Spirit, after having migrated his herd further away from the approaching plague that is the society of the two-legged creatures, found his curiosity once again getting the better of him. This time with greater consequence.
Why are all these fillies and colts speaking the two-legged language and not his own? And they are so vastly different to his own kind, too! Horns? Wings? Some with both!? If Spirit thought two-leggeds were strange creatures, his own kin (sort of) is about to show them up!
1st / 3rd person story. Unedited and raw.
Chapters (4)
I luv it need more
Well, I do love fish out of water stories. I'll keep my eyes on this.
I remember this movie...
Color me interested...
The Prophecy is truth....
man sucks we lost Rain like that.
Spirit....
Such a great movie
I remember that movie. Man, this is a interesting idea for a cross over, though I do hope his herd gets back to him soon?
This has a pretty high ceiling of potential.
Never seen the film but you've peaked my interest. I hope you plan to continue.
MOAR, DAMMIT!!!!
What the? You start off this story by killing off Rain? What's wrong with you???? Other than that, it's a pretty good start and definitely has potential.
hmm I wonder how spirit will react to celeastia and luna
"Flying fast like an eagle"
Spirit's life goal is to become a pegasus. :)
Well this is interesting isn't it. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Celestia definately since she is his size.
Me seeing this update
Can't wait for more!
Well, with a 19/1 going for this and it being a childhood favorite, I shall follow and see where it goes.
I remember both watching the movie and playing the game. I simply love the idea of Spirit being in Equestria.
Keep it up!
(although being a bit more frequent would be absolutely awesome)
There happens to be a Spirit cartoon series on Netflix
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So I've heard. I've checked a few youtube clips but it just doesn't feel the same. And the animation... Maybe I'm just too old now. I couldn't get into the new TLK series either.
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Got to say, I was pretty surprised myself by that little tidbit.
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It wasn't a decision I took lightly, believe me. I toyed with having them both end up in Equestria at one point too.
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No I understand, it would have been significantly more difficult to write for two horses in Equstria, especially since we never really understood how she would react since we saw everything through Spirit’s eyes and know his personality mostly. So no problem on my end. 😊
Yup. Even unedited and raw, I like this.
And thus, the Herd begins.
yup...hopefully not so long for the next update.
Sure Spirit is happy to finally see "Adults". Though I honestly look forward to when he comes to under stand the girls are adult sized ponies, and just how strong compared to him an earth pony is. A 3rd the size and 3 times as strong, knowing that will be disturbing.
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Wrote this chapter while at work today, hopefully not too long again for the next!
What things are white and blue and go 'woof' ?
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Thus it's likely he get with either sister. for asm uch as the others might want hiom the size difference.
Just found this story. Great reading so far, I'm intrigued.
They are like children in his eyes it will never work.
Is thi updating again sooon i loved the movie so im excited about this
Well now, a continuation! The image of Celestia speaking primordial equestrian is quite amusing.
Also, Luna x Spirit... I can so see foals in the future
As an old fan of the film, you've gained my attention. Will Spirit take interest in Celestia or Luna? Or perhaps both? I'd assume Celestia, for proportion reasons, but it could work with Luna, too.
I hope to see more updates with this story, soon!
Admittedly I am a little nervous with the gaps of dates between your updates, though. Still, I can definitely relate with that.
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All of the yes
you sir.... have gained a follower and a fan, l eagerly look forward to more of this story
So basically the Princesses have never seen a "proper man" before?
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I've been a bad pony I know. With the last season around the corner I want to get this on a more consistent update schedule of some sort. With the influx of good comments like this, more reason to keep at it :)
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Precisely. When you only see smaller in stature stallions for hundreds of years, one that can match their height and is handsome as heck...
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Thanks! I aim for more frequent updates.
Nice job. Waiting to see how the language barrier is fixed. And what else is there to come.
Its an interesting story.
You have my interest, but I'm not sure how much you can do with this. Its basically a cave-man story, more or less.
The Monk
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Fair enough. Honestly, I just wanted to throw Spirit into the mix and see what happens/what I can come up with. It'll mostly be slice of life but who knows-- not even me!
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I can see slice of life working.
Monk
This is very entertaining! Can't wait to see more, as a fan of both MLP and Spirit: Stallion of the Cimarron. Please keep it up! :)