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Normally I enjoy a good second person perspective fic, but I think this would be much better if it wasn't second person. That's just me though.

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After reading the chapter, it's a good start, but once more I find myself torn on the whole 2nd person POV bit. It's mostly fine, but I think it would fit a tad better in the 3rd POV. Either way, it's nice to see signs of activity from you, glad to have you back once again. I'll be keeping an eye out for future chapters here.

Damn this guy has the mentality of a 4 year old and is narcissistic as fuck.

Are there other Humans in this story is it just this guy.

Probably missing something here

Is it wrong that I read in John Lequizamo voice with a lisp? Oddly familiar somehow though.

I've been reading your stories for quite some time...I've heavily enjoyed them all, especially This Magic Moment, I Can't Help, and With My Wonderbolt. But this story, the main character in particular, fell short in every possible way for me...which is a shame to me because the premise was really interesting. Sorry to say I won't be reading this one any further, I look forward to updates on your other stories though and wish you luck with this one wherever you take it.

2nd person does not work well with an unrelatable, very unlikeable protagonist. This reads like the worst of 4chan amalgamated with the worst of HiE 2nd person stories, to the point where I can't believe you expect people to take this story seriously. With a protagonist with no redeeming qualities, and the maturity of a 2 year old.

Also, going by your track record, the story won't be finished anyway and if it does it'll take years and years. So no point getting attached really even if one enjoys it, unless one likes disappointment.

That's way - i like it! Great start!

You good sir have sorely dissapointed me with this story the description promised something with great potential, but the inside is lacking.

Is this song kind of satire I'm not getting?, because it feels like satire.

I have put this in my "read it later" till second or third chapter is out, till then I will judge to fav or not. I pray that you will make me fav.

glhf

I'm glad to see you back in the writing game man but I just have to say...this guy is an unlikable asshat. I will watch for further chapters to see if the story goes in a better direction but this most certainly isn't the best first impression I've seen.

This is as good as chicken wings.

Mans not dead? This has me miffed. I thought you were gone?

I find it entertaining

Yup, I found it entertaining, too.
(Poor human! Confound this stupid ponies!)
I hope it will continued.



Found an small error:

surprise him a you did.

Should be "as".

I don't know what this is but I love it!

The problem with this story is that the main character is so whiny and annoying that he just isn't interesting. He neither draws us in with an interesting backstory nor does he have an interesting personality. This is firther complicated by the character's ridiculousness not being at the point where it is comedic and funny. That's probably why this story is not well liked, especially compared to the other 2 (Celestia and the MC are both interesting in TMM and Daring is usually interesting in ICH with the human having some of his own moments as well. I'm biased though as I love TMM).

Apparently I'm in the minority here because I think it's friggin hilarious so far

I like this and can not wait till I can read more.

I am curious as to which direction this will go.

But just look at the poor boy! He’s clearly retarded.”

I lost it for a good five minutes at that.

Oh man this is hilarious, please continue.

I think it's funny. Don't know where everything is going, but I like it so far.

That guy is plainly an idiot. Sure, can be amusing at times, but mostly came off as annoying... to a degree that I just skipped his dialogue lines just to get to everything else instead.
I'm not complaining to be honest, I just deal with the bad kind of stupidity by ignoring it :rainbowlaugh:

Either way, I presume that this is the pre-Nightmare era (considering that Nightie will appear there) and Luna had an inkling about what is about to come so she sent at least someone to the moon for future company. Contingency plans.
Mutual ego tempering abound, if what I said is correct (or at least partially)! :pinkiehappy:

I AM VERY EXCITED toread this more do not stop writing this because of somepeople's feedback. I LOVE THIS:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Well I'm interested to see where this will go, despite first impressions. I kinda pity the sad sod, he's clearly living a lie, and something tells me our asshat of an protagonist is going to have his fragile worldview annihilated once he runs into NMM,

To be honest, I was rather dissapointed at this fic at first, but now I wanna see how this guy will develop from douche to decent guy. Your stories are pretty fucking good, so let's see what magic you got here.

This is trash.

I can't understand how someone who has wrote this other stories could make up something like this? This isn't even satire. The humor is trashed and the stupidity is far too forced to even say its played for laughs. The main character is so childish, stupid, and unlikable that any form of character development is essentially impossible without completely turning him into another character.

Also the other characters are such one dimensional caricatures that even hopes one would have had in future content are essentially dashed. I would redo the story and make all the characters into believable, three-dimensional beings without trash 4-chan humor.

*insert skinner pathetic meme here*

Hey dude don't worry what the feedback says. Don't worry about what others think, and I for one enjoy this story. Keep it up fam

7910715 I understand the main character is not supposed to be likeable, but there's got to be a better way to portray that than irritating the reader. Also, the princesses felt very out of character.

7902937 He's done better than most authors of incomplete stories on my list.

7915613 Lol wtf, you replied to me not the story maker. XD

7915619 Please don't do that. I hate that , people should not use excuses to dismiss what is terrible writing. If someone wants positive reception they need to put the work in it for it.

What the actual fuck did I just read.... let me get this straight, he fucked Twilight... then called her a 6/10... is he bipolar, or is he just wierd.

This story made me chuckle so its good in my book... But please give the human more personality its funny at first but it will lose traction in the long run. Try to give your characters more personality..

I can see why people dont like this, as a second person fic this is rather demeaning. The MC is an idiot thus making the reader feel like an idiot. I however find the MC antics comedic and silly. I am not really offended because I dont need to relate to the MC in order to enjoy this story. As cringe worthy as this story is I will still read it. Please continue writing.

I like this, even if the main character's personality is over-board. Please continue.

It's so ridiculous it's funny. Anyone should be able to tell this is purely not serious and is for laughs. Keep it up, this is a good reprieve from more serious things.

I like it. I see the MC as orange with baby hands.

OK... I did laugh... (barely a whisper. If that still counts). But the story still feels off...maybe it's the 2nd person thing

The comments for this have been awful

ok i can see the character is a humongous asshole but just wait once the sex happens (that is why you marked it with sex and mature right?) then people will like it. i mean sure they will skip to the clop but still...I personally like it a lot this is a very interesting story to read :raritywink:

Both of them are so messed up they are praticly perfect for each other.

The character being so odd makes the fact that it's second person a not so great choice.

I love the fic regardless. I read it as first person because I'm so disconnected with the character. Other than that, this story is hilarious and very enjoyable. :twilightsmile:

Perhaps if you edit it to be first person, it'll receive more praise.

Is it so hard for a lot of people to see this is satirizing like, r9k-grade autists?

I know people like this in real life, keep writing.

I saw that you were also doing a more serious Luna fic, so as long as that one's in lieu of TMM's writing, do whatever the hell you want here, it's great.

I like it, it totally deserves a derpy seal of approval :derpytongue2:

As much as I can see what you were trying to go for, there's one huge problem with this...

Sure, stupid is funny, but it's too stupid to actually be funny

I hope someone is reading this and enjoying it.

I do!
This is simply hilarious!

I wonder if they will somehow manage to 'team up' or something...
They will habe about 1,000 years to work things out.

(And I wonder how she got here. Did she eat Celestia's cake?)

I understand it's intentionally being childish and I'm actually getting a chuckle out of it. It's turning into a cartoon in my head.

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