Diamond Tiara needs a little more help changing her ways. She used to be a bully at her school, but now she's a changed pony.
However, is change really that easy?
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Picture's upside-down.
7843416 sigh, I know... I probably have to fix it on a computer.
7843416 Fixed!
You made the picture, right?
7846077 yep!
Okay so far. I shall follow.
Hmm... this surely is an interesting follow-up to Diamond’s reformation. I believe you are throwing darts in the right direction, but this story is weighed down by recurring issues in direct speech, capitalization and also mixed up past and present tenses. However, these are very easy to deal with, trust me. If you are willing to learn, I can give you some tips and try to explain the grammar rules
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Yeah, my true focus is the interaction between characters through dialogue. not very experienced with actions
8575492
The issues I mentioned pertain mostly to the grammar used to create dialogues.
Well, truth be told, the actions there could be a little more detailed, but what you have is sufficient
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I would like to learn how to better myself. We should take this to PM's also, don't want the comments to be full of us talking
Hmm, I'm intrigued...