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The universe has fallen into the crutches  of the Jack Matter Shogunot and the inhabiants cry out in sorrow. the last planet yet to be conquered, Earth. Jack Matters power has proven to be grater then the magical power of friendship blessed to 7 young girls. With the threat of the universe being trapped in the clutches of evil the earth has one last chance to fight...

Teenagers with attitude

Given the power of the stars, nine heros make the last stand to free all 88 star systems. the rebellion has started among the cosmos, with a little luck and the power of friendship this team of unlikely heros will become the shining stars everyone will look upon and give hope to.  

Our Friendship will take on the universe, KITA!    

First Published
18th May 2017
Last Modified
18th May 2017

Great job!

Oy, wrong universe for the Kita

>>8173848 it's high school kids, space, and friendship, I think the Kita is alowed


Ooooh~ I assume the other 4 members will show up as extra heroes later?

(Should I say it?)  Um, I think you mean "break" instead of "brake" in the chapter title.  Though I liked it, I almost didn't read it—quickly edit-sweep at least the story's description before posting to not scare away potential readers with "this grammar will be unreadable" impressions (I found 9 errors in the description alone not counting term translation choices).

Also, though I have other hopes, this is probably a lot like what Power Rangers would do with Kyuranger if it used the season.

>>8174436 yeah I had a power rangers adaptation in mind as I wrote this

Interesting story. Have to ask the picture has 5 hands. Who is the fifth character?

So we get five with Yellow being female.

Wonder who you got plan to be the reaming four (will 7 if not more)

well there is only one thing to do now.

Can't wait to see what comes next.

>>8174695 If they are the ranger's hands, then the characters are Flash Sentry (the dude who likes Twilight Sparkle), Bulk (the big pony known for yelling "OH YEAH!"), Aria Blaze (one of the Dazzlings), Sweet Leaf and Comet Tail (the last two, I assume, are background ponies without character tags, so here are some pictures. I couldn't find a picture of Comet Tail as a human, though):


>>8174458 It looks like the story has a great start! (Just one little thing: the word "break" is still spelled wrong in the chapter title. You mixed up the e and the a.)

I think "braek" is the least of the author's worries. Jack Matter I can understand, preferring Jark myself, but a "shogunot"? Yeah, I'd highly recommend you get an editor. Until then, as much as I enjoy Kyuranger so far, I can't, won't vote up or down.

>>8182260 I actually do, they just didn't do it for the description

Or your own profile, for that (jark) matter, haha.

Seriously though, the simple fact that the description -and- chapter name are still unedited does not speak well for how much you seem to care about the quality of your work. That doesn't mean you don't care, mind you, but that it -looks- that way. Impressions are important, and if a story's synopsis and such looks sloppy, that doesn't inspire much confidence in the actual story.



Poison Star = ???

Trick Star = Trixie Lulamoon(?)

Silent Star = Maud

Speed Star = Rainbow Dash (Assuming Raptor isn't in here too)

Dragon Ma-Star = Xiao Longbow (Because he happens to still be in here)

Big Star = Button Mash(?)

Also, you totally got the Link-Tama from Kamen Rider Fourze.

>>8183071 yeah there may be a lot of stuff from forze

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