Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.
Spike has never known who his real parents were. He love's his sister Twilight, their family, and their friends. But deep down, he knows there is something missing, and now he has to find that part of himself.
Inspired by the beginning of the episode "Dragon Quest".
(If similar ideas have been used, I swear I am not trying to steal another's idea. This idea has been on my mind for a while.)
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Really must say one thing repeatedly.. More I loved it and I enjoy Spike getting some well deserve backstory I would love to see a similar case about the Applejack family too but this has caught my attention I am certainly looking forward to more.
(Me) Nighty! Stay still! *I try sending air blast too blow the fire away!*
Story's interesting, hope it's continuing.
Can I ask you a question?
8024021 Okay.... shoot.
8025143 Luna doesn't really "GOBBLE" ponies up does she, whether on her holiday or for pleasure does she? That's one of the reasons I'd like to keep my distance from her to be safe.
8025642 Of course not..... at least not the well behaved ponies. She tends to find Snotty Crooked nobles very sweet tasting. It takes all her will power not to make her snotty nephew disappear.
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(You do know I am joking right?)
8025712 I know you are but it got me thinking as well. This must be why we don't see Blueblood much anymore. Knowing the minute he or any of the other nobles step out of line, Celestia will have Luna gunning after them like a MAD DOG ON A MOTOR SCOOTER & they'll be in more trouble than a BALLERINA IN A BALLROOM BRAWL.
hm... so let me get this straight: the archaeologists never came back to the site, regardless of how easy it was to get to, the mother never went to the pony city, even though she knew full well about it (she even knew its name!) , the parchment never degraded in the time it was laying there, despite how long it was sitting in the open, Luna just happened to have transformation potions for ponies and dragons on hand, so that the main six will practically get everything their hearts desire and never feel ostracized in any way at any time, and it just so happens that Twilight's mother is not only one of the ONLY ponies able to decipher it, but she can FLUENTLY READ IT AND HAS A SPELL ON HAND TO TRANSLATE IT INTO THEIR COMMON LANGUAGE... did I get that right?
8207563 That's pretty much what it boils down to. I mean, after having to hide themselves both times when in the presence of dragons, you'd think Twilight would have thought to use the transformation spell. And yes, they'll be dragons, but of course, their pony personalities will be in tact. And yes, there is a whole bunch of plot conveniences, but if there weren't, I wouldn't have a story to use. Yes, the mother didn't check the pony city down below, yes the parchment never degraded, yes Luna conveniently had potions on hoof for the adventure, and yes Velvet Sparkle is fluent in ancient dragon text and knows spells to let the words on the parchment translate into text that everyone can read in their common pony text. I want this story to take off, and honestly, it was hard to try and come up with it any other way. I mean, have you seen how many plot conveniences the show MLP itself has:
1. There just happens to be a city close to where the castle of the two sisters resides.
2. All the element bearers just happened to be in that very town.
3. Twilight just happened to know a spell to break her friends from Discords grasp.
4. Queen Chrysalis just happened to be able to know where the elements were when the Mane Six went to fetch them.
5. Celestia just happened to have the book close by that would make twilight a princess.
6. Discord just happened to know about the Tree of Harmony.
7. Tirek conveniently didn't know about Princess Twilight, yet happened to know who Princess Cadence was. (Doesn't that tell you that Cadence is over 1000 years old, yet somehow she's in her teen stage in a flashback with Twilight talking about how she's her foal sitter.)
8. Starlight just happened to know where the throne room was in the season 5 finale, yet can't find her way to it in the season 6 premiere.
9. Trixie Conveniently had items on hoof to use to get to the throne room of the changeling hive.
10. Chrysalis was able to easily get away in the season 6 finale.
Those ten are just the tip of the iceberg. I could really knit pick the show if I wanted to, but I'm sure you don't want to hear me ramble on.
Anyways, sometimes you just need plot conveniences to get the story rolling. I apologize if the story isn't to your liking.
8207601 I can understand your reasoning, but the way most stories take off, as far as I can tell, is by having dedicated writers that can plan/plot ahead, make jokes, be realistic, describe what's going on, and set a pace that's comfortable for the reader (that's also changing with the mood) , not just getting a story done or long enough (though the latter does sometimes work)
but I honestly can't agree with most of your points about the show and their plot conveniences (though, yes, the first one is pure convenience)
2. the second one isn't necessarily coincidence; it could be the work of the elements, themselves, which would MAKE them stay in the town, or even see a bit into the future, just enough to see what ponies would be in that town at the right time, thus could've been other ponies entirely if they happened to leave
3. the spell was a memory spell, making them remember what discord's control made them forget/ignore, which was more of a fluke that making them remember actually worked (I'm not sure why you didn't go that way, really)
4. they were in a special building with special guards and special interests: ALL armies attack strategic points, and they mostly do it on what LOOKS important
5. I forget, did she just happened to have it around, or was it something she kept safe and only presented it to her when she thought she was ready?
6. how could he not? That's like saying America didn't know about Russia during the cold war
7. he could've gotten some info from the ponies he had to contact when he was weak (since not many would have known at the time that Twilight was a princess/alicorn) , and/or Discord, but yes, that was a plot point that wasn't really fleshed out
8. I didn't watch either (I know I have to) but in BOTH, was she going straight from the entrance to the thrown room? Because if it was the same start and finish BOTH times, I agree with you.
9. I haven't seen the episode, but I can only assume it's a general teleport item that can move to a desired location, or an important one... but again, I can only guess
10. again, I haven't seen it, so I don't know, though that does remind me of that Avatar the Last Airbender episode: The Chase
but either way, it wasn't that the plot conveniences were there or not, it was mostly that they were so egregious and rapidly fired... I mean, I would've loved if each of those points were whole chapters in and of themselves, where the cave was in some remote place that the explorers that made it there nearly died just getting to, that the dragoness searched everywhere she could, even getting frustrated when she couldn't talk to, or explain well enough what she was looking for to other creatures, how her message was etched in stone, carved with such precision that obviously took years of dedication for the etching to be a testament to her dedication as a mother, a monument that would last eternities, that it was going to be a journey that Spike had to go on on his own, or with his friends there only as support, rather than him practically just being the cargo, where it took days, if not weeks to get even parts of the note translated, with Spike possibly growing tired of waiting and nearly rushing out on his own, thinking that any step forward, even in the wrong direction, is better than waiting... something like that
8207649 I suppose I can see your point. But it would take me a long while to think something new up, and I'd rather not put this story into a hiatus.
8207649
So I added a couple things to the letter to help take out a few quirks, I just can't find a way to remove the others. Sorry.
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It's fine, and it's not that I particularly minded, it's just that I'm kinda anal about consistency and things making sense in their own world, as well as wanting a fully fleshed-out story, like I think this CAN become
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I will try my best. This will have it's focus mainly on Spike. I just didn't want to have that dragon is with ponies and not his own kind tid bit being in the conflict, at least not for the time being. I have a way the story is gonna be set up. It's not gonna be a long story, but it won't be short either.