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Dandereshy


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Nice story. Just a little bit short, could have been drawn out a bit but still good. I enjoyed.:rainbowkiss:

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Thanks. I agree it could been longer but I began to use the same words over and over and was running out of descriptions. I don't have an editor so I'm on my own. But thanks again. :twilightsmile:

7883617 I might be able to hook you up with an editor. It sucks trying to find one I'm sure you know:derpytongue2:

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I know all too well.:fluttershysad:

7883638 * cough cough * I'm here * cough cough *

7883609 I do agree, alittle love the detail and of course her attitude just great dont you agree?

7883663 Need help? :ajsmug:

7883666 You're agreeing with me, so of course I agree!

7883676 Alright. :rainbowlaugh: Good little story, btw. I will agree with everyone else and say some more detail never hurts.

I enjoyed it. A bit short but still good.

7883686 yep its a talent that for sure a little short but im sure it'll be fixed

Interesting. Incomplete? I'll pay attention

7883698 yea, hopefully. I have faith that the next chapter will be longer

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Oops. :applejackconfused:

It's complete. I forgot to change that. However, I might just go back and lengthen it a bit more. Perhaps around 1000 words.

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Sounds good. But uhhh.... Try to put it as complete when you finish next time.

7883707 yep that sounds about right cant wait:pinkiehappy:

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I forgot.:applejackconfused: Being on mobile makes doing all that tagging hard. The tags run into each other.

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Im on mobile too XD but I don't writefanfics anymore, even though I have been considering starting to write again

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Well if you like writing, have at it! :pinkiesmile:

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You know what. Im going to, because an idea just came to me and I think it's good. Now hopefully once it's done people don't start hating on me for it.

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That's the spirit. :twilightsmile:

This was delightful. Thank you very much.

Oh yeah, I agree with a lot of people in the comments down below. This was definitely a good read, too short for my liking and it could have been drawn out a lot more, but this earned a favorite, so nicely done! :yay:

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Thanks much, that means a lot!:pinkiehappy:

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You're very welcome, keep up the work!

99% sure this'll get featured. 100% not trying to jinx you.

Faved for now.

Hope she doesn't go imagining specific males in future chapters...

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Thanks mate. If it does, it'll be my first. But I must ask, what brings you to that conclusion?

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Thanks! And we'll have to see.:pinkiesmile:

7884939 When I first saw this,it had 30 likes,and 1 dislike. I'd say the odds are pretty good,especially with how it's fairing still.

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I guess time will tell.:pinkiesmile:

Very telly. This piece could use a lot more, heh, fleshing out. Slightly longer paragraphs in general (some things simply didn't need to be separate, and others need to be filled out) would help this feel less like it's blitzing through what it's trying to do so it can just be finished already. (I swear I'm not trying to make everything sex puns, it's just coming out that way.)

Particular focus is needed on the sensations Fluttershy feels as she plays with herself, which are simply missing. Currently, this is like glancing in Fluttershy's window on your way past while she's having fun (wait that sounded creepy). With improvement, it could be a lot more like being her/in her head while she does it, or at least in the bed next to her.

The ending was ridiculously cute, however.

bed stuff

"bedding"

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Thanks!

(I swear I'm not trying to make everything sex puns, it's just coming out that way.)

Cease! These puns have gone on long enough!

I agree with all of that, however, I don't have a full-time editor/proofreader. So, it's rather hard for me to edit, proofread, and write all my stuff on a cellphone. :fluttershysad:

The ending was ridiculously cute, however.

Pretty much describing the cover pic when I made the ending. Fits pretty well to me. :pinkiesmile:

Bed stuff

"bedding"

Well, where I come from, bed stuff means bedding, but I suppose not everyone will understand that, so I can change that to a little more known term.:rainbowkiss:

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Ouch, those are some very understandable problems. I hope things improve for you.

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Thanks! I will certainly try my hardest.:rainbowdetermined2:

well. wasn't that sort of adorable. For a moment i feared discord would walk in on her though. I don't know if I'm happy or dissapointed that didn't happen :pinkiecrazy:

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That was the mix of cute and erotic I was hoping for. :)

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Heh. Hey, thanks! Glad I could be of service.:twilightsheepish:

Well, I finally got around to it... short and cute. Best way to describe it. ^^

I also noticed, through the comments, that you write on your Phone, and you don't have an Editor. I am willing to help with one of those, which can be up to you. ;) And if this is dirty... then clean it?

Simple but fun!

This was a great morning.

A great, simple, and fun morning I might say:scootangel::raritywink::heart:!

this is strangely comfy for a fic about masturbation

This was so adorable!

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