This story is not like your usual story that is centered around the ponies that we all fell in love with. No, instead it is a story about a young gryphoness, traveling the world to find her long lost sister Gilda. Along the way a creature that was once thought to be nothing but a myth, swears its loyalty to her a-
WAIT!!!
What is it Hexxus? This had better not be one another one of your shinanigans.
Oh Author you faltter me...but no I interupeted you cause you are presenting you story wrong. You dont want to bore these good people to death do you? Let me do it and I will pull them in and get their attention.
Ok go ahead...but make it quick.
Will do! Now this story is about me and my master Anny, you see she wants to find her sister Grechin or something, and along the way we have alot of fun from cooking fish to shoving wood planks up prince's a-
Ok thats enough out of you. Anyway I hope you all like it and I know it may not be the best but hell, nothing is perfect.
That is an adorable cover art
The description and story image clash ...
Oh well, it is cute. I'll give this a read since I am a hardcore Gilda / griffon fan.
1122076 Yah it took me a long time to find a Equestria style Faun picture.
You lost me at the Bill Gates part. Up until then, I was getting into it, but a real world reference just ruins the entire atmosphere. You need to remove that part.
Also, find an editor. The errors are distracting, and this honestly isn't a bad story.
all right then, i like where this is going, i'm just gonna help you with the grammer k?
The Dunk Gryphon
She was just glad that the cloak was able to the odd coloring of her feathers
the last sentence has double spacing before "the cloak" and you forgot the word "Hide"
can't find anything else so far, keep up the good work.
1122328 whos the artist?
1123090 Idk who it is exactly, but I pulled it off of this web site
nice chapter. but i agree with hexxus. most of those books can be predictable.
Probably my favorite chapter thus far.
Hmm. You give me props, but you didn't put up the proofed version. Por que?
1371328 I am sure I have told you this before Mally, but any changes done to a chapter, that has already been posted, usually wont be changed unless absolutely necessary.
Well I'm Happy with this story so far. Sure I may not have any where near as many views as I had hoped, and no one but my proofreaders seem to be commenting on it any more, but this was a bit of an experiment story like my other two; My first was just me trying out the writing scene and an attempt at an adventure story, and my second was an attempt at a Horror.
All I can say is at least I get 1 new person who is following it each time i post a new chapter which means more peeps are reading it.
Well that sucks, this is one of my favorite stories out there, the second one i ever favorited and all around an excellent story. I am sad to see that it, like too many before it was canceled before it's time.
Don't feel too bad at the end of the day man. Writing this kind of stuff is very hard. I myself tried to write stories at least 3 times. I never could finish them.
Perhaps in a few months down the line, you might want to pick up this story again. Who knows? But if you don't, that's alright.
2018759 2017901 ... Yeah I may pick it up later. That is for future me to know, but for now I am done with it. I hope you guys like what I was going to have chapter wise on that G-doc I linked. There are a few moments in it i can say i am proud about.