What happens when the entirety of Equestria, if not the fate of the whole world, relies on the shoulders of just 6 heroes and their companions? Did anyone dare to question what would happen to the future if those heroes can no longer bear the burden one day, and those believed vanquished rise again?
Twilight Sparkle, Starlight Glimmer & Spike have witnessed the outcome of such dependency; a future without the bearers of the elements. Chaos, darkness, conflict, fear, anguish, sorrow and ruin. And their only response to that was acceptance, rehabilitating Starlight Glimmer to be part of their ranks so perhaps she could make a crucial difference.
But there are many more events aside from time manipulation that can cause such dark times. The heroes triumphed over many fiends and challenges that brought everybody to the brink of doom. Even those they reformed narrowly managed to save their land from rule through fear and intimidation by the former changeling queen's hooves.
Ultimately, it does not change that time could be running out for them and this world at any minute. There might be no future in anything they believe to have accomplished while everyone else spectated powerlessly. False hope sown by narrow minds only reaps exasperation after all. But all inhabitants of this world deserve something else, something nobody could never achieve on their own.
A future of lasting harmony.
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Interesting, very interesting. I’m curious to see where you take this and I like how we switched POV’s without to much trouble. I like your portrayal of Starlight to a point, though I think I prefer when things focus on Twilight over Starlight. Despite my preference good story and will be looking for more.
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Oh thank you so much for the nice comment! Yes, the main POV’s will be Starlight and Twilight, with a noticeable higher focus on our beloved alicorn princess ^^ I am glad you are looking forward to more, as more chapters are already written and will be published semi-regularly. (I hope for Tuesday and Saturday releases)
Despite everything, I noticed you say you liked Starlight’s portrayal ‘to a point’. Could you give me more insight so perhaps I can improve?
In any case, thank you once again, and if you want to kindly help me out share the story with your friends ^^
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I haven’t watched much of season Six, so I don’t know how her character has developed from the mad mare at the end of season five and the unsure student at the beginning of Season Six, thus I don’t know how much she’s grown period. That said I feel as though you portray her as a strong character who’s having a little bit of a problem. Though that said I can see how you portray starlight being how she is in the later parts of season six and into season seven. I guess I’m just having trouble relating starlight who hypnotized Twilight’s friends to the starlight who only had to give Spike ice cream for finding Twilight’s books so it’s more me than you. Honestly I have no problem with how you portray her, as I said, but I do feel as if I don’t know as much about this starlight so I’ll have to read and get to know her. So don’t worry you probably portrayed Starlight spot on, I just can’t reconcile the old starlight with yours. Hope that explained it, even if I kind of rambled and repeated myself.
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Oh no I totally understand where you are coming from, Jake. Without spoiling anything, Starlight had a similar growth as Fluttershy throughout the first 2-3 seasons. Once overtaken by her shortcomings she made up with her past and build friendships for the future, though she is still a bit in self-doubt. I suppose the latter will change once she truly leaves Twilight’s wing to prove herself to the world. Which totally not coincidental is one of the themes of this fanfiction ^^
(Besides, the Spike part was more for comedic relief anyway, just to keep it somewhat light like the show ^^)
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Ah, should have figured. Also the comedic relief worked in my own opinion. It was just kind of cute and adorable. Well I’m curious to see how you progress her growth and hope that it keep up with the content so far and is enjoyable as such, I’ll probably comment on every chapter.
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(Sorry, I just hate not replying to comments! ^^)
Glad it worked, at least for you, because its very diffuclt to write instead of show like in cartoons. Thanks for the support and I am looking forward to each and every comment!
Oh wow, that was...wow. Nice work can’t wait to see how this continues. The equality thing is scary but awesome.
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Accidental comment or forgot to type something in? ^^
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I guess I know how to do cliffhangers! Be excited and stay tuned until Saturday!
Glad to hear you like it!
I would suggest "they know," since they don't necessarily know it is one person, and in modern English, "they" can often act as a singular pronoun of indeterminate gender. Either that, or reword the sentence to eliminate the need for the cumbersome phrase. It ruins the flow, and I know you don't want to do that.
Also, while I do appreciate a good cliffhanger, there are different kinds of cliffhangers. Cliffhangers should make the readers nervous or excited for what happens next, but they should not interrupt a scene or action sequence. (With some exceptions, but they are more rare.)
Of course, the only reason you are getting such nitpicking criticism is because your quality of writing is rather good, and your story is quite interesting. Any corrections or suggestions I make are friendly, and caused me no irritation whatsoever.
I just am one of those few people who really likes editing things.
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Oh trust me, I read my stuff 4-5 times before I publish it again, and utilize the new 'read function' just to make sure it flows naturally.
First of all, thank you for the delightful comment! I have seen the changes you suggest and put the first one into place. As for the cliffhanger, do not worry, it's not the interruption you might perceive. It was a good cut, especially chapter-size-wise, that allows the next part to occur much more smoothly, so stay eager! : 3
Thank you for your compliments and nitpicky criticism; I sincerely appreciate both! And while, due to having attained an apprenticeship, I won't post twice a week anymore, I still hope to a regular publishment on Saturday afternoon American time! : 3
I'm looking forward to your future comments : 3