Open up your Heart

In his time at crystal prep Bronze Wing has gained the reputation of delinquent and outcast.
With the friendship games coming close his conection to a certain girl during his childhood will start to resurface.
Part of the PoME Universe.

Cover by maddymoiselle

Chapters (3)

Prologue(Part 1:Bronze) · 5th Jan 2017 · 3,099 words
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Prologue(Part 2:Sugarcoat) · 14th Apr 2017 · 1,966 words
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Unexpected encounters · 17th Jan 2018 · 3,663 words
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Wanderer312

Wanderer312 #1 · Feb 15th, 2017 · 1 · · Prologue(Part 1:Bronze) ·

Well, this is a good start for your story. Welcome to the PoME group Haseo55!

Also, I like it what you did with Ember.

Zeroxdoom

Zeroxdoom #2 · Feb 16th, 2017 · 1 · · Prologue(Part 1:Bronze) ·

So far, you have a solid start. I'm actually looking forward to how things progress from here on in. And if you need anything, feel free to ask me.

SolarEclipse912

SolarEclipse912 #3 · Apr 14th, 2017 · 1 · · Prologue(Part 1:Bronze) ·

A good start so far. Welcome to the PoME universe.
*smiles* Well, this should be interesting.

CSC

CSC #4 · Apr 22nd, 2017 · · · Prologue(Part 2:Sugarcoat) ·

This is pretty good, but if feels a little rushed.

Haseo55

Haseo55 #5 · Apr 22nd, 2017 · · · Prologue(Part 2:Sugarcoat) ·

8112063 I had problems with that chapter. I really couldn't find a way to have it be longer as i was really struggling to make it.

CSC

CSC #6 · Apr 22nd, 2017 · · · Prologue(Part 2:Sugarcoat) ·

8112591 What you could do is dig deeper into the characters' backgrounds or maybe further describe how their days went and what was on their minds. Just some advice.

Fluttercoat