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Dusk Cloud


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Anthony my fellow writer,

You have really outdone yourself. This story is brilliant. Great structure I really go into it as soon as I started reading. And I absolutely can`t wait for what`s in store. The grammar and spelling is perfect and I truly love your creativity.

Keep Moving Forward

Your Friend, Pegasister and Author,

Sparkle Writer :twilightsmile:

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Thanks:moustache: I'm glad you like it :twilightsmile:

Boom, boom, POW!
Knockout chapter my friend! :rainbowlaugh:
As usual keep up the good work! I can tell this is gonna be great!:pinkiehappy:

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And that is why I like you :trollestia:

You're a fabulous writer! Keep up the good work!:ajsmug:

4,000?! *whistles* Damn man. Kudos.
And I hope we don't lose Blade. He's awesome!:rainbowlaugh:

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Since you're the only one that commented (I think my absence hurt my small following:ajsleepy:), what do you thinks so far? The plot, character development, mysterious backgrounds of the two characters (there are about three more coming along, so there will be even more interesting characters), or the general atmosphere of the story. Even the fight scene, I'm interested on what feelings were generated from that particular part:twilightsmile:

I'm generally interested in your opinion, so don't hesitate to say goods, bads, and uglies, ight mate.

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The fight scene reached some great standards, seriously!
Honestly, EVERYTHING flows into the next flawlessly, each new character development was keeping me more and more interested in their role in the story as a whole!

I can't think of much more to say, except...I LOVE IT! XD

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Thanks most of it is mine, but Honey Mead's contribution was helpful:twilightsmile:

i...FUCKING LOVE IT!!!! YOU SIR GET A LIKE AND A FAVE!!!! keep up the good work

bro, that was amazing, i regret not checking this out sooner. and one more thing, i noticed you call all the youngins fillies, alas the male foals are called colts. so in theory you calledd Storm Runner female. but other than that FUCKING FANTASTIC!!!!!

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You posted everywhere and it's hard to keep up :pinkiesick: Thanks for the heads up, I'll change it when I get the chance:twilightsmile:

Yea I'm really fast with my posts when they're notifications so I tend to post everywhere

JESUS! Fuck me that was a screwed up chapter!
But great work none the less!:twilightsmile:
Seriously though, that was FUCKED. UP.:pinkiesick:

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I try:rainbowwild: I hope it was worth the long wait:twilightblush:

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It was that well descriptive and the fact I'm feeling slightly ill now, I'd say mission accomplished...:pinkiesick::pinkiesick::pinkiesick:

1192571 im with you on this one atom, this chapter was INDEED, FUCKED UP ALL DOWN TO SHIT LAND AND BACK UP AGAIN...
and on that note, it was a great chapter nontheless good job, cant wait to see more

DAMN! SOMEONE HAS THE SAME NAME AS ME! SHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHUGAR!!!!!!

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Oh, sorry lol I don't have an OC, that's just the character:rainbowlaugh::twilightblush:

Where do I begin?

How about with just a quick critic overview?

First of all,

Your story seems to be coming along quite nicely and you have delivered quite the plot and well written dialogue. The characters are not what I am used to and there is also a sense of intensity among the characters.

Secondly,

I love the way this has been handled and it is in much need of recognition for the way which it`s been written. Meaning it`s brilliant and deserves way more praise and appreciation.

Lastly,
I have to say that I`m thoroughly impressed with your writing and to be perfectly honest I would literally kill to write the way you and several other people do.

So there you have it, my opinion and perspective of "Conspiracy of the Record"

Keep it up the awesome writing!

Your pal,

Sparkle Writer :twilightsmile:

I'm still jelly of your writing skills :trixieshiftleft:

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What's different about the characters that make you not used to them?

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:trollestia::trollestia:

Anyway thank you both for your feedback:twilightsmile: I'll continue to the next chapter when I can.

Also, try and get people to read and comment on this. I write for fun, but it is still kinda nice to know that people are reading it:twilightblush:

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I don`t know, but maybe it`s because I haven`t read it in a while. But I am enjoying it. :twilightsmile:

The more I read, the more this reminds me of the Eragon series...hmmmmmmm...dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl2.png
Besides that, top notch as always!

Okay, I'll put it in a blog and try to get what little followers I have to read it

Finished reading. This was actually a lot better than the one I looked at before in pretty much every way. As a rule of thumb I try not to scrutinize things with the comedy tag. It just doesn't seem fair since comedy is subjective and I wouldn't know if something was a mistake or a joke. All things considered though, major improvement, sorry about earlier. Still not a fan of the rape, but I guess it's an artistic choice.

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Comedy? That's not right its supposed to be dark:twilightblush: or both? There isn't a tag for what my story is really

This is getting more and more interesting. :ajsmug: