Title Says All. (Independence Day [U.S.] Special)
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Pegasus Lightning
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Likes and Comments! And lots of 'em
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Cool like that.
Good.
Critique, feel free to ignore if you don't want criticism.
Starts off well enough, but towards the middle the writing seems, rushed, like you gave up on trying to write a story, and just started throwing words on the page... and then the end gets spastic at best.
A good start though
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The object was to rush, as dreams ate quick and fast-paced. Anyhoot, wouldn't you prefer to be showered in awesomeness rather than wait for everything individually ?
Awesome story brony! 4/5 derps!
