• Published 29th Jan 2017
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Fallout Equestria: And Hell Followed With Him - focait



Two centuries before the events of Fallout Equestria, a survivor of the Great War leaves his bunker.

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Comments ( 4 )

Damn....

got to say that i love this fic already.

Thanks for sticking with it!
Oh and dont be so hard on youre self this is a fan fiction not an essay! Please by all means take youre time. I know for a fact the finished product will only be better for it!:twilightsmile:

There we go, added to the fallout equestria groups so it can gain a few more readers

So nightmare night decor... I can't remember when the bombs was said to fall in FoE, but I do like that throwback to the Fo games, and seeing how you are brilliantly bringing the Wasteland to life so far can I not wait for a bit of nightmare night spookyness to enter the Wasteland

Normally do I not read stories with less than 5 chapters in them since I just catch up with the story way too quickly, and yet again were I tempted and are now sitting here waiting for more! But yea quality over quantity wins every day, so are looking forward to the next chapter, although I hope that we won't have to wait a full year until the next one

Nitpicks
"I wasn’t still getting shot at" I was not still getting shot at... sounds a bit clunky to me.
"even moreso then when I needed the peace and quiet to focus on tending my wound." Delete
" it should’ve left by then, I’d realised. Through the downpour, I heard hoofsteps above me. Many, many, many hoofsteps, now accompanied by the frantic flapping of wings" Linebreak errors galore
"hey lol it only took a year" Start with a capital, end with a period

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