A Beach Mystery

Pinkie Pie loses Applejack at the beach, and enlists Rarity's help to try and find her. As it turns out, Applejack didn't go far... in fact, she's under Pinkie's nose...

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AstraPony

AstraPony #1 · Mar 15th, 2017 · · ·

Really funny! Keep up the good work Derpy, err I MEAN DITZY!!! dang it!!!!! Sorry...

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare #2 · Mar 15th, 2017 · 1 · ·

8025049 Thank you so much! It doesn't matter which name you call me, I'll answer to both. In fact, a dear friend of mine lovingly calls me Bubbles.

AstraPony

AstraPony #3 · Mar 15th, 2017 · · ·

8025064 ok BUBBLES. Again, keep up the good work. I look forward your next story!

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare #4 · Mar 15th, 2017 · · ·

8025095 Thank you

MidnightShy21

MidnightShy21 #5 · Jun 26th, 2017 · · ·

Haha! This is so funny!

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare #6 · Jun 26th, 2017 · · ·

8257432 Thank you

billykilly

billykilly #7 · Aug 8th, 2017 · · ·

XD, Good story!!!

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare

Ditzy Doo - Mailmare #8 · Aug 8th, 2017 · 1 · ·

8353665 Thank you!

EverfreePony

EverfreePony #9 · Jun 7th, 2019 · 1 · ·

A nice, simple evening read The rather heavy exposition and telling, as well as the characters’ naïve behaviour made it seem a little childish, but I have a feeling that was intentional. So, as a childish comedy, it is pretty good, with great ending Also, watch out for inconsistencies in tense use. Write the story either in past or present tense, and don’t switch between these two.