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Hey, awesome story! It was a great read that had me feeling for Ditzy and how she felt. You may want to look over the story as there are some spelling and grammatical errors throughout, such as "Derpy" being replaced with "Derby". All-in-all, a really nice read! :pinkiehappy:

Aw Derpy, never think yourself unimportant.:fluttershysad: Always listen to the Madman In a Box, he's always right. And if that doesn't help, remember that we absolutely adore you here in the fandom! (Gives hug)

I came on the site, and, while waiting for it to load, was for some reason reminded of Would it Matter if I Was, which was a popular story a while ago. Bear with me, this is relevant. I was seething to myself over the fact that the title should have been Would it Matter if I Were, when I happened to see this one. The title got it right! I read it on that basis alone. I wasn't disappointed, though. Touching little piece, I thought. Could do with one more proofread, but otherwise I'm impressed.

Darn autocorrect! I'll go back and proofread it as soon as I can. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Whelp, I've got it edited. No more "Derbys"!

Hng! And that's why DerpTop rules.

As much as I hate to say it

i hate this story

To put my feelings in short, the pacing is non-existent, and everyone acts so strangely that it comes off as unreal as hell, which you don't want in this type of story

:facehoof: I can't even right now.
Anyway, it's fixed.

Thanks for your comment; I'm always looking for constructive criticism. Do you have any suggestions on how it could be better?

Phew, just completely almost redid it.
I added things, got rid things, and hopefully polished it up. Trying to write a good story while nodding off is nearly impossible.
I hope it's better now! :pinkiesmile:

(Yes, I'm only just now getting around to reading it.) You seem to have opened an italics tag early on without closing it. Beyond that and a few typos, it's simple but nice.

Aw lovey fic poor Derpy great first meeeting the doctor

Wasn't bad. I saw it in my recommended and decided to take a look.

There are discrepancies though. Like derpy says people call her retarded, but the stallion says anypony.

Little things like that.

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