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Before Sunset Shimmer tried to take over a high school, long before she fled through the mirror portal, in the days before she was even the personal student of Princess Celestia, the young filly met Canterlot's most elusive stranger. He gave her a secret. And then a gift. And finally, a revelation.
In the end, he really only brought Sunset a curse.
In which expectations do not guarantee anything.
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So close and yet so far, a very thought provoking story.
Very good story, with extra tragedy heaped onto the standard Sunset's backstory. Having a time-traveling Starswirl accidentally think she's the "Chosen One" doesn't help with Sunset's issues at all. Though that's part of what I always find interesting/tragic about Sunset's life- in almost any other century she probably would have done very well as "just" an accomplished unicorn, unfortunately due to the timing she'll always be in Twilight's shadow (super-powerful kind savior and Princess). Sunset's flawed, but I always feel pity for her and her obsessions.
An excellent look into Sunset's past! Starswirl interfering with her life, thanks to a misunderstood prophecy, makes quite a lot of sense here. And I loved her interactions with Celestia, from the innocuous start all the way to the end. Am I right in assuming that the thing that has the guards agitated is one very big baby dragon whose head has just burst through the roof of the School's examination hall? (I'm not sure if the alicorn Sunset sees in the mirror is what she'd be like as a princess, or if it's Nightmare Sunset...)
One nitpick: a typo (appropriately enough!) in the name of Ms. Spell Check, here: "Ms. Spell check never did this" when Sunset goes for a spin in the chair.
This was beautifully tragic look into Sunsets past.
This very well-written. Especially nice usage of the words "Sunset" and "Twilight" at the beginning and end there.
Touching, tragic, and explaining so very much. Magnificent work. Thank you for it.
Though now I can't help but wonder what manner of meddling Twilight might have experienced...
Favorited cause I'm a sucker for bookends
This was a good story, Sunset and Starswirl have very interesting personalities in it. I don't like the ending much though, since it feels like it should work on more levels than it does.
That was very nice. I really liked it.
I wrote a critique/review of this story; it can be found over here.
The formatting for this story is really excellent; it adds a sort of poetic-ness to Sunset's tragic past. A part of me wonders why the stars would send/compel Starswirl to lead her down this dark path. Her potential as a possible saviour of Equestria makes sense, but why then does Starswirl appeal to her vanity instead of the good she might do?
Also, being pedantic, I think a better answer for the analogy would be "nightfall."
Is this meant to be Discord? I recognize the other two, but I'm finding it hard to reconcile such a snake with anything that Twilight faced before.
Not sure, but I think there's supposed to be a line break or something here.
Missing a period.
Missile.
Funny that Canterlot Palace would have a tower explicitly named for its location.
Really good. Never thought about the precise details of Sunset's backstory before this. This is a nice take on it.
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I can't say much that others here haven't already said, but well, seeing someone try to handle the weight of prophecy (even if misguided) paints her as a beautifully written tragedy. It makes me wonder whether it was also destined for her to become a worse person and run away or it just became a self-fulfilling anti-prophecy(?) because simply being told one is the center of prophecy would surely puff up more than a few egos.
Either way, thank you for this great fic, Fahrenheit!