could've had your character end up in this magical land that didn't involve pointlessly slaughtering billions of people.

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Well I'm sorry you see it that way. I do have the explanation planned out, as well as many other answers to questions that seem to be ignored for the better part of right now. I can't guarantee what I have planned is going to change your entire look on this story, but please know I'm not just crapping out words at random. I've had the idea for this story for the better part of two years, and just now got around to writing it.

Thank you for speaking freely about how the misanthropic route has been overdone, and seems like a blatant waste of creative writing, but I implore you and other to continue reading. If not for the sake of possibly enjoying the story later, than so that I can continue to view criticism for future projects.

YOU DON'T BELONG HERE MONSTER Had been written in blood on the sheets.

That just mean! :flutterrage:

I understand that, and I'd say you're safe as could be here. It's MY people I'm worried about. Princess Luna has told us that not all humans are monsters, but that doesn't rule out that most were.

No they weren't! If they were, there wouldn't have been 7 billion people running around the planet! People who do awful crap are the EXCEPTION, not the rule!

For some reason i was thinking they took a shit on his bed.

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Don't go giving me ideas, lest I use them. :ajsmug:

I realized the picture was the wookie huts of kashyyyk on first glance.

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Nice eye, was it easy to picture it by my words without the visual reference?

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I would like to point out the the possibility that it's all propaganda, a la WWI&WWII posters. Didn't we say the same things about Nazi Germany, even though, while the terrible monsters did exist in positions of power, they did not make up the entirety of it's military? Now, having not read this fic yet, this is entirely speculation on my part, but I believe that the possibility still bares looking into.:twilightblush:

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Anatomy mainly. That may seem like a weak or "easy way out" answer, but I don't want to spoil anything early.


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Better then humanized in my opinion.

Well shit. Let's hope for the best but prepare for the worst.

Did you intentionally make it so that Jon said the first part and Frost said the last part?

8152837 Also I like your profile picture

Oooooo. This is good.

"...Tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift, that is why it is called the present."

Whoever gets what this is from wins an almond cookie.

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