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Death smiles at us all; all a man can do is smile back.

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This story is a sequel to Princess Celestia, Princess Luna, and A House Centipede


One night—before Luna can raise the moon and takeover for her sister—they struck.

The cockroaches.

With their castle under siege by hundreds upon hundreds of cockroaches, Princess Celestia, Princess Luna, and their new resident house centipede must take back their castle before the cockroaches take over the castle—and all of Canterlot.

Edited by the awesome James Fire.

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HOORAY!!!!! :yay: ITS" HERE!!!! YESSSS!!! YESSSS!!! :pinkiehappy:

Y'know, I wonder how Twilight is...

Me too my friend, me too...

Good sequel, might want to check for spelling errors again but overall it was just as good at the first

Okay, yeah that was totally awesome! Loved the running battles and the banter amongst sisters.

I think that Twilight would probably be fine. I mean, she does live in a crystal castle, so there's not a lot of things to attract bugs.

Unless you can come up with a geovoric equivalent to a cockroach. Perhaps a dreaded pest of dragons, something that infests and eats away at the hordes. Yeah, I would love to see Spike go all Smaug on something like that, dragging Twilight along for the ride.

All of my yes belongs to this fic. Fantabulous conclusion, sir!

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Can you name a few? I went over it twice, and am fairly certain I didn't miss any.

Oh naw, you don't need to worry, any errors that are present are minor and hard to detect. I think it was a few words where the apostrophe was in the wrong place but I could not recall. If you truly want to seek out the ever tiny error, I am sure you will find it if you read through the story once or twice.

I will be favoriting this as well :pinkiehappy:

This was appropriately ridiculous and a fun trip throughout. The banter between Celestia and Luna was particularly enjoyable, and the fights surprisingly intense, considering the enemy was, you know, roaches.

I am now awesome? Cool.:trollestia:

(Unleash ...the scorpions!> :flutterrage:

(I don't think you've planned this quite right.> :rainbowderp:

(At least ponies won't talk about that parasprite thing so much any more> :twilightsheepish:

1. I'm calling Oggy.

2. NO SPIDERS.

Thankfully, there was nothing behind that house centipede—with the exception of more of the war-torn throne room.

Well, that and a Hornet.

:rainbowderp:...

Uh oh.

Also, this story made me laugh out loud multiple times. Terrific!

True One: >Got PTSD
>After War against cockroaches.
Real One: And now we will have a war against Hornets, and who will be the one to defeat them?

Oh, no. Hornets. Call in the 325th Japanese (Neighponese?) Honey Bee Regiment. They're our only hope to bring a swift, fiery death to these hornets.

They called World War I the war to end all wars. You know what happened next. I have a feeling that this is a similar situation.

7819644 no call fluttershy
or gostbuster

Soo,.. They take out one swarm, another rises to take over it's place... Or something

7819795 Considering I had no idea the original story would take off as it did, I opted to make the two sequels separate stories.

I intend on writing any other entries as multi-chapter stories.

That said, if somebody believes (and your sarcasm—or at least what I guess is sarcasm—tells me you no doubt do) I'm a one-trick pony...

Well, I find it better to write what I'm good at than to write a genre where I know I'd produce something atrocious and ineffective.

So, I'll gladly take the title of "One-trick Pony" and wear it with pride. :raritywink:

That said, I appreciate your comment. I'll try to spice up my comedy more.

Reminds me of the final battle in Small Soldiers.

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If you wake one, you wake them all.

I can see it now!

The Princesses, Royal guards(or what remains of them) and The City of Canterlot vs. The Swarm of Hornets!

:pinkiegasp:Yes! Sequel plz!

7820963 That's a pretty neat sounding idea. However, I have no idea when I'll get to writing another sequel.

7821037 Well, not if he does it right. A series can turn very good actually, if you do it RIGHT. Besides, some people like humor. Or does this story BUG you?

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You have some good points, but your tone makes you just sound like a spoil sport.

7821037 You seem to confuse me with someone who strives for attention—and an enormous following.

All I care is that I made at least somebody happy, and that I made them laugh. If I did that, I'll feel a sense of accomplishment and happiness.

Judging by most of the comments, I succeeded in doing that. As a result, I'm happy and feel the story fulfilled its purpose.

Now, I admit, I should've just added chapters to the initial story. It wasn't wise of me to make two separate stories. Alas, I'm not Nostradamus, and I can't foresee the future. So, I figured I'd just make two sequels for the ideas I had in mind.

But, back on topic. As I said before, if I'm a "One-trick Pony" as you put it, then whoopty-fucking-doo. I'm here to share with the world my insane ideas and hopefully make someone laugh.

Evidently, you didn't realize that. Somehow, in some insane way, it went over your fucking head.

And that, to me, is funnier than any joke I've ever heard.

7821135 Hmmm. The person you replied to seems to be working at some salt mines.

7821365 I don't disagree with them—I do believe, to a certain degree, that many of my stories follow a similar pattern (extreme whacky scenario, character overreacts, somehow is resolved in some ridiculous way).

I'm always ecstatic to receive feedback, but their tone—as DizzyDan put it—made them come across as a spoil sport. While I won't disregard their criticism, I can't help but think of a disgruntled World of Warcraft player who didn't get an item they wanted off of boss, but someone who isn't as good as them got it.

The Utah Salt Flats have been given a humanoid form.

7821386 Well, I've got four years of writing experience and feedback under my (large) belt. I could help you out if you so choose. I'll just use this one meter ruler to smack your fingers if you do wrong.

:applejackconfused:

Well... that was a thing... that happened...

Indeed it was.

:rainbowlaugh: Ah, this legendary comedy draws to a clo--

Well, that and a Hornet.

Y'know, I wonder how Twilight is...

:rainbowderp:...

VEEERRRTIIGOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

7821037 I'll read it. It amuses me greatly.

7821689 I shall! Now then: thanks for reading! Also, a late Merry Christmas/Happy Holidays! :pinkiehappy:

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Then let me echo their criticism in a much more level-headed manner. Hopefully this will help you take it more seriously.

Boy, those roaches sure drove Celestia and Luna crazy. :rainbowderp: Glad they took out the leader, but they have a lot to clean up. Plus, they're gonna need to take out all of the roaches that have escaped. You don't want these things to ruin the castle again.

Anyways, that was a wild and crazy story, and I loved it. :pinkiesmile:

7821689 Irrelevant. You weren't criticizing constructively. You were bashing the person and insulting them and their readers. Why, you're still doing it. Learn how to criticize and be more polite and we won't assume you work in salt mines.

Twilight needs to be doing something with sharks, imo.
Sharks and lamps. Lamp sharks.

7819311 True. And actually, there's a word missing as well.

“I, uh, don't think so,” said Celestia. “If anything, they've been rounded up by the roaches.”

The word in red is the missing one.

Comment posted by SKTelecom deleted Dec 27th, 2016

7822973 Awwww. What's the matter? Upset that I called you out?

Probably because they picked out the only ripe berry from your truckload of rotten ones. Also, no. You haven't been telling them such things. You've been telling them that they're a lazy bum that would rather rehash the same thing over and over again than make efforts with ideas. You've repeatedly insulted this person under a thinly disguised bout of supposed 'constructive' criticism and get all irate when someone calls you out on your bullshit, like you've been doing here.

Nice ad hominem fallacies, by the way.

7823188 Why. You really are mad. Sorry that I called you out on your bullshit and TREMENDOUS use of ad hominems. They just nullified everything you've written up to this point.

I made my points, but you chose to ignore them. Ugh. Why is everyone I argue with so damn predictable?

You gotta stop this, man. Makes you look like a foo'.

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To which I asked you to show me how my comments do not fit the criteria of constructive. You failed to do so by stating that I'm just mad,

False. I deconstructed your comments to the root of the issue and made an observation on your wording and manner of responding.

ignoring the points in my post to continue your narrative that I'm upset which, again, somehow discredits me.

False. Your ad hominem fallacies discredited you. I never outright stated that you didn't mention something useful, just that you were doing so in an incredibly rude and aggressive manner.

No, but I'll ask, do they have to be to somehow have validity?

They have to be if you want the person to pay attention to you. For example, I've had very aggressive people come on my stories spewing fire, but I told them that their behavior was inappropriate whilst still picking out the points they made so we could have a proper conversation on how to improve my story whilst also determining if it wasn't the reader that misinterpreted the points they made. By throwing water on the fire, they managed to focus and validate their points rather than tryin to 'Tear down that wall, Mr Gorbatsjov!'

Had they continued being aggressive, it would only demonstrate that they're angry for no real reason and trying to find whatever they can to devaluate my story and my self-esteem (Good luck with that).

If I was employing ad hominem attacks, I wouldn't be making an argument at all against why this fic isn't a great idea.

Ech.

Well, have fun with your delusions thinking anyone who says something negative in a way you don't approve of is just salty or not being constructive. It'll get you far in life.

Again, you're showing some solid logic here. Any three year old throwing a tantrum would be proud.

(I'm not quoting the first reply for obvious reasons.)

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Them moving goal posts, tho.

7823315 I used a fallacy? Where?

Don't worry, children. Just read the story, have a laugh, kill some brain cells, and ignore the comments section.

7823343 Don't listen to this man. HE SMOKES A PIPE! DAS BAD FER YER HEALTH!

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You know, as much as I love a good internet fight/debate, this is getting old and sad.

Listen, I'll stand by my initial reply to Rebecca. I'm not here to get a massive following. However, I agree 110℅ with them. And sure, they did come across as somewhat aggressive. However, as somebody who once aspired to be a film critic, I do believe that—in certain instances—the only way to get a point across to someone is to be aggressive with your criticism.

I like to compare it to applying rubbing alcohol to a wound. The pain lets you know it's working.

Anyways, I won't ask you two to stop. However, I'd appreciate it if you took this to PM.


7821879 Despite my arrogant response to you on the first story, yes, I'll take your criticism seriously for future stories.

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'Preciate it, guv.

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