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RainbowSparkle3


Just a massive MLP fan hoping to please you by writing decent fanfiction and reviews.

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After Tirek released Twilight's friends, instead of letting Tirek steal all her alicorn magic, Twilight teleports her friends to a safe place and resumes her intense battle with Tirek. They are nearly equal, but then Tirek steals the hidden power of a certain earth pony and becomes far more powerful than an enraged Twilight with the power of Celestia, Luna and Cadance...

Note: It's best if you watched MLP Seasons 1-6 and all the movies in between before you read this story, though it's not strictly necessary; you'll just be confused in some places otherwise

Edited and Revised by Fedairkid until Meanwhile...

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 45 )

For a first fanfic this is pretty good (better than the first one I just posted:ajsleepy: but that's irrelevant. The one thing you probably should do is add comedy as a tag because pinkie is pretty hilarious in this

7974937 Thank you for your input. I have done as you suggested, and added comedy as a tag. Although, I'm not quite sure how much more of the story is gonna be comedic.

Wait so did tirek gets pinkies fourth wallbreaking ability or are you not making it work that way?

7979351 Oh no, if I did that, he would become unstoppable, and anyways, in the show, when Tirek absorbed the magic of Discord and the princesses, he didn't get any of their skills, it simply added their raw power to his own. I simply added that bit with the guide for a bit of a comedic effect.

This is pretty good, keep it up! :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by RainbowSparkle3 deleted Feb 26th, 2017

Nice one. Almost as good as my Dyson Vacuum Mini

Why are the chapters so short?

7999714 Eh, I just figured releasing 1000 words or so a week is better than 4000 words a month (basically, I mean I don't want to keep you waiting too long).

Oh, just in case you're wondering how Starlight and the villagers know about the element of harmony, you should take a good look at that big, shiny alternate universe tag.

Why is this on hiatus after a cliffhanger?

8226575 Because I'm writing other fics, sorry about such a long hiatus, but I should be able to finally start working on this again next week. You can look forward to that. :twilightsmile:

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Shouldn't the hiatus be over now?

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Uhhh, yeah, I'll have a new chapter up for sure relatively soon, to be more specific, in between several days and 2 weeks I'm thinking. Sorry for my complete and utter laziness. :applejackunsure:

I really hope Twilight obliterates Starlight, or proves her newfound superiority with her alicorn godhood. THAT would be something fun to see.:)

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Haha, yeah, it would. You'll see in the next chapter how it goes...oh, and just a hint: You may be surprised by what happens next.

Is that so? Well, i guess i'll wait and see, then.:)

Least it actually came to the resolve immediately. Not that Starlight had a choice given Twilight is thousands of leagues above her now.:)

So is this version of Starlight going to have the spells her canon self has? Like Accelero + Similo Duplexis from Every Little Thing She Does, invisibility spell from To Where and Back Again, Gigantification spell from MLP Friends Forever issue #35, Vortex spell from Starlight and the Secret Suite, and etc. Or are you going to give her new spells.

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Eh, I wouldn't say thousands, but yeah, Twilight would wreck Starlight no matter how many OP spells she tries to use. :derpyderp2:

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You know, I actually didn't think of that, I was just gonna have her use beams and shields and stuff like that. Thanks for the idea! :pinkiehappy:

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Yeah I was worried that you might forget about it. Since Starlight's magic is powerful yes like slightly above that of Alicorns. However her main strength isn't her magic power. It's the fact that she knows even more spells than almost every single character in the show everybody who writes fanfiction or fancomics seem to forget about this. Seriously she created new spells and upgraded old spells. At this point I wouldn't be surprised if she used a time stop spell in the season 7 finale.

Also about how many times stronger is Twilight compared to Starlight I'd say at most roughly around 3.5 to 4 times stronger than Starlight with 4 alicorn magic. However even than if Starlight gets her Cutie Mark removal spell in than Twilight is screwed. By the way how strong is this version of Pinkie Pie compared to everybody else and Tirek after absorbing Pinkie's hidden reserve compared to the Tirek from the show after absorbing the 4 alicorn magic.

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I had several sheets of paper with all the powers and the plot, but it's in Canada. :applejackconfused: However, I think I can remember, but I don't want to tell anybody else, so would you mind if I sent a PM regarding that? :unsuresweetie:

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Yeah that's fine. I might as well show you a list of how I rank the characters in terms of power as well

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I saw it, and though I haven't read the comics, so I can't comment on that, I must say that some of the things don't really make much sense. That's just my opinion, though. :ajsmug:

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Meh. I was just being random on the scaling. Nothing specific.

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Yeah, I could tell. I'm just one of those guys that is literal maybe just a little too much. :applejackunsure:

Right.:)

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I'm done writing the chapter, it's just going through editing right now.

You don't need to worry. Just because people aren't commenting doesn't mean they aren't reading your stories.

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I know, it's just that it makes me feel like they don't really care, and it's discouraging.

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Expecting comments can be... finicky, especially on fan sites where people gather to collectively cheer something on.

That said, I’ve pissed off enough people on this site that I shouldn’t even be making this comment.

This is really good I love it.

Only have read the first chapter definitely will be reading the whole thing

After Tirek released Twilight's friends, instead of letting Tirek steal all her alicorn magic, Twilight teleports her friends to a safe place and resumes her intense battle with Tirek.

Why didn't Twilight do that in the show!?! Tirek quite literally dropped any and all power he had in that situation after he freed them before taking the magic, and Twilight STILL let him take all the alicorn magic!

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For the sake of plot and because Twilight wanted to be honest I guess.

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This story is great, for a comedy.
Also just plain great!

9907963
...it's...not a comedy? There's some humour, but it's mostly not.

Also thank you for the compliment and the favourite. :twilightsmile:

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