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It wasn't your usual alias. Some would even have called it... Unusual...

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Glad you see you kept your nose to your goal and didn't give up. Enjoy that sense of accomplishment! :twilightsmile:

Hooray, you made it!

Thanks Wishy, I really appreciate the encouragement and help editing in the way-back-when.

I sure did, and I couldn't have done it without your help. I can't thank you enough for being the final once over for the story.

This was a very good story. Really hot. I really enjoyed it. Well done!!

ohmygod this hit all my buttons so right. this is amazing :raritystarry:
dont know who the mistress is, but it leaves a lot for imagination and I love it!

Looks like you're getting some love, too! :pinkiehappy:


Thank you for your kind words, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I'm happy the story hit the spot.

I sure am, and I couldn't be happier that the story has found some people who really appreciate it.

...wow. Great story.

I lack the words to comment properly, but I’ll do my best.

I love the constant, nagging feeling of uneasiness that permeates all the story. In some sections it’s arousing, in others scary, and sometimes both. The tension falters at times, but it’s never truly absent. The emotions evolve along the characters and mutate significantly through the story, going from a slightly flawed integrity to a lovely degeneracy of lust and chaos. Never am I left in the dark: every emotion, every whim is always there on a silver platter, and if this story were a dinner, I’d be walking out well fed. The emotions are always there, at any given time I am in Rainbow’s head, the flow of thoughts never stops and the tide keeps rising.

I do like Mistress, a lot. She’s the embodiment of a superior force, terrible and terrific; one might even say sublime. She appears flawless in her great power, capable of all and yet magnanimous to her property. Any imperfections she may have are left behind, for they don’t exist in Rainbow's eyes: to her, she’s perfection, she’s her world, she’s the meaning of her life.

Of Rainbow, I like that she finds both the strength to speak for herself and the weakness to give herself up. Starting from complete self-awareness, she degenerates to the lowest possible being, delighted in being slave to her owner. This degradation is wonderfully slow, so well narrated, it’s an incredible pleasure to read.

This is very different from anything I’ve ever read, and I’m glad for it. New approaches always bring new ideas and perspective, and this did not disappoint in the slightest. The closest thing that comes to mind is A night on the leash, but even that is way different.

I don’t know the events behind this story, but as a reader, i’m glad it came to be published. If there will ever be more to follow, I’ll be eager to read.


It's an immensely humbling experience to have somebody else connect with In the Dark and appreciate it enough to write such a thoughtful analysis of the story. It delights me beyond words to have somebody else pick up on and appreciate the construction aspects and feelings of the story that I worked in. Thank you so much.

You needn’t sell yourself short, this is a great piece you have good reason to be proud of. I wish I were a better reader and that I could pick up all the little niches i can only vaguely grasp. There’s a lot to like here, probably much more than what I can see, and I’ll be grateful if some other fellow reader were to share their thought, feelings and opinions about this egregious story.

I forgot to mention, I also like that, as a reader, at the end I don’t get to know who Mistress is. This is probably be not picking up on the obvious hair clue, but truth be told I like it that way; I think it adds to the solemn mystery surrounding her. If I were to take a guess, I’d call Twilight, but that’s almost only because Friendship is Mind Control has spoiled me in that regard.

On a technical note, I see the “non-con” tag in the description. Did you know that, recently, an equivalent tag was added directly in the website? It may be worth considering adding it to the site-wide tags.

Thanks for the heads up, I wasn't actually aware. After thinking about it, it's probably the description that could use an update, the "non con"
tag really applied more to earlier versions of the story.

And again, I appreciate the praise you've been heaping on the story.

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