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Krickis


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This story is a sequel to Call of the Mountain


Applejack and Fluttershy have been together a long time. They have a lot in common, including a mutual love for Everfree. The forest is their home. It had been for centuries, and it would be for as long as they lived.

Or rather, that’s what Applejack had thought. But then a pair of traveling griffons began enticing Fluttershy with stories of life outside of the forest. With the draconequus’s interests shifting away from Applejack, she takes it upon herself to prove that she's not just a dull forest-dweller.


A story in the Noodleverse series, a species swap AU shared by myself and Pasu-Chan. This is the second story in the Harmony's Chosen arc.


Written as a birthday present for Pasu-Chan, and based on her Noodle AU. Familiarity with the AU isn't necessary, but I’d definitely recommend checking it out for some amazing artwork :raritywink:

Now with a TVTropes page!

Proofread by ArchAngelsWings, mouch30, Mind Jack, and Eddie Grammar
Cover and all internal artwork done by Pasu-Chan.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 86 )

Wow :pinkiegasp: your writing style is great :twilightsmile:

That was really fun to read, can't wait for the next chapter :pinkiehappy: i'm curious to see what will happen :twilightsmile:

Sadly i have to pass this too :raritycry: When will you continiu with my fav. drama dream team of all time? so i can read you're amazing stuff again :D

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Thank you :scootangel: I'm looking forward to getting to it too :yay:

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Eventually :twilightblush: But since I've got to finish current projects, and I've got another novel length story before I can get back to them, it'll probably be like a year or so :ajsleepy:

7984738 okay i am just gonna get back to my tumblr cave and wait

I enjoyed this. I hope we get some time to get more info on Pinkie and Dash and how they met, how they are friends, how close are they, and other such things.

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I plan on making a separate story to focus on each of the mane six, with this one being mostly about Applejack. That's a long term goal, though. In the meantime, there will be more Pinkie and Rainbow in this fic, but I won't be exploring their history until Rainbow's story.

As for how close they are, I'm just gonna leave this here :ajsmug:

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Nice I will definitely be following this story.

Ok, this is nice. :twilightsmile: Honestly, I am intrigued by the deer, we don't have much canon information about them. I've heard they are like elves in a sense, I am guessing you are using that idea?

Sure, I will read this. I did mention I like your Applejack a lot. :ajsmug:

Hey, if you are making a series out of this AU, can I has Sunset Siren someday? :raritywink:

Looks great so far! :derpyderp1: :pinkiehappy:

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Glad you're enjoying it :yay: Yeah, the deer have some definite elfish qualities, which is why Applejack is several centuries old in this story. We'll learn more about them as the story progresses.

My plan is to first go through the mane six, with the final story (Twilight's) covering Nightmare Moon's appearance in this AU. Once that's done, who knows? Since Who We Become will remain my more active series, it'll probably take me a long time before I even get through those six, and I don't want to make plans too far out. But I'm sure I'll continue writing in the Noodleverse, and I'd be surprised if Sunset doesn't pop up (especially since I'm the godparent of her child :raritywink:)

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Thank you, hope you enjoy the rest of the story as well :scootangel:

7985108 So, there's a big chance. :yay:

You keep writing ponies for as long as you want, I keep reading; because you are good. :twilightsmile:

This was simply lovely. Nicely done.

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Thank you, glad you're enjoying the story :yay:

The illustrations were simply great :twilightsmile: both of them, and I really dig Rarity's design :pinkiesmile:

I wonder what will happen to Applejack once she reaches White Tail woods...:rainbowhuh:

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Aren't they though :raritystarry: Pasu's certainly done an amazing job on all the Noodleverse artwork.

I wonder what will happen to Applejack once she reaches White Tail woods

Let's just say the adventure tag will finally make sense :ajsmug:

Hehe, I like this characters. :twilightsmile: The interactions are fun.

So, it is one of those stories. AJ will go to great lengths, adventure and peril to prove Everfree can be exciting. But Fluttershy in reality has no intention of leaving the forest, and is perfectly happy of how things are. Geez, you just want to see something different, and suddenly bam... your love one thinks you want to abandon your home forever.

Btw I think your title in the story document is wrong, still says chapter one.

8000702 Thank you very much! :twilightblush: (Yes I am Pasu) Hopefully I'll draw more of the water noodle soon so that rabbit can use another picture if needed :twilightsmile:

8001697 Oh, happy to know you :pinkiesmile: Kricky showed me many of your great works, I added you to my follow list. I'll be looking forward to that also :pinkiesmile:

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Fluttershy: "I decided to try a new manecut. What do you think, deer?"
Applejack: "I don't know who you are anymore!"

lol yeah, somedeer might just be a little resistant to change here :twilightsheepish: And thank you for pointing out the error, that's fixed now :facehoof:

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No need to draw anything on my account :twilightblush: I already have the pictures picked out for chapter three :raritywink:

8003224 As if you didn't know I had plans on drawing her anyway? =P

When is chapter 3 being uploaded? Is this because of the time change last weekend?

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Unfortunately, I'm forced to take a bit of a break in my writing (more details here, but basically it's some irl stuff). I'll be updating chapter three as soon as I can, though.

Welcome back! :raritystarry:

What a fun read. This Discord is interesting. Obviously, he can't be trusted, but is definitely charming. And somepony had to point out AJ's silliness. :ajbemused:

You update whenever you want to update. Don't worry none, mate. :twilightsmile:

OMG Yes!!!!! I didn't get the notification because I have been on a plane for the last 12 hours with no service! I can't read right now because my next flight is about to take off so I'll read it later tonight!

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Twelve hours and then another flight after that? That's a lot of flying :rainbowderp: Hope you enjoy the chapter once you've finally landed for good :raritywink:

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Thank you :twilightsheepish: Who'd've thought that out of everyone, Discord is the one to notice AJ's being silly here :derpytongue2:

My my you rendered Discord's character perfectly :raritywink: I wonder what he wants with the Sungrove and what that emerald pendant is for...

Nice idea having him an hinny as well :pinkiesmile:

Great work as always my friend :twilightsmile:

Yay, so it's back! It's great to see Fluttershy's side of the story. We got a lot of characterization for her. And also little pieces of world building for the deers. King Aspen seems very genuine, and that parallelism with elves, shows.

How do you put so much inside one single chapter? Again, glad you are back writing. :twilightsmile:

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Fluttershy is more troublesome to write in this story than others. Trying to keep her character recognizable from the show can be a challenge while factoring in that she’s an insanely powerful draconequus who is centuries old and is respected on a level equal to or greater than royalty :twilightblush: Hopefully she’s still reading as Fluttershy, and not just someone who has the same name and appearance traits as her.

Glad Aspen’s coming across well. I was hoping he’d come across as reasonable and not just look like a huge jerk. I mean, he can be kind of an ass about things (iirc you read the IDW comics, but if you haven’t read the one with the deer, he yells about half his dialogue lol), but he does have a pretty valid concern if we’re being honest.

It’s good to be back, and as always I’m glad you’re enjoying the story :yay:

It is so good to see more from this story. The chapter was very enjoyable.

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It's good to be back to updating it :pinkiehappy: And of course, I'm glad to hear that you liked the chapter :yay:

I love it... Very well done.
Keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

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Thank you :scootangel: And I'll certainly do my best :raritywink:

I liked the exchange with the king most of all, I really like reading Fluttershy being serious, not to mention Rainbow's and Pinkie's entrance :twilightsmile:

Also..."Taxidermy Mishap", really? Some ponies are such speciest

Ah, so Fluttershy and our griffon friends are already looking for AJ in the forest. And something unknown, or more like someone, is going to make this adventure a lot more interesting.

Good chapter mate, lots of mystery! :twilightsmile: And good to hear you are ok.

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Noodleshy is best Shy :yay: Glad you’re enjoying the story :raritywink:

Also..."Taxidermy Mishap", really? Some ponies are such speciest

lol the show is full of examples of ponies being racist against non-pony species (not so obvious as this, but still). That slur came courtesy of a friend of mine who’s far better at addressing problems of racism in storytelling than I am.

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Everything I planned for chapter five wound up being 15k words, so I decided t split it into two chapters, which had the upside of leaving me with this fantastic cliffhanger :pinkiehappy: Glad you enjoyed the chapter, and you’re right that things are about to get a lot more interesting in the next one :raritywink:

Don't worry, the action was great! :pinkiehappy: And the character interactions were genius.

A roc uh? Cool, I always like them giant birds; would be so awesome if we ever see one in the show. :twilightsmile:

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That’s certainly nice to hear :scootangel: And yeah, rocs are pretty cool and underappreciated. It’d be fantastic to see what the show would do with something like that :pinkiehappy:

I wonder if there gonna be more adventure like that?

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Not in this story specifically. The final chapter will be published next week, and it mainly serves to close up the story and answer some questions that are still open. But I am hoping to keep writing stories in this universe, which will include more adventure stories :raritywink: Joining the Noodleverse group is the best way to keep up with any further stories set in this AU.

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joining now I can't wait to see more!

:yay: That was indeed a great adventure! It had great action, mystery and characters. I know it will take some time, but I really wish to read more of this AU, and its version of the elements.

Thank you for the nice story! :twilightsmile:

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Definitely looking forward to continuing in this AU someday :yay: A story focusing on Rainbow will probably be next, but I can’t guarantee anything. I’m glad you liked it, and thanks for all the comments along the way :pinkiehappy:

Man, sea serpent Rarity is just so based.

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Finally... finally someone reads this story.... thank you :raritystarry:

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I said I was only caught up on one universe! :raritywink:

The idea of the Apple family as deer is just so perfect! I love how it keeps their family dynamic intact. All the species choices work so well with the characters. Rainbow as a griffon is particularly good, especially with what their general character and culture are shown to be. And Lady Rarararara as a sea serpent continues to be my fave. It's just so glamorous!

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I'm glad you like the species choices. I always thought if Pasu had made the AU later, Pinkie would've been a yak instead of a griffon, but I also like her and Dashie coming from the same place. Gives me something to work with for Rainbow's story in this series :trixieshiftright:

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