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Trixie and Twilight are best ponies! (Diamond Tiara is best filly :D )

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Trixie returns to Ponyville some time after Boast Busters after encountering an injured filly on the road. After the filly is checked into a hospital, some complications prevent her from leaving, and she's forced to linger around the town for a while longer.

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19k words? ima read this later

That's what I said. Then I decided to read it and did not regret it.
I enjoyed Trixie's character, her interactions, I thought Applejack and RD had in-character reactions to Trixie's return, and of course Pinkie Pie. Well played.

19k words of awesome. This should be featured.

Not a bad story at all! A little on the well trodden path as far as plot ideas go but it was executed correctly. Kinda like a ponyfied "Trapped in Paradise" type of tale. I liked how the cast didn't go overboard in their reactions to Trixie though it did take a few acts of Celestia to get them to warm up to her.

Good show!

Came in for a long read, left with a smile. Great story, great writing skills. Moar!

awesome story, :pinkiehappy:
gotta say i saw this and thought "eh why not." To be honest im really glad i read this.

I was really impressed by the way Trixie's return to Ponyville and her encounters with most of the mane six were all facilitated by simple but realistic slice-of-life problems- the "Ponyville befriends Trixie" plot was neither arbitrarily enforced without any stated reason, nor did it grow out of a plot that spanned anything larger than the average episode of FiM.

Indeed, this felt like it could have been an episode of the show- and for a oneshot slice of life fic, I'm not sure there's higher praise to be given.

I'm going to watch you. You have talent.

NEEDS TO BE FEATURED!!!!!!!:flutterrage:

19k words.
(cracks neck)
"LETS DO THIS!!!":flutterrage:
"YEAH!!!!" say the stallion on steriods:twilightoops:

ok not going to lie but this is the best story i have read yet and i have read A LOT of storys. this is good enough to be a real episode this could be a two episdoe season premier no joke it is that good. i wouldn;t mind seeing trixeing in a lot of episodes in the upcoming season she is such a great character and was only ever used once they need to bring her back and make her become frineds with the mane six that would be awsome.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::yay::yay::yay::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::eeyup::scootangel::heart:

I will read this "later". But before I do I wanted to say something important.
19k words? No problem. I like a good long story.
The problem is when you stuff it all into a single chapter. Not only does it make "putting it down and coming back to it later" more difficult than necessary, but if I'm viewing this on a mobile browser than can't quite handle such a long page, it'll get cut or I'll have to do something weird to get it to even render.

Please consider splitting up long stories into their own chapters. Not really for any narrative purpose (though I'm sure for that as well) but also the technical difficulties it presents when not reading from a legit computer.

“Oh well. It’s not like she won’t be coming back again. I'll ask her next time.”
:unsuresweetie:
three days later
SHOWMARE KILLED IN UNFORTUNATE STAGE ACCIDENT:twilightoops:
:facehoof::trollestia::moustache:

...dont hurt me:fluttershyouch:

WOOOOW!! This story was HUGE!!:twilightoops:
I still loved this story. I really like how you portray Trixie in your stories.:trixieshiftleft:
I will keep an eye out for more.:pinkiehappy:

Quite nice, here. Although I'd like it if the others apologized for trying to ruin Trixie's show... and maybe remember she fought the Ursa while they didn't.

But my usual whining aside, :raritywink: awesome story. Great, logical chain of events. I hope this gets a sequel of some sort.

Just started reading and thought I'd mention the first line. I assume it's supposed to read "the sun was high in the sky" as opposed to "the sun was his in the sky."

Dis Gon B Gud.:pinkiehappy:

I'll read it later, k?:pinkiesmile:

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*slaps self* Thanks for pointing that out ^_^;;

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Tell me about it. It's hard to imagine who invites more disaster to themselves, Trixie or Twilight!
HEY, SO-CALLEDSMARTPONYMAGICIANS, SOMETIMES IT IS BETTER TO STOP TALKING AND NOT TEMPT FATE!
That was pretty nice, could have been an episode. Also having a pet that's near-invisible serves as a nice way to sneak him in when he wasn't seen before in Boast Busters.
Also gotta love Pinkie thinking she really CAN bend reality all Discord-like. :pinkiecrazy:

Definitely one of my favorite Trixie personalities, to me it felt a lot more real and believable than most of the other fics of her, especially in her backstory and reasons for avoiding friendship. I really liked how it all worked out too.

Oh, and nice touch with Leon, perfect pet for Trixie, i liked him. although it does make three reptile pets, (four if you count Spike haha) anyway have a smile or 6 :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Good story, I liked Leon in it as well. Just one line I had to comment on.

'where friends will be there to welcome you back with open legs' I know this line makes sense since they are ponies, but I still had to laugh a bit at where my mind wanted to go with this one. ^-^;;

Now that was a good story, I kinda wish there's been a bit more of Trixie's past and a little more build up to trying friendship.
but seriously this was an excellent fic, I really liked the mixed up motives and views Trixie shows throughout this fic and having her have a pet chameleon genius! :pinkiehappy:
anyway this was a great read I like that she stayed jerkish but not ridiculously so early in the fic and developed more later.

Silly Twilight, she's going to Canterlot, for a scheduled performance. I think she'll see the Princess there.

854536 No it couldn't. Derpy's scene would be better but they cut it down so it would fit. I would be horrified at what they would do to make this fit.

I'm going to be honest. When Leon turned out to be a chameleon I really wanted him to say a line from Star Fox 64.

welcome you back with open legs

I'm sorry..but I lol'ed so hard at this. I knew what you meant but still... :rainbowlaugh:

1928961 you know whats really odd? i read your comment then clicked to give the story a thumbs up and got a message saying "sorry cant let you do that starfox" incorrect rating code. like wtf?

:trixieshiftright:Ok, I'll admit it...you made me cry:pinkiesad2:.When Trixie opened herself up to friendship...it was wonderful. I loved:heart:your story. I think I know what you were going for, a kind of redemption for Trix. :twilightsmile:You gave her depth and understanding that life is about trust.:raritywink: I hope she comes back in season 4.

Interesting take. Trixie being socially inept and avoiding social interactions she can't control to avoid getting hurt... very interesting. I would have liked to know more about what kind of past led to her shunning the very concept of family, although I suspect it would have been... hurtful. The story could also have worked a bit further on the bit about Trixie and Twilight's interactions as young, it seemed to have some potential but was just left hanging. It could have been developed a bit further. If anything, I feel that her trauma was healed a bit too quickly.

I like the depiction of Trixie being utterly baffled about Derpy's attempts to pay her back, as though she can't understand how anypony would even imagine a mindset where doing everything you can to save a life isn't base moral standard. It both meshes well with her lackluster social skills and goes contrary to what you'd expect of her. It also deepens her character quite a bit, compared to the two-dimensional character she's often depicted as.

Good story.

*snicker* open legs

This was rather disappointing. It basically consisted of Twilight and her friends threatening and bullying Trixie into being friends with them rather than actually trying to get to know her. Pinkie especially felt out of character with the creepy plunger note.

A very appealing start and Leon was quite cute but I stand by my thumbs down. Sorry.

3524274 I don't know. The plunger thing was so random it would fit Pinkie Perfectly.

Awwww. :pinkiesad2: Very interesting take on Trixie, everypony's in character, the actions were understandable and overall an adorable story that made me feel all warm and fuzzy. :rainbowkiss:

Great job. :twilightsmile:

THIS WAS JUST AWESOME !!!!! I loved the way twilight worked to break down Trixie's walls. Trixie seemed so lost inside, trying to understand the concept of connecting with other ponies. she seemed like she was wound up too tight, with such high walls to keep out everypony, out of a tragic sense of fear. I am so happy, that she had the courage to reach out to someponies, who were trying to reach out to her. to see her so fearful of lightning and thunder, was just so adorable, but also tragic in a sense. the story had kind of a "twilight" zone feel to it. it had a sense of exploration, like meeting aliens for the first time.

It was sort of off putting about how forceful Twilight was in insisting to make friends with Trixie, but otherwise this was a rather good story. As someone who spends most of their time alone, the idea of spending time with others can be scary.

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Made me feel the same way at the end.
God i love this story so much.

“CUTIE MARK CRUSADER ESCORTS! YAY!”

oh my. i wasn't aware that Ponyville had that kind of... service. or that they would teach it that young. we live in progressive times, i suppose.

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