After rereading a Hearth's Warming Tale, Luna begins to feel as if the true purpose of this holiday is tainted so she goes outside to think. Celestia finds her and they begin to chat about why Hearth's Warming isn't just an illusion to keep the Windigos away. Eggnog and Donuts included.
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Maybe give it another run through or get an editor to give it a look see.
Spelling for the most part seemed fine, some seemed oddly phrased though. Also some lack of punctuation where it would be better served to have it.
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A comma after the word "exhales" would be good. Also using the word "twisting" rather than "twisty".
7807980 Whoops, thanks for noticing that. I'll go through and fix those problems.
Aw. This was a nice treat. It seemed to be written a bit differently than most stories but I like it!
7808869 Thank you! I tried my hand at writing in present tense, so that may be why it sounds a little off.