A story about Luna and AJ coming together to learn more about each other. Luna is first to learn more about interacting with the worlds best pony, AJ. But will this seeming innocent talking turn into more? IF it does.. when.. and is it between Luna and AJ.. maybe someone else?
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If ya read comment and tell me how i did!
A few things. First of all, how the -yay-
is this romance?
When I first saw this, I promiced that I'd facehoof if it was ramance.
And itwas
I have no idea how good it is, though. Never red anything like it.
Really? THats.. umm.. good I would say.. but its not a romance yet..... Anyway.s.. would ya read more?848816
can use alot of work, be sure to space out your sentances ;example:
The cool air ran through Aj's mane as she worked harvesting the Zap apples, her hind legs and hooves were burning after all the bucking, but she could not stop knowing she still had half the orchard to work on.
*double space*
"Sup, Aj!" Dash shouted above the tree tops.
I hope you get what i mean, just dont crumple everything, its hard to read. storyline and ploting can use work. try and really think of something that can catch the readers eye, something that may intervene with Luna and Aj being together because of royal duties, try to set something up, per say this was between or after nightmare night and Luna for some reason wanted to see Aj, it felt like you jumped too quickly between timelines. DETAILS!
Thought i'de never use that emoticon, heh heh
i tohugh i had siad it was after night mare night... Crap. I copyed and pasted out of word. I was originally worried about the spacing though. Glad thats the only complaints, it be my first muddled attempt
Oh, thank you, thank you!!! There are not enough of these pairings!.
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which ones?
884554 Luna/A.J
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Ahhhh thank you. I have an ever rarier idea fro a new princess alicorn as well...
Comment if ya enjoy it! They are what give me hope someone other than me likes this!