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Coming from your recent string or moderately to unfavorably rated stories being published, as well as your story/follower ratio, I'd have to say that it'll probably be best if you slow down just a teensy bit, and work on better plot points for the story.
And I can't but think how you do this. The next question I'd ask is why. I guess things like this are bound to happen, I hope you get a kick out of this, because then, well... it really doesn't matter if I say anything, anyways. I guess you might as well be looking for an infamous name for yourself, but I don't know. What I know is that purposedly doing "something.", someone said is just teasing.
8129753 zhe next Story Writer
I like it. You're doing you.
8129823
Don't jinx it, we don't need another one.
8129849 atleast he isnt using a swastika profile pic
You start the sentence with present tense, and then switch to past tense. Stay consistent. You do this in about every paragraph. It makes the story painful to read, or even try to comprehend.
You do this thing throughout the WHOLE story, where you end the dialogue and then follow up with a comma. That's... something I've never seen before. The most original error I've ever seen, actually. Kudos.
All in all, this story is rather horrific. Just a stream of nonsense information that can barely be understood. Doesn't make any sense at all, read your story more than once before you post it, please.
someone please do an upgraded version of this the same way people are doing the same for Evictus's stories
So Lame is such a more suiting title.