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Amethyst_Dawn


A good story displays a moral, the best ones attach you to the characters who display them.

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Pinkie comes home after a visit to an old friend, but something seems to be bothering her. Something has wounded her, and Cheese wants to know what.

But he never could have prepared himself for what he was about to hear.

Gift for Summer Dancer


Special thanks to Tranquil Serenity for editing input.

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Comments ( 47 )

LOL GONNA GO CRY MYSELF TO SLEEP, BYE.

XD Sad, yes, but not obnoxiously so. Some of the grammar was a little awkward, but other than that, very nice! ^.^

7987961
Thanks! :twilightsmile:
Care to specify which sentences were awkward? :twilightsheepish:

7987977
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

And no problem. I'm just glad to be back. :rainbowkiss:

Wow... That was a really good read ^3^3^3^ I'm not really one for shipping of any level, but still, great work!

And I know this isn't clop, but goodness does the title make it out to sound like one :b

7987993
Thanks! :twilightsmile:

And dear Celestia, how did I miss that?! :twilightoops::facehoof:

7987997 :ajsmug:

Yush, of course! ^w^

7987997 Nice fic! Well, not nice, but good! Well, not good, but... you know what I mean!!! :trixieshiftleft:

Also, yeah, that title... wow. Just wow.

Tell you what, you're not the first person I've seen do that. IRL story here; I had a smart, very well-mannered friend in high school who wanted to start a book club with some of the other smart kids. He went to the principal with the idea, and came back to class later that day. I asked him how it went, he blushed and told me it didn't go as planned. I asked what he meant, he told me the principal had rejected the club because of the name.

Apparently, for some reason, NONE of the smart kids realized they made a questionable choice when they decided they wanted to name the reading club "Between the Covers".

My face afterwards :rainbowlaugh:. From then on, I always joked with him about when the club would be finished reading Fifty Shades of Grey.

7988172
Yes, I know what you mean. I tend to work with Dark, so I'll take whatever I get. :twilightsmile:

And... yeah. The title was supposed to represent the fact that she... well, you read the story, and I'll not put spoilers in the comments here, but I'm confident you know what I'm referring to. :ajbemused:

Though, I think it's safe to say that I made an unintentional innuendo... yet again... :facehoof:
I wish the internet let people have clean minds... :unsuresweetie:

7988188

internet

clean minds

Does not compute.

7988198
Thus is the sad fact of life... :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::raritydespair::fluttershbad::raritycry:

7988201 Embrace it my friend. Become one with the internets.

7988203
Forgive me, friend. But I have no interest in letting the internet corrupt my databanks any more than it already has. I think I'll stay clean as I can. :twilightsmile:

Okay...That...That was beautiful. Never have I seen CheesePie this serious, yet oddly serene. Amazing job, just amazing:heart:

7988433 I would like to post this on my blog if that's alright. I'm on my phone so I'd like to link to your page also as well as the story. UGH, phones and linking!!!

I am certain Cheese can find some fillies and colts that need a mommy like Pinkie.

... it's too early in the morning for my Feels to be kicked this hard... :raritydespair:

Well was a whole lot of sad.

Wow. Quite a story. But I'm with 7988491. This kind of tragedy can usually lead to the beauty of adoption. (spoiler just for spoilers sake)

Im sick and crying this do not help!:fluttercry:

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Well, I thank you all for reading it, and enjoying it. :twilightsmile:
If y'all are looking for something a little more lighthearted, I do have a few comedies. :trixieshiftright:

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Indeed... note taken, but I make no promises. :trixieshiftright:

Aw... :pinkiesad2:

Poor Pinkie :raritydespair:

If I may make a suggestion for a sequel to this; how about a short story where Pinkie is able to adopt a foal? There are plenty of poor kids out in the world who have lost families, and Pinkie could provide one for them. She's excited and eccentric, yes, but she loves and cares.

Oh wait, someone else already made the suggestion.

Sorry, it's just that after reading this, this came to me as the next best thing for a Pinkie wanting to have a family.

7989528
Indeed. :fluttershysad:
I take it you enjoyed it? :trixieshiftright:

And tell you what, these requests have given me an idea. Again, I'm not making any promises, but I'll see what I can do with it. :twilightsmile:

7989546 Okay. Sorry if it felt like we were pushing you.

And yes I enjoyed it. Tried to avoid some nasty thoughts that this subject brings, but it was a touching and unfortunately realistic (unfortunately in the sense that this does happen in real life, not in the sense that the story was made) tale.

7989556
Trust me, you have done no such thing: I am, in fact, beyond pleased that I can still leave my fans/friends wanting more, as it assures me that my work is appreciated. :twilightsmile::heart:

I'm glad, and thank you for specifying what you liked about it. :twilightsmile:
One question, though: nasty thoughts? :rainbowhuh:

7989565 Well, the infertility thing kinda leads to... those kinds of thoughts, as you 7988188 noted right here.

But it was a minor issue compared to the feelings that you were gunning for.

7989580
Oh, yeah. :facehoof::rainbowlaugh:

Well, I'm glad it was only a minor issue, then. :twilightsmile:

7989465 You're welcome. I will take a little looksee at your comedies :derpytongue2:

7992778
A) From now on I'd advise that you either memorize the alphabet, or at least take note of the differences between the letters T and M. :moustache:

And B) Hopefully, that'll teach you the benefits of a clean mind. :ajsmug: If you're looking for an excuse to defile yourself, it's best to look elsewhere. You'll find no such material in my workspace.

7992896
First off: apologies. In context, it sounded as if you were crying from disappointment in the lack of needless sexual material, as I noticed no clear signals that you enjoyed the story. With that in mind, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

A) No, I was referring to the fact that clop is identified with an M rating (not to mention a Sex tag), and this work is a T. However, since you yourself have brought up the issue of capitalization: just because it is 'nearly nonexistant', as you say, doesn't mean that it shouldn't be more present.

Fair enough, though Google has tried to autocorrect the word "Thorough" to "Kryptonite", so that's not really the best source of judgement.

B) Not necessarily, as you can be on the internet and still have a- for the most part -clean mind. For example, the fact that I wrote this story without any questionable thoughts or intentions.

Oh my...:fluttershysad: wow, this hit me really hard

7994252
Thank you. And thank you for reading. :twilightsmile:

Aw, that's so sad. :pinkiesad2:

A simple yet effective story overall. I can't imagine how terrible Pinkie must feel being denied something so special.

8007405
Thank you. And thank you for reading, and adding this to your library. :twilightsmile:

7992778 :rainbowlaugh: that comment made me laugh, i can see where you had that confusion

Good story

Typos:

He couldn’t see much of her face, but he did see her bit her lip nervously, and he noticed tears starting to build behind her eyes.

Bit should be bite

If he had looked, her would have seen a slight, yet sincere smile creep onto her lips.

First 'her' should be he

8055331
Thank you! And thanks for catching those. :twilightsmile:

Pinkie my dear, have you ever heard about adoptation? I know it's not the same as having a foal growing inside you but you still get to be a mother. You can either get a colt, a filly or even both

Anyway, really nice story

Proud of you, Amethyst. Was randomly skimming through stories to pass time, and came across this without knowing this was your work!

Sad, nice one and loved it! :heart::pinkiehappy:

Damn you for making me feel the feels.

Sad, and yet uplifting too. Poor Pinkie, and Cheese. But i'm glad he could say without hesitation that the only place he was ever going to go was with her. Felt right, good ending. Good short story. :pinkiesad2:

A sad thing for anyone to learn, but I actually think that Pinkie would make a wonderful mother; bright, kind and full of love - just the kind of attributes a mom should have. :pinkiesad2: It was sweet the way Cheese comforted his wife too. :pinkiesmile: Thanks for the read.

I have reviewed this here.

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