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Maybe I'll upload something here. Maybe I won't. I haven't written fanfiction in a loooooong time.

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Rumble always loved fairy tales, but he never thought that he would actually get to meet their characters.

((Edited by Bronymaster))

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(Author's Notes)

I feel like I need to explain myself for this particular story, especially since it's so radically different from most of my other works thus far. This story as nothing more than an experiment out of curiosity. Usually I don't publish my first attempts at genres or tropes, but I thought that this particular piece might be an exception.

Maybe you'll like it, and maybe you won't. Whatever the case, I can at least attest to the fact that this was a great learning experience for me.

I lurved reading this piece :heart:

That was well...kinda creepy,
but nonetheless it was still a nice read

Khorosho. Khorosho.

Is this going to be something like Grimm, Once Upon a Time or Fables? I like to limit my Dark and Sad intake to stories that I can at least relate to. it helps when trying to tough them out.

You almost scared me off with the tags, but that was quite good.

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I'd consider it quite tame, personally. You should be alright. c:

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Just read it. It was... There? I really like her... Mane? I'm not sure. I just, and I mean absolutely zero disrespect towards you with this comment but it was like a glass of hot water with lemon. It was lacking some kind of substance. The flutterponies were odd but only vagely threatening, if that, and certainly less so than classical fae. Their meeting was instructive I guess bit I may be missing what lesson they were imparting. And the epilogue felt rushed and told me little, only faintly connecting to the rest of the story.

I mean no harm by these comments. Normally I love your work. But usuall there is some "there" there. Plus, I have always been baffled by the inclusion of Thunderlane and Rumble as character tags, but not, say, Donut Joe or the Mule. Or a generic Changeling or generic Buffalo tag.

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I agree with everything you've put out here, believe me. There's a reason why I don't normally publish practice pieces like this, but I felt some need to for this one simply because I wanted to see if I could get away with pulling off a self-insert.

All in all, I don't really know what I think of it myself. Is it good? Hell naw. Is it bad? Ehh... I don't think so. I think this is just stuck in some kind of amateurish limbo, which I'm okay with considering the goals I had set up for myself.

Thanks for being honest with me :pinkiehappy: I know this isn't my best, but at least it isn't the Twist story.

Broken back and crucial to their survival or not, my reflex would probably be to swat them. :twilightoops:
This was creepy as hell, and the flutter ponies really add a bit of grimness to the morose feel of serious hospitalization throughout. I really don't think you give yourself enough credit for it, it's got an incredibly unique theme for fanfiction, far better written than anything than I could ever hope to do, and makes me fear mosquitoes slightly more.

I don't know, maybe I'm not judging the right things. Either way, I don't like criticizing, I enjoyed it as usual! My ending statement on this story can be, like most things, explained through Spongebob.
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I will say this: The gritty feel of it and the mix of fairy tale ideas and darker themes with no real concrete answers reminded me very much of Pan's Labyrinth. So, take a bow on that, I loved that movie.

This wasn't bad at all. Of course you could have made it a bit longer and elaborated on some things, but it was still pretty good. Somehow the ending just felt right, too.

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