Taking a Chance

Darren Brand has arrived at the day that he's been preparing for, with nothing but a simple letter, he takes his chance.

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Just Defender

Just Defender #1 · Feb 16th, 2017 · 1 · ·

I was hoping for Pinkie to have some more dialogue, but this was still sweet and emotional.

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darkstone57 #2 · Feb 16th, 2017 · 2 · ·

7952236 Thanks man

Dusk Melody

Dusk Melody #3 · Mar 14th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Sweet, emotional and above all, very real. I like real in the stories I read and you got it spot on in this. Pinkie isn't my favourite, but I like her in this.

Well done.

darkstone57

darkstone57 #4 · Mar 14th, 2017 · 1 · ·

8020650 Thanks. I try my best to work with the 'How would they react mindset'.

Question, would like to see more of this? Also, how's my first person writing? I'm not that confident in it.

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darkstone57 #5 · Mar 14th, 2017 · 1 · ·

8020650 And I just realised I did it again. I keep forgetting to put my stories under complete.

Dusk Melody

Dusk Melody #6 · Mar 14th, 2017 · 1 · ·

8020653 I liked it! I liked the perspective. It's not one that I usually do third person past tense as it's easier I'd like to see more of this though.

JacobMKeene

JacobMKeene #7 · Feb 14th, 2019 · · ·

Hello, I'm Jacob M. Keene, a voice actor and narrator. I just wanted to inform you that I did a dramatic reading of this fanfic on my YouTube channel, I voice Darren Brand, Agent Fluffy voices Sunset Shimmer, and MischiefRabbit voices Pinkie Pie, I hope you enjoy: https://youtu.be/WkkGn8Sz3jQ

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