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Everypony has secrets. Some are big, some are small. Shadow's secret is a big one. When his secret is discovered, the young colt is forced to run for his life and quickly finds himself simply trying to survive in a land that he has only ever heard about in rumors and history class, a land ruled by an iron-hoofed tyrant: Equestria.

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Next to him, Shadow seemed to think about it for a moment before shrugging. “I don’t know what happened, but if you ever want to talk about it…”

Who is speaking? Because Shadow is in the previous sentence, my first thought was that it was his. But the next sentence is Shadow saying "thanks", so ... confusion. Try to avid writing like that.

I shall keep that in mind. Thank you.

I'm going to join the alliance of "Give this story more views" and spread it to all my peeps. Then I'm going to read the rest of it (unless it takes a turn into weirdistan, or awkwardland)

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Thank you. I tried to avoid those places as much as possible.

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