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Golden Glow has always been a feminine stallion, but how in the name of the Royal throne did he get elected as the princess of the country of Equestria? And it's not like he can back out early. He has to follow his Royal duties! He owes it to Equestria!

Chapters (12)
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got to love the 4th wall brakes

Awesome can't wait for the next chapter ^~^

I love the fan fic my wifu ^~^

Yeeeeeeeeeeeeee I love the story my wonderful wifu ^~^

AWWW This is so incredibly CUTE! Oh my gosh I am so jealous of Golden. This feels like a pony version of an anime where a pretty boy becomes the school princess (there's an anime like that, Princess is in the title). I really like the fact that everyone takes it as fact that Golden is simply the Princess and the only one questioning it is him. It's like a positive fantasy where everyone sees the beauty but he doesn't. I really like this type of goodhearted fantasy :)

Unbelievable, not only did I end up on the ballot for the princess, but somehow, ponies voted for me, for a Princess!

This is the only part of the story that speaks in first person. Now, this can work, but I would recommend putting it in italics so it stands apart from the next line which is in third person.

He looked at her confidently, "Back out? I would never back out! The ponies wanted me to be their princess, so I'll be the best princess I can be!"

"Your sense of duty make you even cuter!" The mare squealed.

Oh my gosh this is so anime I love it <3 <3

Golden SAT down at one plate, and Marble sat at the other.

i think SAT needs to be lowercase :P

"I expected a bigger table and more ponies for a Royal diner. But I guess this is okay." Golden said.

Marble giggled softly a bit, "They prefer to give the princess and her assistant privacy during diner. The staff and other residents eat in the banquet hall."

I like these little details which add to the story world. I'm a big fan of knowing how the rules and customs of the story create the interactions for the characters. Like "these are the rules. This is how we deal with them"

"Don't worry, I won't back out, you can count on that. But I'm not looking forward to meeting princess." Golden replied.

Marble laughed, "At least as far as we know, you only have to meet one prince to help out our situation with Saddle Arabia."

I think you mean "meeting princes" :P

Golden took off his dress, down to his lingerie, which still left him wondering how Marble dressed him to that degree without noticing he was male, and began to put on the silk pajamas on his bed. He actually enjoyed wearing these, they were extremely soft. He turned around, seeing his assistant in a similar set of pajamas, looking extra cute. The two proceeded to the connected bathroom and brushed their teeth. Once done, they proceeded to their beds and went to sleep.

Aww it's so sweet they sleep near each other. That bit of intimacy is very much envied by many readers. If you ever have any doubts about that, simply look at the top stories and how many are romance related :P

Marble quietly slipped into the bed and Golden wrapped his hooves around the pony who had obviously been more used to warmer temperatures. Before long, the two had warmed each other up to a very comfortable level, and they fell asleep with ease. This time, when he fell asleep, he dreamed of laying in the same location, only instead of an awkwardly romantic prince, he held a sleeping Marble closely, as the warm wind softly blew, letting the subtle movement in the clouds commence. This was a dream he could get behind. This was one he wouldn't mind being real.

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I really like this story! Good start! *HUGS*

8042395 Funny thing, it's actually heavily inspired off of a lot of anime and manga. One of the biggest inspirations it has is probably one of my alltime favorites: Dawn of The Arcana. While this one seems to have a very different theme, it does have a similar dream-like feel to it, only this story is far more comedic, whereas in Dawn of The Arcana, any comic relief through the narrative is heavily toned down and the overall tone is darker and more serious.

This is the only part of the story that speaks in first person. Now, this can work, but I would recommend putting it in italics so it stands apart from the next line which is in third person.

That's a good idea, I'll probably fix stuff once I get done reworking Aria.

Oh my gosh this is so anime I love it <3 <3

Heh, that reaction is very similar to many others I've received. Glad you're enjoying it so far.

i think SAT needs to be lowercase :P

This is what I get for writing my stories on a mobile device. I get Autocorrect telling me I'm wrong. But you know, apparently there's a very prestigious academic sitting down test, I guess.

I like these little details which add to the story world. I'm a big fan of knowing how the rules and customs of the story create the interactions for the characters. Like "these are the rules. This is how we deal with them"

I do and don't like that kind of storytelling. I like when it's explained, but I also like it when the world is shown to the reader instead of outright explained. I tried for something in between with this story.

I think you mean "meeting princes" :P

Dear Autocorrect, please go burn in he'll.

Aww it's so sweet they sleep near each other. That bit of intimacy is very much envied by many readers. If you ever have any doubts about that, simply look at the top stories and how many are romance related :P

Very true, though I will point out that, unlike a lot of romance, this one isn't an immediate thing. While I specifically made Golden and Marble cute together, they're not yet in a relationship. It's just not something I'm going to introduce quite yet. But the ship shall be canon before terribly long ;)

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Ssssssshhhhhh! DeviantArt might hear you!

I really like this story! Good start! *HUGS*

I'm glad to hear it. I'm actually enjoying writing it far more than any other story. I've gotten some fans of Aria, and I honestly like that I did that, but the chapters are so demoralizing to write, I find myself putting it off all the time. I think it would be different if Aria was more of a comedic fiction, but I'm not going to present that subject as a comedic story, that would feel like a mockery of it, you know?

7949635 Glad you're enjoying it, favorite person! ^^

7928563 Golden looked at the audience, hearing one fan speak up, "I know, right?"

7923154 "What?" The author said.

Golden looked up, "Wh-what?"

"Hmm?" Marble looked at the reader in curiosity.

Lily also looked past the fourth wall, "Huh?"

"Excuse me, did you have a question, by any chance?" Authority figure inquired.

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