Chapter 7 - Old fashion, new fashion (Edited)
“I still can’t believe you didn’t come and get us.” Twilight muttered as she, Rainbow, Spike, and Rarity made their way along the edge of the Everfree forest.
“Look, I already said I’m sorry Twilight.” Rainbow said exasperated as she floated along. “After we left Sweet Apple Acres, the big guys thingy started ringing again and it went back in to the forest. Maybe it had something it needed to do.”
“Twilight, darling, you are getting way too worked up about this. You need to relax, the creature is not going anywhere…erm, so to speak. I’m sure you will have plenty of time to study it.” Rarity said from behind them.
“Yeah Twilight, Celestia didn’t give you any time limits for your report on this creature, so we can take as long as we want.” Spike added.
“I know…” Twilight said, her ears folding back.
“Chill out Twilight, we’ll crack all the secrets the big guy has in no time!” Rainbow encouraged her as she saw the ears.
“Talking about cracking secrets, shouldn’t Fluttershy come with us too? I’m sure we could use her expertise on this matter.” Rarity asked after a while.
“She had to look after her animal friends, she’ll join us later.” Twilight replied.
The four of them continued their walk in silence after that. It was late morning, the sun was shining warmly again, but there were still many signs of yesterday’s storm. The ground was mostly dry, but puddles had formed in many places. Twigs and branches were strewn across the landscape, and there was even a tree that had tipped over from its precarious position downhill.
After a few more minutes of walking, they found the place where Twilight, Rainbow and Fluttershy had met the creature two days ago.
“So…are we just going to wait here for the creature?” Spike asked.
“Yes.” Was Twilight’s reply, as she set her saddlebags down.
“Really?” Spike said in full deadpan.
“Well, we don’t really know where the creature lives. We just know it’s somewhere in the Everfree, most likely. That is where it seems to go back to, after all. We also don’t have any way to know when it is going to come and go.”
“But if we don’t know when it is going to come here, we could sit here all day waiting for it.”
“If the creature is willing to come here in the middle of a storm, I’m sure it will come here on such a lovely day as today, too.” Rarity piped up as she levitated a picnic blanket from the basket she had been carrying. “And don’t you worry, Spikey dear. I’ve prepared us a lovely picnic while we wait for the creature.”
“I’m surprised that you were so eager to come all the way here to meet the creature, Rarity.” Rainbow said as she landed next to her.
“Oh but of course! Ever since you mentioned that the creature likes to wear clothes, I’ve been dying to see what kind of fashion it is interested in. Maybe it’ll even give me some new ideas!” Rarity exclaimed happily as she set out to put the picnic together.
Twilight and Rainbow both stopped, and looked at each other. They both turned away awkwardly, neither having the heart to tell Rarity that the clothes the creature wore weren’t exactly at the top of fashion.
With the picnic set, the ponies and the dragon sat down to enjoy the weather and the treats Rarity had brought. There were daffodil sandwiches, fresh fruit, several different pastries from Sugarcube Corner and even a couple of gems for Spike.
After getting their bellies full, each one of them focused on their own way to pass time. Rainbow had immediately decided to take a nap, and flew to the sky to find a cloud. Spike followed her example, and propped himself against Twilight as she laid down and took to reading. Rarity took out parchment and started planning out her next line of fashion.
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An hour later, Twilight’s ears twitched as she heard a rustling noise come from the forest. The creature slowly emerged from behind the trees, wearing the same camouflage clothes as last time (minus the hat), a smile forming on its face it spotted her and Spike. Rarity had left a bit earlier when she got an idea for a dress, and wanted to find some flowers.
“Spike, wake up.” Twilight gently nosed the little dragons head to wake him up. He let out a massive yawn and stretched his limbs.
“W-w-what time is it?” Spike asked as he got up.
“It’s around noon. The creature showed up.”
Spikes mouth clicked shut and he spun around towards the forest. The creature stopped, and they both stared at each other with curious eyes.
“Wow you are tall.” Spike commented and walked towards the creature, who kneeled down.
“Hi there, my name is Spike, I’m Twilight’s number one assistant!” He said and extended his claw. The creature responded with a strange sound and shook it.
“What was that? Was that your name or something?” Spike blinked.
“I don’t think it speaks Equestrian Common, Spike.”
“Oh yeah…but it did say something back, right?”
“Maybe? If it was a language, it wasn’t anything I’ve ever heard of.” Twilight’s face scrunched up as she thought about it. “Then again, I didn’t recognize any of the markings in its device either, and they looked something like a language. Hmm…”
“What are we going to do now that the creature is here?” Spike asked and walked back to the picnic blanket with the creature right behind him.
“Well, Spike, I was planning on taking it back to the library with us, so that I could run some tests on it and take some measurements. Like its height, weight and such.”
“Why?”
“Because it is of an unknown species, Spike. Nopony knows anything about it, we need to record everything we can about it so that other ponies can read up on it if they meet another creature like it.”
“I guess that makes sense.” Spike scratched his head. The creature had found the scrolls that Rarity had been drawing on, and was examining them with interest. “So are you going to write a book about it?”
“No.” Twilight chuckled. “As much as I would like to do something like that, I don’t think this one species warrants an entire book.” She turned head towards the sky and scanned the nearby clouds.
“Rainboooow? Rainbow!” Twilight yelled. The creature also turned its head up to see what Twilight was yelling at. “Do you know which cloud she was napping on, Spike?”
“Umm…” Spike looked up and shielded his eyes with one claw as he looked around. “There, on that cloud!” He said and pointed at one of them.
Twilight and the creature turned to look where Spike was pointing at and sure enough, if you squinted and looked really hard, you could see a rainbow tail poking out from the clouds.
“RAINBOW!” Twilight hollered even louder. For a moment, nothing happened, but then the tail disappeared in to the cloud, and a sleepy eyed pegasus peered down at them. Rainbow rubbed her eyes before taking flight and floating down to them.
“Oh..." Rainbow yawned. "...big guy is finally here.” She said as she landed and started to stretch her muscles. The creature just stared at her for a moment, before snorting to itself in amusement.
“And what are you laughing at?” She challenged the creature with a stern stare. Her act was broken when she let out another yawn. The creature just smiled and patter her head.
“Why do you keep calling it ‘big guy’?” Spike asked.
“Eh, it just kinda stuck with me when I first thought about it. And it’s pretty accurate too.” She said and pointed at the creature. “It’s big and it looks like a stallion with its beard and all.”
“You mean male, not stallion.” Twilight corrected. “And just because it has a beard doesn’t mean it’s a male.”
“Of course it does. Mares don’t have beards.” Rainbow said with one eyebrow cocked.
“Mares, no. But some females of other species do.”
“What? No way. You are pulling my leg.”
“Have you ever heard of trolls?” Twilight asked. Both Spike and Rainbow shook their heads.
“I’m not surprised, they don’t usually live in Equestria, but they are native in some parts of where the griffins live.”
“And their…mares have beards?” Spike asked. Twilight grimaced.
“What I have read about them, and seen some…artistic renditions of them, apparently, the members of their species are very…hairy.” She said and shuddered. Rainbow and Spike tried to imagine what a troll would look like. None of the images were particularly pleasant.
“Well, I don’t want to call this doofus ‘it’ all the time, so I’m going to stick with big guy.” Rainbow said and held her hoof for the creature to bump, who just grabbed and shook it instead, confused.
“I suppose we should think of something better than ‘the creature’ or ‘it’.” Twilight admitted.
“Then why not just call it big guy?” Spike pointed out.
“Because that is not a correct, scientific name.”
“But it’s a good nickname we can use until you do figure one out for the big guy.” Rainbow said.
“I guess you’re right…” Twilight was about to say something else, but a sudden gasping noise made them all stop and turn towards it.
“What. IS. THAT?” Rarity gasped in horror at the sight. The flowers she had been collecting fell on the ground and were carried away by the wind.
“Oh, Rarity, this is the creature we came here to see.” Twilight said gently. Rarity’s eye twitched.
"I know...but why is it wearing those...those...those horrible rags?" Rarity cried and quickly walked to the creature and started circling it like a shark, tugging and poking its clothes.
"They are so worn out that you'd think they would have fallen off long ago...the colors are dirty and washed away...and, and these patches..." Rarity stopped in front of the creature and looked it straight in to its eyes. Her lip started to quiver. "WHY ARE THEY ALL IN DIFFERENT COLOHOHOHORS?" She wailed at the creature, who had the look of utter bewilderment on its face. It kneeled and petted her, trying to comfort the distraught fashionista.
Twilight, Rainbow and Spike had to admit, the clothes the creature was wearing had seen better days. The colors were faded, there were numerous patches (all different shades of green, brown and black) used to repair tears in the fabric and the pants looked too loose for the creature. The jacket’s zipper seemed to be broken, and it was held closed by snap fasteners instead. Calling them worn out might have been too kind.
The creature looked at the others, asking for help. Twilight and Spike cautiously approached.
“Ra-Rarity...uhh, I think you are making the creature nervous. The clothes are atleast...umm...still useful?” Twilight tried.
"Useful?!?" Rarity sprang out of the sadness and smooched Twilight's cheeks together with her hooves. "They are not useful! They are barely holding together! How the creature can wear them and not faint, I haven't gotten the faintest clue." She said as if the very mention of said clothes would bring disaster to Equestria. “Those clothes are an affront to fashion and every seamstress in all of Equestria. I will not allow it to wear those…those hideous garments for any longer!” She stomped her hoof.
"So...what? Are you going to take off its clothes?" Rainbow asked, and rested her hoof on the creatures shoulder, who very much wanted an explanation of what is going on.
"If it were my decision, I would burn those clothes the moment I could. No creature should have to go through wearing anything like that." She declared. "And that is why I'm going to take it to the boutique, right now, and make it some new clothes." Both of the ponies and dragon blinked once.
"Now?" Twilight repeated.
"Yes. The less time the creature is in those clothes, the better off Equestria will be." Twilight looked at Rarity's serious expression for a while.
"I...suppose we could do that." She tilted her head, her gaze wandering to the ground. "I was interested to see what the creature looks like under those clothes..." Her head turned towards the creature, who was still trying to figure out what just happened.
"Then we have no time to lose!" Rarity said and started to trot towards Ponyville. Her horn lit up with magic, and she tugged the creature from the cuffs of its jacket to get it to follow her. The creature stood there, looking at the others with mostly confusion and a little bit of worry on its face, before following after Rarity.
“Rarity, wait for me!” Spike shouted and sprinted after them. Twilight and Rainbow stood stock still for a few moments, before shaking themselves out of their stupor.
“I…guess we need to go after them.” Rainbow finally said.
“Yeah...Rarity sure was energetic about this...” Twilight added.
“Right...”
They stared at the retreating forms a moment longer, before starting to pack the picnic supplies and hurrying after them.
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The walk to Rarity’s boutique had been a fast one. Rarity had a determined look on her face the entire time. The creature calmed quickly, but his confusion, clearly etched on his face, didn't disappear in the least.
When they neared the town, it changed to wide eyed wonderment instead. The creature’s head turned every which way, trying to look at everything before Rarity pulled him along. They met a few ponies on their way, who stopped to stare at the strange sight before them. The creature tried to nervously wave to a few of them, but most were too busy wondering what was going on to notice.
When they reached the boutique, Rarity wasted no time in urging the creature inside and leading him to her work area. As soon as they got there, she turned around and faced the creature.
“Now, take them off.”
The creature was taking deep breaths after the rather brisk walk and looked at her in confusion again.
“Come darling, we have much to do and no time to waste!"
“Rarity.” Twilight said when she entered the room. Rarity turned towards Twilight. “The creature doesn’t understand our language, remember?”
Rarity tilted her head and her mouth made a small 'o'. She turned back towards the fidgeting creature.
"Well, then we shall help it undress." She said and lit up her horn again. She started to undo the snap fasteners and the belt the creature was wearing. He exclaimed something and grabbed hold of his garments before Rarity could yank them off, a blush making its way on his face.
“Are you sure about this?" Rainbow asked as she looked at Rarity trying to pull off the creatures pants. "Maybe the big guy doesn't want new clothes?"
"How could you say that, Rainbow Dash? Who would want to wear those?" Rarity responded and pointed at the clothes.
"They do look really bad..." Spike commented as he poked one of the patched.
"And inefficient." Twilight added.
"...And not cool at all." Rainbow admitted. Perhaps it would be better to get something more awesome for the creature to wear.
"So we are all in an agreement. Let's get those off of it so I can take some measurements." Rarity said as her horn lit up again. The creature commented something, embarrassed and blushing. It took a few steps backwards.
"Wait Rarity, maybe we should try to explain to it first why we want it to take off its clothes." Twilight said before Rarity would rip apart the creature's clothes.
"And how do we do that? If the creature can't speak, how do we tell it?" Rarity replied and powered down her horn again.
"Umm...well...hmm..."
The creature turned towards Rainbow with a questioning look in his face, pleading her to make sense of what just happened.
“Oh horseapples…uhh, look big guy…” She began, trying to think of a way to do this. Twilight suddenly clopped her hoof on the floor.
“I know! Come here.” She said and tugged at the creature’s jacket to get him to follow her. He hesitantly followed her to the main area of the boutique, where all the ponyquins were. She went ahead and pointed few of the ones with dresses on. The creature studied them for a while before looking back with a small, confused smile.
“Do you think he got it?” Spike asked.
“I don’t think so.” Twilight replied.
“Let me try it.” Rainbow said and went to one of the ones nothing on it. She pointed at the creature, then the one with no clothes on, then to the creature again, and lastly the ones with clothes on. The creature scratched his head.
“Oh come on, it’s not that hard to understand!” She said and took to the air.
“I know!” Spike said and went to take two hats. He put one on his head, the other one on one of the ponyquins with clothes on, and went to stand in front of the creature. He pointed at the creature and himself, took off the hat and placed it on the ponyquin with no clothes, and then taking the other hat and placing it on his head. The creature had a small frown on its face as it thought about it. It shrugged at them helplessly, before suddenly its eyes widened. It motioned towards its clothes, before hesitantly pointing at one of the dresses.
“Yes!” Twilight said happily and clopping her hooves together in excitement. The creature looked like it wanted to flee.
“No, not one of the dresses you doofus.” Rainbow said and shook her head. She motioned towards the room where Rarity was. “She is going to make you new clothes.”
The creature crossed his arms and huffed.
“Look big guy, Rarity isn't going to let you out of here until you get better clothes, and I kinda agree with her on this one.” Rainbow said and started to nudge the creature towards Rarity’s workroom again. Reluctantly, he followed them back in. Rarity was waiting for them with expectant eyes and a smile.
“Well?”
Rainbow pointed at the creature and tugged its clothes. The creature looked around uncertainly, starting to blush again.
“If you aren’t going to take them off yourself, I will.” Rarity declared and took a step forward. The creature looked at her for a minute, before admitting his defeat with a sigh and starting to take off his clothes.
“Worry not darling, I will make sure to make you a new set of...perfect…clothes…” Her jaw fell as the creature took off his clothes. Under the camouflage clothes was another set of garments, and in all of her life, Rarity had not seen uglier clothes. The creature had a gray shirt and baggy, black pants. He had also taken his shoes off, and he seemed to wearing socks too. And they were all in a horrible state. The shirt looked to be decades old, it was so worn and full of holes. The pants also had a hole that seemed to have been worn through on the left knee, and there were few brown splotches of something. The thick, woolly socks smelled terribly, and had few loose thread poking out of them. Rarity's eye started to twitch again.
The ponies and the dragon looked at the creature, unsure what to say, while he just squirmed in place.
“You…you should probably take those off too…” Rainbow said and reached for the creature’s shirt’s hem. She tugged at it, and there was a ripping sound as the fabric split in two.
“Oh…uuh…oops?” She said.
Rarity shrieked.
*I have rewritten the latter half of this chapter, because Rarity's behavior was...wrong. Now I think it's better, hopefully. 
*
This is a bit of a two parter for a chapter. Next time we get to see what happens when the human is set loose in the town of Ponyville. 
And yes, there are people who wear clothes that are in such a bad state. My father is one of them. I too, to a certain extent, but never that bad. If my sock or shirt has one teensyweensy extra hole in it I won't just throw it away. I just wear it when there are no other people to see and comment about it. 
Is ponyquin the right way to say it? Or is it simply pony mannequin?
Also, did I do the ' marks right when they talk about if they should call the human big guy? I never remember what's the correct way to do it, and I can't search the internet for help cuz I don't know what to search for. 
Hopefully you enjoyed the chapter. 
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Omg, I hate Rarity so much. She is obnoxious, shrill, bitchy, takes no one's feelings into account but her own and it's either her way or the highway and she doesn't even let people take the highway. How a character like that can be considered generous in any fashion, never mind the paragon of generosity itself, is beyond me. You did a great job of her character and rekindling my burning hatred of her in one fell swoop. Thank you!
7919741
Not quite my intent but I'll chalk that up to a unfortunate casualty of writing. 
It would be funnier if Rarity was squirming in place thinking of a way to make the guy to change clothes without dragging him half of ponyville...
but this result is nice too
Am i the only person who genuinely hates rarity in like 99% of stories?
7919761
Normally I'd agree with you, but for this, I'd say I'm glad Rarity is being this way because she's forcing the story to move along. You can only have more chapters of Twily looking at a creature in the forest for so long before something needs to happen. Also, it's understandable that the human is freaked out but he needs to understand that these things he's looking at are harmless and what better way to demonstrate that than being given some new clothes?
7919791 Hmm, I'm starting to get the sense that I might have written Rarity poorly if this is the reaction.
Damn Rarity went full bitch mode here.
If a stranger did that shit to me, the first thing I'll do is punch them on the face.
7919816 Arrgh, I feel so bad for Rarity.
Keep in mind though that the ponies, Rarity especially, are looking the human more as an animal of sorts still, so she might not realize that she is being a bit...aggressive. 
Then again, she kinda does that in the show too, doesn't she? 
7919816 I was honestly expecting him to do that.
7919826 I still don't understand why they view the protagonist as animal, while he clearly possesses intelligence. He even has a device that Twilight does not understand and knows how to operate it.
7919826 I wouldn't know, I don't watch the show.
From the many fics I've read, I guess it's normal for her character.
Ehhh... not a fan of this chapter. Rarity freaking out immediately when she sees the human in what she deems to be a crime against fashion is considered an overused cliche for a reason. Zanthimos has a point in so far as it's important to keep the story progressing forward, but I don't think this was the way to do it. And unless a lot of the little details that have been included in this story were just flukes, I think you're a good enough writer that this is well below the bar you've set for yourself with this story.
7919855
I think that, at least in part, that's because the term "animal" in Equestria is... vague. For example, Winnona is clearly an animal, as is Opal, as are most of the monsters the group has met. But then you have episodes like Hurricane Fluttershy where the animals Fluttershy takes care of act with what is clearly sapient thought and self-awareness. So depending on how close he's keeping to canon in that respect, there's a lot of room for interpretation, especially since they've never actually heard the creature speak beyond a single word to Spike that they're not even sure was really a word.
7919855 But so do many of Fluttershy's animal friends. Posses intelligence I mean, not a phone, that would be silly.
I mean, even Dash was able to get the animals to race with her when she was trying to find a pet. And another thing to note is that there isn't clear humans vs animals thing as we have on earth. Only humans are considered to be intelligent and everything else is an animal, one form or another. But Equestria has many different, intelligent species, and even animals seem more self aware than on earth. Sure, our human seems to be perhaps a bit more clever than other animals, but there isn't anything clear that just says he's as intelligent as a pony. And they aren't fully treating him as an animal. I guess it's more about not knowing exactly how clever he is.
7919852 But he's a gentleman, he can't do that.
7919869 Hmmmmmm...I need to think about this, it's way too late for me to consider it today. Perhaps I'm just tired and not thinking straight.
7919889
As I've spoken about at length before, there is a difference between "overused cliche" and predicting a characters reactions. Rarity being horrified by camouflage? Hard to imagine that not happening. The only part that can be considered cliche is where she brings him to the boutique to make new clothes immediately, but it's also a good way to really introduce her character. Plus, the language barrier keeps the scene from reading as too repetitive. I say keep it.
7919889
It's certainly possible. Sleep deprivation does funny things to the mind (which I can attest to from personal experience, lol).
I am enjoying that you are not showing the story view from the humans point of view. Now how will our "silent" protagonist handle the fancy of Rarity?
Just gonna' be honest... I hate this 'Rarity forces fashion upon Human' thing. It's just an overused plot device for the ponies to find stuff out about the human. This was going great and then just like that I'm facepalming.
7919915 If there was anything else...uhh...wrong besides Rarity in this chapter, do point them out to me in a PM or something and I'll take a closer look after sleepy time.
7919911 Hmm, that's true. But I am going to take another look at this and consider changing it if it seems to be poorly written. I might just be a bit tired today.
Yes. Binding a word or phrase in apostrophes marks something syntactically, in computer terms, a string. Should always be used when referring to a word/phrase itself as a noun instead of in its normal referent or grammatical function.
Ex: How many times did you use 'the' in the chapter?
When are they going to see his golden apples?
7920057 Yes.
GG Rainbow.
I'm curious as to how they're gonna end up conversing, if he doesn't speak Equestrian Common
Maybe pictures? Maybe Discord or Pinkie will bend reality? Maybe Lyra will spout infinite Human Wisdom?
FInd out on another chapter!
7919926
Can you imagine her character not doing that? Especially with him wearing camo, which she canonically hates?
7920166
Think of the situation. Yeah I can imagine her cringing over it but if you meet some random stranger on the street you wouldn't drag them away and deman they take their clothes of, would you? That's pretty much sexual assualt. Rarity might be fanatical about fashion, but she has exceptionally good manners. I can't imagine her doing this at all. She would at least be subtle about getting the human better clothes.
I think you broke Rarity there, and left out the part where she would been pulverised at the lack of underwear part
IIRC show creators themselves use this word in a book about MLP creation.
7920267
Except they have zero perception of clothes as a necessity in terms of shame.
Also, Rarity did pretty much exactly that in the show's pilot episode to Twilight.
7920341
She does it to Twilight, who she knows has the same opinions regarding the neccesity of clothes. Rarity also knows the Human is completely unique compared to what they know exists, and considering the afore-mentioned exceptional manners, would be polite enough to not force anything on the Human when they know nothing about it's thought processes.
For example, she didn't demand for Iron Will to replace his shorts in front of her. Granted Iron Will's shorts aren't particularly offensive. But even still. Rarity knows nothing about Human culture and they can't even communicate to resolve the differences. There sould be no reason for her to do this unless she had previously had a really bad day and has just completely forgotten her manners.
7919791 Well, there is gift and throwing the gift in your face violently...
This going thoward the latter I'm afraid. Word of advice if you do encounter alien pony. Make sure that they trust you before jumping on them to give them hugs, otherwise it migth end badly.
*Looks down at pajama top I'm wearing with holes in it*
This one is my favorite. You'd be taking it off me over my dead body.
Ready for More!
7920364
I never said I agreed with her actions as a civilized person, but what she did is entirely understandable for her character.
How many other races has Rarity actually met? How many of them wear clothes? Iron Will, by the way, does not actually wear shorts. He wears naught but a tie.
She has no reason to think differently, because she's never experienced anything that would think this way. She has met other odd creatures, and for the first time before now.
7920102 I disagree, keep it like this for as long as the story warrants it. They are learning about him and we are learning what he thinks from his reactions. He may be a silent protagonist but we can tell when he finds thing odd or interesting. I always hated the info dumps that explain everything about human and Equestria in one chapter then they just never have any reactions to all the wonder out and amazing things.
I do believe your Rarity is a bit OOC here(or like, a lot). Aside from that, good chapter, glad that we're moving on from random encounters to inside ponyville. Looking forward to some shenanigans and progress. Meeting Celestia is probably going to be a h00t.
Unicorn mares do!
Oh geez, he's gone and inflicted fashion trauma on poor Rarity. To the Emergency Boutique, stat!
>big guy
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Mystery human is Bane confirmed.
7920102 ....Ok then. Thanks.
I agree with some of the other comments; keep the language barrier as long as necessary.
I'm unsure on this one. I like the concept, and any single scene is pretty good, but it doesn't seem very cohesive and it isn't clear whether you have a long term plan for the story.
7919937 single apostrophes ', are used like this;
Either as a way of referring to a pronoun
"I really like the new album '60 Days,' it's really good"
Or as thought
'She's nuts!!'
Or as sarcasm
"Sure 'Mr magic' whatever you say"
There are more things you can use it for but it all looks the same.
Enjoying how the characters are IC.
I have rewritten the latter part of chapter 7, so hopefully, it's a bit better now.
7921172 Thanks, I'll try to remember this.
7920769 It's a mystery. You'll have to wait and find out.
7920767 Worry not, it's not going to just disappear during a single chapter.
7920761 You did ask, and I put the spoiler line there.
7920732 Dark Knight: Equestria coming to theaters in 2017.
7920620 Yeah.
Well, I edited the chapter, hopefully she is better now. 
7920561
I see I have someone like minded here. 
I think our big guy thought he was going to be forced into a dress for second there.
And since he doesn't speak the same lingo I have trouble feeling Rainbow helped
Hey, is anyone else getting a sort of my neighbor totoro vibe from this fic?
I didn't really feel it until that scene with big guy in the rain with Rainbow Dash.
XD Also I know you say that ratty clothes like that is normal with some people, but it still got me wondering how long he'd been wondering around the Everfree.
7921253 Whaat, Totoro? Ihavenoideawhatyouaretalkingabout! **Whistles nonchalantly**
My father literally had a shirt last year that had about 20% of it missing, and he wouldn't throw it away because "it was still good". It just had a huge hole on one of the sides. I think my mother either buried it deep underground or burned in with righteous fire, I'm not sure which. 
This is a massive nope for me, I can't stand it when people put actions into speech. It totally breaks immersion and is off-putting to read.
I'd personally replace it with something like:
7921316 Your criticism has been heard and accepted.
I changed the text. 