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Autumn Wind


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After her jealousy made the once meek Luna into the dangerous Nightmare Moon, her sister Celestia had no choice but to exile her to the moon so that she would no longer pose a threat to the ponies of Equestria. However, she would not let her sister spend a thousand years alone. Every week, Celestia sets off to the moon, to see what is happening of her dear sister...

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Me gusta.
It works well as a one-shot story idea. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you very much. ^^

#3 · Jul 30th, 2011 · · ·

Awesome!!!

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I'm glad you enjoyed it!

#5 · Jul 31st, 2011 · · ·

I loved this story, It gave just the right amount of anger and bitterness that Nightmare Moon had in her and the end bit where she's screaming at celestia and then asking her to come back and breaking down was beautiful. I'd give it 5/5 if I could rate.

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Very happy to know that it was to your liking. :twilightsmile:

#7 · Jul 31st, 2011 · · ·

Heart breaking and beautiful.

#9 · Aug 2nd, 2011 · · ·

DAMN YOU YOU MADE ME CRY:fluttercry:

AMazing! if i may say,You have a HUGE amount of skill.:ajsmug::raritystarry::twilightsmile::scootangel::heart::yay::raritywink::pinkiehappy:

#13 · Sep 4th, 2011 · · ·

I like this. It must have been hard on both of them.

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I'm very thankful for the compliment.

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Glad you enjoyed it.

:pinkiehappy:

I probably commented on this on Equestria Daily saying how much I liked it.
If not, then let me say that I REALLY like this. I have always thought that the Luna/Celestia relationship closely parallels the relationship I believe exists/-ed between mankind and God. That makes it very special to me.

So you can see why I would be RE-reading this! In the course of doing so, I came across some POTENTIAL fridge-logic*, namely that Nightmare Moon seems awfully physically accessible for Celestia to have not tried assembling a group to serve as the Elements, and bring them to the moon to attempt to perform the exorcism there. Rainbow Dash can carry four other ponies when on an adrenaline rush. Twilight can lift a water tower (with a late-night milking's worth of liquid in it) and an ursa minor** at the same time. Celestia is physically much larger than Dash, and has the proportionate strength of an earth-pony to boot. Carrying six (or five, if she could work around her exalted position to make some friends herself) to the moon might be non-trivial, but she could figure it out.

*something that seems to make sense at the time, but later you realized doesn't.
**Admittedly ursae may be extremely light for their size, potentially being literally make out of the essence of the night sky. Call that air or vacuum as you like, and even considering the density of stars in our world... they COULD be very light, but not necessarily.


Of course, there are various ways of explaining this. Here are the ones I thought of:
1.) Follow the Mystery Science Theater 3000 mantra: "Just repeat to yourself: Its just a show. You should really just relax." This is the option I expect you will take, but it never hurts to ask. :derpytongue2:
2.) The power of the Elements is currently bound up in simply KEEPING Nightmare Moon imprisoned, and nothing is left over to attempt an exorcism. This, of course, changes upon her escape.
3.) Celestia foresaw Twilight's existence, can't use an Element herself any longer, and knew that the raw power of the magic in the Element of Magic would be key to the chances of redeeming Luna. She was giving Twilight the longest possible time to mature, physically, mentally, and magically (if, for tactical reasons, not socially).
4.) Nightmare Moon can see into the future and/or read mortal minds, and the exorcism plan required the element of surprise. Seeing Celestia flying towards the moon with 5 or 6 ponies with her would be a dead give-away.

I'm very thankful for the comment, Draco Dei. I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

As for the plot hole: Celestia is not yet ready to resort to such a thing as an exorcism. She trusts her little sister's strength, and truly believes that together, they can get through these difficult times. She is persuaded that she can reason her sister and help her through her harsh times.

Plus, considering travelling to the moon involves her literally turning into a beam of sunlight, it'd be rather hard transporting ponies along with herself, let alone have them be able to survive on the moon. (She probably spent a lot of magic just keeping that basket in one piece.)

Of course, we all know how that worked out.

oof, my heart.. :fluttercry:

I didn't cry, but the very last sentence was painful to read. I always knew Nightmare Moon was hardly as evil as she thought she was, and this fic further illustrates the foal-like weakness and sensitivity that Luna must have had, even in her Nightmare Moon form. It really was a tragedy that Luna had to be sealed away for so long, good Fic, I enjoyed it.

I agree with anon, it was a very good read.

This is very good, particularly in its portrayals of Nightmare Moon and Celestia. I get tired of Celestia being shown as an overlord, power hungry under the surface. She's not like that, and Trollestia fics annoy me.

I agree with LesserSpottedBrony down to the word. Celestia is not a tyrant. However, she is a monarch of an entire nation, and certainly not a pushover. That being said, she does have a kind heart, which shows at every given opportunity. Brilliant story, Good Sir. For a third time, Bravo!

Beautiful story, heartbreaking to boot.

I don't usually like stories that put Luna ON the Moon (instead of IN the Moon), as they're mostly trying to milk some cheap drama, but here it was done with gusto. Good work.

*checks first comment date 50 weeks 1 day* wow that means that this was first posted shortly after the site was brought online. It's amazing that this fic not only holds up well but is still a great piece of work.

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Oh, I remember this one! :D Look, my name's in the A/N, no wonder! It was a great idea. :)

The most wrenching part is where Luna finally speaks, begging for her sister not to leave.
It makes you wonder if Celestia knows it will happen, and leaves so her resolve doesn't break, or if she doesn't, and leaves too soon without knowing it.
Either way, tragedy of grand proportions.:fluttercry:

That tugged right at the heart string and left me feeling saddened for both f them, excellently describes and great dialogue.

my heart. my heart it hurts. oh god.:fluttercry::pinkiesad2::fluttershysad::raritycry::raritydespair:

This story makes me cry everytime I read it. Celestia would never really leave her sister to one-thousand years of loneliness, but was always there for her. I wish they made this canon.

This story is beautiful.

Wonderful. Just wonderful

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