Interview with a Monster

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Hot Scoop is a young up and coming reporter for the Equestrian Journal assigned to a task no one at the office wanted to do...interview the newly re-imprisoned Lord Tirek in Tartarus following his magic stealing rampage on Equestria.

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Call Me Hot Scoop · 19th Feb 2017 · 1,408 words
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"Preparing for the Interview" · 21st Feb 2017 · 1,240 words
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"Facing the Beast" · 22nd Feb 2017 · 1,246 words
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"No Regrets For What I Done" · 24th Feb 2017 · 1,208 words
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"Was It Really Worth It?" · 25th Feb 2017 · 1,141 words
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Sky Blue CMC

Sky Blue CMC #1 · Feb 19th, 2017 · · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

KYLIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

twilightsparkle3562

twilightsparkle3562 #2 · Feb 19th, 2017 · · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7961097 Uh, pardon?

Sky Blue CMC

Sky Blue CMC #3 · Feb 19th, 2017 · 1 · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7961113 Partners in Time, on Yoshi's Island, Kylie Koopa meets a giant Yoshizilla named Yoob and what's the first thing that pops into her head? She wants to do an interview with it.

twilightsparkle3562

twilightsparkle3562 #4 · Feb 19th, 2017 · · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7961121 Sorry, I don't watch anime.

Sky Blue CMC

Sky Blue CMC #5 · Feb 19th, 2017 · 1 · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7961173 It's a game.

twilightsparkle3562

twilightsparkle3562 #6 · Feb 19th, 2017 · · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7961176 I see.

Unimpressive Chaos Lord

Unimpressive Chaos Lord #7 · Feb 20th, 2017 · 1 · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

The idea is not bad, in fact, it could be excellent. However, I find some flaws with the execution. First off, the pacing is a bit off.
It all goes to fast. There's barely any kind of transition between the office and Ponyville, and that scene goes by so quickly it's hard to get a good grasp of it.
The format could also use some work, but that's just my opinion. I believe the best way to to this would be writing it as an actual article for a newspaper. Use them for inspiration and try to adapt that writing style. I think that would make this story much more interesting.
As it is, I think it's just mediocre. I think you can do better. Now, don't take this the wrong way; I´m not trying to dash your hopes into the ground or being mean just because I´m an asshole. I'm trying to help you.
Anyway, keep trying, I still think something good could come out of this.

twilightsparkle3562

twilightsparkle3562 #8 · Feb 20th, 2017 · · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7963192 No, No, I don't think you are being mean about it at all. This is just part of the business of being a writer...to hear criticism.

Unimpressive Chaos Lord

Unimpressive Chaos Lord #9 · Feb 20th, 2017 · · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7963411
I'm glad to hear you can take criticism well. Still, I still believe you could make something great out of this story.
However, I'd recommend you to start over again, or at least, re-edit the first chapter before continuing. I'd love to be an editor to your work, but unfortunately English isn't my mother tongue and I'd do a rather poor job at it. Still, keep trying. I know you could be great.

twilightsparkle3562

twilightsparkle3562 #10 · Feb 20th, 2017 · · · Call Me Hot Scoop ·

7963445 Well, I'd like to see you take a crack at it with your editing skills. Nobody is perfect and all that I ask of you is for you to do is to do your best. Do you have Google Docs?

Unimpressive Chaos Lord