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Happiness is something sought by all ponies, and Applejack and her friends have been lucky enough to obtain it. They have everything they ever wanted, and all is right with the world. But in that case... why can't Applejack shake the feeling that something is amiss?
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Intriguing idea. Can't wait for more!
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I'm very glad to hear that! I'll see about buckling down on the next chapter.
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Awesome! Can't wait to read.
So far interesting. Get the sense that things are a little... too... perfect. Even for Ponyville...
That ending gave me the chills. Or possibly I should just close the window. One of the two.
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Thanks! I've been wanting to write that scene for a very long time. I'm glad you liked it. ^_^
Aww
Thinking out of all of them AJ
deserved her happier time the most, the others' dreams being more achieveable and ego-driven. Poor AJ.
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And thus, that's why she's the central character here. ^_^
Thanks so much for reading!
Wonder if anyone did a (YouTube) reading of this? Would be effective I think. Especially the "[character] was happy" part at the end of each section when read aloud.
Have you seen the Doctor Who episode Last Christmas? It uses a similar idea to the one here of a too-perfect life (basically same as here).
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Heh, it would actually be pretty awesome if someone ended up doing a dramatic reading. ^_^
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I haven't seen that episode, but I based this story on some other Lotus-Eater Machine scenarios. It's primarily a mixture of the Superman story For The Man Who Has Everything and Fate Testarossa's dream of happiness from Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha A's (mainly the movie version).
(For some fun, check out the Black Mercy from For The Man Who Has Everything and compare it to Alura Une)
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Oh wow, thank you! I'm really happy to hear that you enjoyed it so much!
Woah... This is already amazing! It really has me wondering though... What is that monster the Mane 6 fought?... What did it do to their memories of it? What's happening to Applejack? You can say that I'm hooked.
I'm pretty sure this will end up one of my top favorites once I finish it too.
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Yes! You're asking just the sorts of questions I hoped people would ask at the end of the first chapter! I'm very excited to see your thoughts on the rest. ^_^
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Awesome, thank you! Might I ask which parts you enjoyed the most?
Oh man, this is getting good. Sorry for the delay in my review Lance, as school has been really tight, but I'm already getting really invested in this story.
As much as I want each and everypony in here to be happy of their own dreams, it's obvious that something is WAY off, and whoever is doing this.....I don't know what to think of this. It's like something out of the Twilight Zone.
Or, if I want to get more macabre...the Matrix....
Sometimes for many, the source of happiness for us is what would lie ahead, of what we could be and what we can achieve.....
For others though, happiness can be what was left behind, what was lost...and the tragedy of that happiness is that it can never be had again....but it is not all sadness and pain of loss. The memories remind us of what we had, and thus we have to treasure them. :)
Now THAT is a heck of a villain. :P It reminds me of Spellbinder from Batman Beyond, who using illusions, created fantasies based on people's ultimate desires, but forces them to commit crimes in order to stay in those fantasies.
Unfortunately, Alura found out HARD that not all fantasies are achievable without being a lie....
Now THAT is a good story, and it has a great message to it as well.
While the past is a great source of happiness and living in it can help you avoid facing the pain of the future, true courage is learning to learn and live with the past being gone, and using it to move on to a better future.
Applejack's time with her parents is probably a memory that she will treasure forever and never forget, but the past is still the past, and we must move on if we are to continue to a better future. Well done Lance. Two thumbs....er...two hoofs up. XD
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Indeed, I figured that would be a nice little moment to warm the heart.
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Thanks for all your excellent comments, Xander! I'm stoked that you enjoyed the story. It's something that I've been thinking about doing for a while, and it's awesome to finally have it complete. ^_^
Hello my good man and or lady. You requested a review for the Reviewer's Café, no? Well, you asked and you shall recieve
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Thank you so much for the glowing review! I really appreciate it. ^_^
I suppose my only follow-up question would be: What did you think of the villain?
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would come back and attacked Ponyville with sentience. I mostly like that it was mysterious who was the cause of all of this until the reveal.
Thought that it was very unique that someone thought back to the vines that emerged from the Everfree in that episode that I can't quite get the name of at the moment
Her character and motives reminded me heavily of Chrsyalis. I didn't say anything in the review because I wanted it to be a surprise to anyone who would read the story after reading the review.
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Indeed, I assumed that was the case. I appreciate that. ^_^
Plunder vines. And yeah, they were most certainly on my mind when writing this, though they weren't Alura Une's primary inspiration. But who knows? Perhaps they played a part in her origin. Discord did spread a lot of seeds, and they lay dormant for over 1000 years...
Nice, that's what I was going for. Each of the mane six could remember a slight piece of the puzzle. ^_^
Yeah, there's really no getting around the similarities to Chryssy, with them both being female dark-coated pony-shaped emotivore monsters. To try and mitigate this, I attempted to make Alura's outward personality and demeanor as different as I could.
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This is also very similar to the djinn from Supernatural.
Recognized this plotline from the Justice League Unlimited episode "For the Man Who Has Everything." Overall, a pretty good adaptation. What makes it even more interesting is that in Superman's dream, he envisions himself to be a Kryptonian farmer. That's probably what inspired the adaptation, am I right?
Anyway nice job and well written. Almost no mistakes in syntax or grammer. A pleasure to read.
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Thanks for reading!
The initial inspiration for this fic was episode 15 of Digimon Savers, but as time went on, For The Man Who Has Everything did indeed become what the story primarily paralleled (including the Alura Une being a massive reference to the Black Mercy). Here and there it also draws certain elements from Fate Testarossa's dream sequence from the second Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha movie.
Believe it or not, Kal-El being a Kryptonian farmer and Applejack also being a farmer was actually coincidental. I chose Applejack for the focus due to her having one of the larger personal losses in her past (mainly due to fandom perception at the time, though The Perfect Pear would later vindicate that perception), thus her perfect fantasy dream would be the most poignant and tragic.