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VIRAnimation


I'm a SFM-Pony animator and maker of SFM-Pony images (Mainly involving Foals) I had made pictures for almost 3 years along with animations though I might consider trying to write stories here.

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One day Apple Bloom, Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle are on their way over to Rumble's house when suddenly they are ambushed by two unfamiliar stallions. Foalnapped, they are taken to an underground lair for all sorts of nefarious deeds. Unbeknownst to the dastardly duo, an unwanted visitor has hitched a ride.

Outgunned and outmanned, Rumble must use his quick wit and gut instinct if he and the girls wanted to make it out unscathed. The dangers his villainous foe posed would be trecherous, but with a little luck on his side, he would take back what wasn't theirs.

UPDATE: 1/22/2017 Chapter 1 Revised a bit (Should be up soon)
Additional Editing done by "Princess Amore Dudette"
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/260014/Princess+Amore+Dudette

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 48 )

Rumble to the rescue! (Rumbo style?:twilightoops:)

"Man you been dating Rumble for like 6 months already, what do you see in that kid" Questioned Scootaloo.

My main question so far in this story is why are they having this conversation after Sweetie Belle and Rumble have been together for six months and not when they first got together?

From your description through the eyes of Scootaloo, I would have actually liked to see the whole them-getting-together-part as it sounded quite interesting. From Scootaloo's perspective, Rumble sounded pretty revolting. This is a possible opener for a comedic one-shot or mini series.

From an editor's stand point you had a number of capitalized words that didn't need to be capitalized in the story and some grammatical issues with some of your sentences. I'm happy to make an edit of this chapter and story if you'd like.

Also, don't overuse capitals to express shouting. I personally find it a pet peeve of mine TO SEE SHOUTING like this, rather than a ! at the end of a quote.

7885590 I could also imagine that he exclaims "Say hello to my little friend!"

Rumble... Equestria's Sly Marbo!

Hopefully this new edit does the Rambo style thriller action justice for you guys. :scootangel:

Poor foals. Rumble, make them regret Kidnapping them!

Oh good, the new chapter's up.

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We shall get to work on the next chapter soon. :twilightsmile:

7901713 Say hello to my little friend!

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That quote is going to be in the story now. Lol:rainbowlaugh:

7901726 I just can't help but think that Rumble could say that quote or other movie quotes like Yippie Ki Yay Motherb**** and so on:twilightblush::twilightsheepish:

I love how the time of its release almost matches the time zone I am in. Heh. Not that we had planned it that way, of course. :derpytongue2:

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We thank you! :pinkiesmile:

There is more exciting stuff to come. I still spotted a few noticeable mistakes after my edit of their latest chapter, but those will get fixed in the morning. :rainbowkiss:

They screwed. Rumble has help. For some reason, i have to think of Vietnam now.

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A few will always slip through. You seem to have caught most of them though.

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Yeah. I'll be going back through for more of them later this week. I know I spotted a few. I started reading your story by the way.

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I look forward to reading the finalized version. :twilightsmile: You'll have to let me know what you think as you get through mine too.

Now. Pretty interesting so far, I could either read the next chapter while my eyes are practically asleep, or read the next chapter whole my eyes are practically asleep. I think I'll read the next chapter. :raritywink: Nice to see this awesome collab by The Chill Dude and VIRAnimation! :yay:

Well made, especially how Rumble is worried and thinking about them. The CMC's kidnapper will have to deal with a VERY angry Mane 6 when Rumble has freed them. Nopony harms the sisters of the element wearers and gets away from it!:flutterrage:

7998871 You're welcome, keep up the good work!:twilightsmile:

Whoops. Slight technical issue in importing it from Google Docs. We'll get the paragraphs sorted out quickly.

Another good Chapter. The escape was worth a try.

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Thanks! I'm curious to ask if our subtext of Apple Bloom trying to hide the fact that she caught on to what Dox insinuated and was trying to hide it from Sweetie Belle to keep her from getting too scared of their situation was well constructed or too hard to notice.

8074274 it was well made. Rumble's still a Colt right? At First i thought he is a Teenager as he grabbed his brother’s Weapon

8075048 Yes, Rumble is still a young colt

8075192 and a brave one too. I would give him a award for that.

So far very interesting. Can't wait for more

Was worth the wait, good job! I guess Rumble found a new friend.

*twitchy hoof moves towards shotgun* can I kill this little shit yet?!

This colt needs help, badly. Rumble, you better hurry.

Great work!

I agree, it s a sucess! Hope it stays that way

VIR. You might want to hold me back.

ALYX YOU WORTHLESS FUCK YOU ATE DEAD YOU HEAR ME!!! I WILL RIP YOUR SPINE OUT YOUR ASS AND SHOVE IT DOWN YOUR THROAT

It was worth a try. As for you Dox...You have a army of bronies, the royal guard, Rumble's brother and the CMC's sister on your tail!

Excelent, helps on the way! They better hope that the guards won't be like the cops in Need for speed undercover when they bust them (If you know that game)

Great job, Rumble, you deserve a medal for your bravery! That mech made me think of Metal gear.

I did enjoy it, great work! Rumble deserves a metal for this!

Amazing story. :pinkiehappy: Rumble is the boss. Woohoo! :yay:

I'm getting the impression this Dox isn't simply misunderstood.

How old is Dox meant to be? This is disturbing...

I mean, if he's meant to be disturbing, great work, but reading him randomly threaten the girls with rape then play toys, I'm getting a very David Lynch-vibe off this kid. :fluttershbad:

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