The Pieces Lie Where They Fell

by Evilhumour

Chapter Ten: ???

Chapter Ten

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It was in the sealed chamber with the prisoner when the spirit of Balance arrived. It glared at the intruder.

"What are you doing here?" The snarl caused the spirit to frown back.

"I am no longer what I was once, but now of Balance until I am restored," the spirit spoke, its purity causing minor discomfort. "As such, I am forced to aid you as I aided them."

It blinked before an ugly expression appeared. "Impossible and you know the reason why!"

"I give my advice to you; it is your decision to take it or let it rest," the spirit said, shaking its head. "My duty is do-"

"So they have started their return, with Kindness as the first?” the being mused to itself, looking satisfied upon seeing how much this angered the spirit of Balance. "I suppose I should nip this in the bud before they become a problem for me and I do suppose I should see how the world has fared since my last venture upwards. So thank you, spirit of Balance, for all of your aid."

"I care not for your thanks," the spirit hissed.

"I know." A cackle of laughter was the only response, with the spirit vanishing as the sound echoed in the room. Preparing to send itself upwards, it turned to the prisoner and said, "Beware Elements, for I am coming and there is nothing you can do to stop me."

Comments

[Evilhumour]

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It's up

[Evilhumour]

7950109 Thank you very much!

[Copper Springs]

This chapter was short but very intriguing. I have to wonder if this prisoner is one of the villains we know. I feel like the prison might be Tartarus. If it is Tartarus and it is a villain from the show my guess would be Teriek. However I think it would be far more interesting if the villain was an original character. There is not much here to tell who it is or what there goals are or why they are opposed to the Element beards, but that is clearly intentional. Even with its short length there is such a sense of foreboding. I love it! Can't wait to read more!

[Copper Springs]

I don't understand how this has so few views. The concept is interesting. The characters are diverse with unique personalities and all likeable in there own way. It well written and well executed. There is a good balance between character introductions and further plot development as well as sprinkles of the lore that now surround the cannon events of the show.

[Evilhumour]

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Yes you should~
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You're mostly right on your reasoning-remember, not everything has been revealed and not everything is as it seems

And telling you what Page's cookie said would be too big of a hint
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The stories of the Mane Six were told and retold so many times that certain aspects of them were focused on to the point where they overtook everything else of their character

Fluttershy's Stare become exaggerated and intertwined with her animal to the point where she became the Stern Warden

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to your question, my answer is maybe

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In any relationship, secrets can poison the relationship and as one as important as theirs, this could cost them dearly

Or not.

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You'll see~

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No coverart to grab attention

[Copper Springs]

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Wow. Thanks for responding to all my comments! That makes sense with Fluttershy and her stare.
The cover art thing also makes sense. Really can't wait for the next chapter!

[Evilhumour]

7951540 Working on it right now

[My name is R]

7951133 If this is no good that is fine, but I offer it to you.
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[Evilhumour]

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Oh I like it but it's not my characters to tkae.

[My name is R]

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Neither are the vast majority of the pictures used on this site. If you feel these are too far off the mark for what your characters look like don't use it. But I assure you that nobody would mind that they are taken from elsewhere.