• Published 27th Jan 2017
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An Apple a Night... - TheTalentlessPony



Fluttershy has been keeping a secret from Discord, and he very badly wants to know.

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Monster All Her Own

Fluttershy flew as fast as her large bat wings could carry her, trying to evade Discord as much as possible.

Though, fleeing from the Spirit of Chaos wasn't exactly feasible. A flash of white appeared in front of her, and she didn't have the power to stop before plowing right into Discord's brown fur. Before she could escape, his eagle arm snaked its way around her, trapping her against him.

"You're an enigma, Fluttershy! You react to my lack of reaction taking it as an actual reaction after you reacted to us being here by specifically telling me not to react! I'm all for not making sense but there has to be a line somewhere!"

She blushed in embarrassment, hooves over her mouth. "I-I'm sorry."

"Yes you are. Now..." He landed on the grass below, then set Fluttershy down, crossing his arms. "This is what you were afraid of me seeing?"

She lowered her head, ashamed. "I-I...I'm scary, Discord."

Her blush reddened as Discord suddenly burst into laughter. He floated upwards slightly, clutching his chest and practically howling. Fluttershy bent over, hooves over her face to hide herself.

"Oh, that's priceless! Don't tell me you honestly think that some fangs and bat wings make you look like a—"

His voice trailed off as he noticed her hunched over. He sighed, then sat down on the grass, lightly tugging at one of her ears.

She squeaked slightly, but peeked out at him, her red eyes meeting with his own.

"How did this happen exactly?" he asked, both out of curiosity and trying to help her vent. He wasn't good at comforting others, but he tried.

She looked down, not responding. He wondered if maybe he'd asked too much, but then felt her shuffle onto his lap.

Neither said anything about it, but were silently glad to be so close.

"There were some vampire fruit bats that invaded Sweet Apple Acres. I-I didn't want to - I tried to offer other solutions - but they had me use my Stare so Twilight could cast a spell to stop them from eating all the apples."

"Magical refraction..." Discord muttered, already seeing where this was going.

"Oh, I wasn't conscious for it, but they told me what happened! I turned into this, but I wasn't myself; I ate so many apples and..." she sniffled, "I ruined Applejack's chances of winning that apple contest, because she had to sacrifice her biggest apple to stop me..."

"Implying that she wasn't the one who got you into that situation in the first place," Discord said bluntly.

"I know, but..." she put her hooves over her face again, "if I'd been stronger... maybe I could've controlled myself."

Discord let out a snort. "Desire magic is very finicky, especially if it was so strong that it physically transforms. Ponies are extremely weak-minded when it comes to such things. Anypony would've fallen prey to that."

Fluttershy took in his words, but had nothing to reply with. She glanced up, seeing that Discord's eyes seemed to be encouraging her to continue her story.

"...Once they stopped me, Twilight cast the spell to get rid of the... desire, I suppose, but I still change when I eat apples at night. I keep my free will, but..."

"And just what's wrong with a little change every now and then?" Discord asked. "After all, we still match by a wing, see?"

She looked as he spread his bat wing, looking extremely proud of the fact. She stared at her own wings, then giggled. His other wing was more of an alicorn wing, but it was hard to argue against his smile. "Y-yes, I suppose so."

"No supposing!" he said, lightly pressing on her snout. "You just agree with me."

"Okay." She couldn't help smiling, but it didn't last for long. "...Discord?"

"Mm?"

"Desire magic... would a transformation take any of the pony's personality?"

She noticed that he didn't fully understand what she meant.

"L-like... if it were to be transferred to a pony who was really mean; would they be meaner in a transformation than a nice pony would if they transformed instead?"

"That depends on so many different factors, Fluttershy..." he answered, unsure of where she was going with this. "Why do you ask such things?"

She mumbled something under her breath. Discord was patient with her, holding her muzzle and bringing her head up to face him.

Her eyes closed, and she let out a pained sigh.

"I...I'm a monster."

Discord frowned. "I thought we had reached a mutual agreement that I wasn't bothered by this."

Her hooves came up to hold the hand that had been gripping her muzzle. "T-that's not what I mean."

The tears started. "I... I've said a lot of bad things; things I didn't mean to. I've lost my temper so quickly and easily. I've driven some of my friends to tears." She placed a hoof on her chest. "I get scared seeing myself like this b-because... it's like this is who I am inside. I-I'm afraid that p-ponies will see me for who I really am..."

Discord's eyes went wide. "You don't really believe that... do you?"

He almost sounded offended. She glanced up, and it was clear that he didn't like what she was saying. She averted her gaze again, voice lowered.

"M-maybe..."

She winced, afraid of how he'd react, only to then feel his lion hand on her head, stroking her mane and earning a confused squeak out of her. "D-Discord?"

"You are far from a monster."

A blush briefly passed over her muzzle; he said it with such belief... such sincerity, and when she didn't respond, he took her face in his hands and brought her gaze up to his. He seemed frustrated.

"I'm speaking from experience, Fluttershy! I've been a monster; I am a monster! I've met countless monsters in the thousands of years I've been alive, and you have certainly never counted as one of them!"

His eyes sharpened. "You gave me a chance and reformed me because everypony makes mistakes, yet you blame yourself for everything and never forgive yourself for any of it. Where's the logic in that?"

He side-glanced. "Not that I would know much about the matter, but my point still stands..."

Her eyes shimmered faintly as her blush reappeared. Discord frowned at her lack of response, then pulled into a hug. She inhaled sharply from surprise, partially because he was squeezing her fairly tight, but also because she felt how tense he was. His body was rigid, and his arms seemed intent on not letting her go.

"D-Discord..." Her voice was so quiet that she could hardly hear it over the sound of her own heartbeat. He was so much sweeter than he gave himself credit for, and he gave himself credit for a lot of things.

She swallowed shyly, then brought her hooves around him, embracing him in return.

He said nothing, but she could feel his muscles relax, his lion hand running up and down her back. She shuddered a bit, flustered by the sensation. Discord pulled his hand away, wondering if she disliked it, but Fluttershy clung to him tighter, disproving that.

"You're not a monster either," she noted, conviction in her tone, "a-and even if you were, you'd be the most wonderful monster I've ever met."

She could hear him stifle a laugh at how utterly cheesy she sounded, but she was sure he was grateful too. She didn't regret saying the truth.

"Why thank you~" he said with a bit of exaggerated pride. "And look at you; you actually managed to surprise me with how fast you flew back there!"

"I-I did?" Her bat wings fluttered underneath Discord's touch. "W-well, these are a bit more useful than my normal wings."

"I should take you flying sometime," he mused. "We could go over the Celestial Sea and you can meet all the little sea critters."

The thought excited her. A night out with Discord, flying low over the water with Luna's beautiful sky reflecting off the surface. She sighed happily. "That'd be wonderful..."

She hummed quietly to herself, then tightened her hold on him. "B-but not now."

"Hm?" He pulled her away with a bit of effort; it wasn't like her to turn down an offer like that.

She looked at him, noticing how close they were. It wasn't like Discord to sit still for so long, but the idea that it was for her warmed her heart.

Though hesitating at first, she leaned up, her snout touching his. Not for long, and not with any sort of intent to kiss, but it was a motion of deep affection nonetheless, like she had channeled all her feelings through it.

Discord could feel his face heat up as she hid herself back into him, returning to their previous hug. He could feel her heart beating rapidly against him, his magic swarming around inside his body from the rush of emotions. It was a tantalizing feeling that he silently hoped to have again sometime soon.

He smiled, then brought his arms around her again. They'd hugged before, but it never felt so enticing, though not that he was complaining.

So, they sat there together, remaining silent in the embrace and not needing to say a word.

They both had a feeling that they knew what the other would've said anyway.

Comments ( 71 )

this is cute

Adorable, and oddly hilarious.

This was so touching and adorable.

This was pretty good and was honestly show level quality and you stayed pretty true to the characters that you used. 9.8/10 if only because nothing is perfect.

7900400
O-oh my gosh. >/////< T-thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

By far one of the cutest Discord-Fluttershy stories I have ever read! Amazing job! :pinkiehappy:

I hope someday Flutterbat will return and we get to see Discord's reaction (or lack of). This would make for an interesting episode!

This was such a nice and cute story. Nice work.

7900888
Yeah, that'd be awesome! Though, if it was going to happen, I suppose it already would've by now.

Then again, it took Gilda four seasons to come back so who knows.

Top notch
Characters fit in perfectly
A little jumpy in the scenes, but not distracting
Can be improved with a little more detail

But that is just my critic and dead inside self saying that

9.99 out of 5 stars :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::flutterrage:

7901270
Ahhh, thank you so much! ;////;

Yeah, the "jumpiness" is definitely in part due to my own personal issues with storytelling. I just don't have the attention span to write long stories, so I tend to skip details sometimes.

Such a good one; Discord is a difficult character to write, as is Fluttershy, and any fanfic with the two of them is a difficult one to pull off. That being said, you did an amazing job portraying them, especially in this situation. The I would have liked a little more description, if I had to critique anything, but a very nice job indeed!

7901634
Oh my gosh, thank you! >////<

Yeah, descriptions have always been one of my weaknesses. Long stories/descriptions simply aren't my forte.

7899708 But if Discord is in it, does that make the oddness of said hilarity normal?

Talentless, you already know how I feel about it: a solid story because it stole the compact state of my atoms and loosened them til I was liquid.

7901843
YES, I DO KNOW. AND YOU KILLED ME WITH WHAT YOU SAID ABOUT IT. >///>

7901849
But I ended you with the kindest of intentions, I assure you! :scootangel:

7901862
REGARDLESS! >/////////<

(Love you though~ <3)

7901864
(Right back atcha! :heart: )

lovely :heart: i love it fluttercord best ship 100% and this is adorable fluffy mush and I love it <3<3<3<3

Talentless, you are not talentless, you are talented [Most times I've said talented in a sentance, huzzah]. You are a pretty good writer, and I like your style. Romance isn't my thing, as I mostly write grim-dark and torture scenes that usually involve tears and sadness and shit like this...
Innocent Snout.
So don't be me, Alone and afraid, be a dead meme that blows out yer fucking ears! XD Epilepsy warning M8's.
Warning Headphone users 0-0 Lets hope to god your little sister or brother doesn't see this...
Forever Lonely is ouuuuuuttttt 0<>* So fab

7902246
Aww, thank you. It makes me happy when people say I'm talented, especially when it comes to writing because, I'm gonna be completely honest, I don't like books and don't have the attention span to get through long stories, so my writing style is almost self-taught in a way. I don't have a lot of material to take from.

So yeah, I'm glad you think I'm good at this stuff! ^^

7902266 No problem I like giving people credit to their wonderful stories 0<>0 also congrats on getting featured~

Wonderful story, I really enjoyed reading it. And congrats on being featured. This story certainly deserved it! :pinkiehappy::yay:

This was a very good shot story.

This was fantastic - I really enjoyed how cute and well-written the interactions were.
Especially the board game from the first chapter, it sounded exactly like something Discord would make up for entertainment. Everyone was in-character and I could definitely connect with this story. :pinkiehappy:

A solid 5 of 5 stars! Great work and congratulations on getting it featured so quickly!

7902782
Thank you very much! I was quite proud of the board game scene, so I'm glad others liked it. >//<

I think this would be much better if you dialed back the exposition and whatnot.

7903254
Thanks for the critique! I guess that makes sense given that this is slightly longer than I expected it to be. Usually I don't have enough detail. :twilightsheepish:

That was nice. Nothing epic or grand, but Discord comforting Fluttershy was nice. I loved that.

7903531
Haha, thanks! Yeah, 'epic' and 'grand' aren't really my specialty. :twilightblush:

This story warmed my heart! :twilightsmile:

This is cute, and very readable.
I have just the one issue:

heart beating fastly

fastly

This is a terrible word lol. Might i suggest "quickly" or "rapidly".

7904097
Fixed! Thanks! I don't think sometimes. :derpyderp1:

I ship it! It's so adorable! I think they're characters were spot on here

This was a great and touching story :twilightsmile:

lol, Shameless fluff! Almost a bit too sweet for me personally, but a bit of fluff every now and then does a person good :3

7905682
It's like it's all I do nowadays. I could build a house with all this fluff. :rainbowlaugh:

7905684
I guess that house'd be... very cushy.

/shot

... keeps the flutterbutt tight.

In what episode does the picture take place?

7907018
It's an edited screenshot from a couple different episodes. I like doing screenshot edits for my cover images.

Absolutely adorable, and in character. They could put this in the show, and it wouldn't look out of place, good work.

"You're an enigma, Fluttershy! You react to my lack of reaction taking it as an actual reaction after you reacted to us being here by specifically telling me not to react! I'm all for not making sense but there has to be a line somewhere!"

pbs.twimg.com/media/B0DaeSLIAAA5Pj7.jpg

His voice trailed off as he noticed her hunched over. He sighed, then sat down on the grass, lightly tugging at one of her ears.

She squeaked slightly, but peeked out at him, her red eyes meeting with his own.

Squeaky toy Flutterbat! :yay:

"After all, we still match by a wing, see?"

Oooh. A sly argument.

"I get scared seeing myself like this b-because... it's like this is who I am inside. I-I'm afraid that p-ponies will see me for who I really am..."

Ahheh. No. Even as a bat she's still a squeaky toy :facehoof:

They both had a feeling that they knew what the other would've said anyway.

D'awwwwwwwwww.

That was nice :twilightsmile:


Remarks and corrections:
> "Yes you are. Now..." he landed on the grass below, then set Fluttershy down, crossing his arms, " this is what you were afraid of me seeing?"
You can't treat a sentence interrupted by an action as if it's a "s/he said" construction. It isn't one. So, put a capital letter on "he", a period after "his arms", and start the second quote either with a capital letter, or with another ellipsis like how the first part trailed off. Also, uh, the second quote seems to start with a space.
> The tears started. "I...I've said a lot of bad things
A more general note: you should always put a space behind an ellipsis, to make words split correctly at the end of lines; html text doesn't split on periods, meaning that whatever two words you connect with an ellipsis become one large unsplittable block. In this case, "I...I've" will always be kept together, where it should split before the "I've".

7907626
Ahhh, thank you! >////<

It just really is too bad that we never saw Flutterbat again; I know the ending was a fake-out (or was that the Pony of Shadows?), but still!

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