After dealing with a series of crazy events, Sonic, the Rainbooms and the others could use a nice break. What better than to spend it at Camp Everfree. However, when strange magical occurrences begin to happen, it seems there's more to this camp than what meets the eye. As they try to deal with the sudden outbreak of magic, Sonic and the rest find out there's something threatening about this sudden appearance of magic.
*Edited by GunsRGreat*: https://www.fimfiction.net/user/271496/GunsRGreat
Chapters (6)
Yes! That famous quote! I was waiting for you to do a joke like that! God that just made my day!
7846654 Thanks, hope you enjoyed it.
7846685 I did. I love how Shadow has dirt out for Twilight. I'm still getting used to this whole major crossover but nonetheless fun to enjoy. There are a few mistakes you made. Like I said, I could help you edit if you want, make it more easy to read.
I could've done this yesterday but I couldn't cuz I was on my phone so yeah.
Another nitpick:
It should be:
I mean, it's an already used quote, you might want to get it right. Still a good read, I like it and I honestly can't wait for the next chapter [too bad i accidently deleted my tracking bar, idiot]
Sorry for taking so long with this but I finally found some time to read through this.
You do have a solid foundation in place with the Equestria Girls cast and the Sonic cast playing off each other, yet you still need to work on some sentence structure as some sentences don't make sense. I would suggest asking for an editor to help you with this because they could show you things that I probably wouldn't even notice. Don't give up on this story as again, you have a solid foundation.
7873890 I'm already his editor
Uh... why did you take out the horizontal lines. It's more confusing. Also why are the parenthesis still there. I see you kept the initialized words to make it look like it's a thought, but the parenthesis are useless. I'm actually kind of mad. I'm not kidding.
7925492 When I copied and pasted it into the doc, the lines got deleted, same as with in grammarly I'll fix it.
I'm sure there are worst roomates then Sonic and Knuckles. Pretty Sure Sonic and Shadow being roomates would end with the camp being destroyed by a Chaos blast.
"The best ever is starting!" She urged as she headed to the dock, still wearing her smile"
I think you mean "best thing ever,".
"Gaea Everfree"
I'm pretty sure it's spelled like Gaia Everfree.
Looks like Shadow doesn't trust Twilight after the whole Midnight Sparkle thing happened. Hope he doesn't make things worse.
"Tails drew two fox tails,"
You know that makes me wonder how did Tails get his nickname in this world. He's human so he doesn't have two fox tails, so how did he get it here.
"If you must know, it's a symbol of who I am. Who I was created to be. It represents my resolve to never let my past consume me again and I choose my own destiny."
Really? I just thought it was the Black arms symbol and you picked it because it looked cool.
"You heard me. I'm not interested in looking at a few lights in the sky."
Really? I would think that would be the one he would be ok with. I imagine he did a lot Stargazing with Maria.
I like the addition with Sonic and the gang helping the girls out with their powers.
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Hmmm, well seeing as the ARK is always surrounded by stars, perhaps it's nothing special.
BTW, I was wondering, did you skip through the other chapters?
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Nope left a comment on almost every chapter.
I was wondering if someone else was going to show up to team up with Gloriosa didn't think it would be Naugus.
Well that's the end of that chapter or story as it were.
I will say I found myself liking the friendship games more (which is weird since I liked the Everfree movie more than the friendship games), but this story was still good.
Good to see Shadow apologizing to Twilight.
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Really? I personally feel like LOE was better written to me
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I think to me at least it felt like there was more going on with FG.
One thing I wish you did.
"You didn't have too many friends growing up, did you?" He said in a somewhat snarky manner.
Shadow just have him a slight glare before he walked off. Timber then turned to Twilight.
I wish that you said this: Shadow paused a moment,and his face darkened."No.No I didn't."
Still,It's pretty good so far.Time to keep reading!
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How far are you?
By now I've finished it.I really like this one!Keep up the good work.
Might wanna fix this.
Ex:Knuckles and Rainbow Dash Teased as Sonic gave them a glare.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA Oh man that phrase is timeless, years later and It's still funny
Classic Shadow and Sonic rivalry nice to see then getting along...well as much as they can get along anyway
Also Knux and Sonic rilvary shows, It's been a while since I've seen It
Dammit Shadow stop being such a dick!!!
Real smooth Manic
Dammit Shadow why are you such a dick!!!
Sunset has seen some shit:
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Ufff that's gotta burn
Ok the final battle started, gotta admit I didn't expect to see Naugus here...well then as Sonic and Pinkie would say:Time to party
Ah the good old Light Speed Attack, brigs back memories from Adventure
The shipping intensifies!!!
I...I did not expect this...
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA wow I can't totally picture Sonic saying that
Shadow being nice for once...FINALLY!!!
I feel like Sunset Shimmer singing the song "Just a Thought" from Steven Universe would fit more suited for helping Sci Twilight get come to terms from her "Midnight Sparkle" fiasco and helping her move on.
Man I wish sonic manic knuckles tails and sliver and shadow whould discover the elemental powers and the golden weapons from ninjago