Grandiose and Pessimistic

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Trixie struggles with getting up and facing the day.

Cover art by frist-guy.

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Majin Syeekoh

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Majin Syeekoh #1 · Feb 2nd, 2017 · 6 · ·

I like how you pushed the limits of the second person perspective in this fic to present a surprisingly powerful narrative that honestly caught me off guard.

I should really learn to pay attention to tags before I start reading stories.

Tatsurou

Tatsurou #2 · Feb 2nd, 2017 · · ·

Hmm...very nicely done. I certainly wasn't expecting this when I clicked, but I enjoyed it.

Level Dasher

Level Dasher #3 · Feb 2nd, 2017 · · ·

I like this take on Trixie. The narrative slightly reminded me of Deadpool with Crazy and Stuffy, but more like Narcissist and Depressed. Nice job!

Soufriere

Soufriere #4 · Feb 2nd, 2017 · 1 · ·

I was not expecting a second-person story (because I'm an idiot & didn't see the tag). Love the use of multiple voices to illustrate the turmoil within Trixie's mind.

This is seriously inspirational. (read: I learn from you so my work might suck less)

MythrilMoth

MythrilMoth #5 · Feb 2nd, 2017 · 1 · ·

That was a lot of fun.

badninja

badninja #6 · Feb 4th, 2017 · 2 · ·

I think you dealed with what could be Trixie's actual insecurities very well. I think even Twilight would reach out a helping hoof if she realized how hurt Trixie is. In a world with real magic any pony especially a unicorn would find it hard to work as a traveling stage magician. Still a great story!

Emperor

Emperor #7 · Mar 6th, 2017 · · ·

I gotta be honest: I didn't even really notice the second person while reading it. I don't know if that's the effect you wanted but that's the effect I had.

It's short and does a good job of capturing Trixie's insecurities, but it just doesn't feel like there was a solid feeling to her insecurities: that yes, the world has battered Trixie down and she doesn't feel like going out, but never was I given the idea her crippling anxiety was actually warranted, so Trixie's inner voice convincing her to go out didn't really faze me.

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