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XenoPony


Hi, name's XenoPony. I'm an avid pony writer and fan fiction author with a wide range of stories.

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First! Haha, first comment on a Fo:E story!:yay:

But seriously, there are an awful lot of bad Fo:E stories out there. This story however seems to be starting up to be something epic. It's well written with almost no mistakes and the characters are intresting and enjoyable to read about!

Well done Sir/Madom, it's good to see we might have another big Fo:E story in the works!

Also, Dragonfire is pretty awsome!:yay:

7743704 Thanks!:twilightsmile: I'm glad you enjoyed it!:yay:

7743713 Don't mention it!:pinkiesmile:
7743743 Hey, I wouldn't have done it if I didn't think it was a good story. Now if it makes it big, we can all look back at that first comment and laugh.

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Heh, now you've got me looking at the first comments on all the big FoE stories!

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I have a feeling that the use of 'we' instead of I in the prologue isn't a mistake and will be relevant later on... but looking really good so far

7743906 Who's Fred?:trixieshiftright: Also, it should be Fred's.

7745455 Fred is a magical man, he was there for me when times got tough, he can also be found on the hit realty TV sow Bear in the Big Blue house. and thanks didn't notice that :twilightblush:

7745667 Avatar like that, comments like that... Are you just a troll?:unsuresweetie:

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7745673 nah I just wrote my first comment badly and I came off as being a bit condescending and my profile pic is that cos I didn't have anything else so I just drew something on paint, and its normal, don't know why you think it wouldn't be.

7745695 Arr, it's cool don't worry about it!:twilightsmile: Everyone derps sometimes.:derpytongue2:

Ballin' cover art!

Had a read, thought everything was well written, so I'll be facing to see where this fic goes.

I hope I don't come off as rude here but... I feel like this entire prologue is an unnecessary exposition dump that's been done in every other FoE sidefic (including the original FoE itself). I guess it's more of a personal thing on my side since that sort of stuff turns me off as a reader.

7747254 It help set up a story, makes it so you don't necessarily need to read any other to understand what you're about to read, so a prologue is important.

You shouldn't let something a short as 588 words turn you away from a far longer, and well written story.

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I agree, while a prologue may not be for everyone, just ignore it if you don't like. It's not absolutely necessary after all.

Personally I thought it was very interesting.:pinkiesmile:

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It just felt generic to me, and I'm not saying that to trash on the story, I just wanted to give my feedback since I assumed that would be something the author would value. It just gave me a bad first impression that this would be a pretty predictable FoE sidefic.

And I was actually planning on reading the next chapter and give my feedback after I was finished, but given that I have three thumbs down, I'm going to assume that's pretty rude around here. Sorry.

7748191 I wouldn't worry about being rude, I don't really mind what people think because everyone's entitled to their own opinion.

If the prologue wasn't for you then I understand, they are pretty common place among Fo:E side stories. But I will say that I have put a lot of thought into making this pretty different from other Fallout: Equestria stories, especially in the long run.

Regardless, I understand and respect your opinion and thanks for the feedback it's appreciated.:twilightsmile:

7748191 Sorry if I sounded hash, didn't mean to put you off what I consider to be a good story.
P.S: I didn't down vote your comment.

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Not really :/. I thought I was the one being harsh.

7748237 If it's any consolation, I didn't think you were being harsh at all, regardless of what others have said.:pinkiesmile:

Keep an eye on your 'to be' words (is, are, was, were etc). You got them jumbled up a couple of times.

Not much else to comment on at this point. Dragonfire spent a lot of time narrating how good-at-stuff and attractive she was, dropped hints of a dead family, and accepted a mercenary job.

I'll need to see more before I can get a proper read.

P.S. You mentioned making it different than other FOE fics. Don't make it different for the sake of being different, ensure there's a point.

7749699 How can theit not be a point to being different?

I did say that I would read this story mostly due to the cover art in question and that it has my curiosity and now that I have... consider me intrigued :trixieshiftright:

New FOE yay! :pinkiehappy:
Fuck the world I gonna fuckin read it blyat and soon suka! :rainbowwild:

7762903 Well someone seems keen, but yeah this story is good.:yay:

7762479 Just ingnor the Dislike ratio, most are most likly just Fo:E hates because this story is good and well written, not just the run of the mill crappy Fo:E spin off.

We need chatper two!

7762926 Don't worry, I always ignore the like/dilike thing. Haters just abuse it.

Well, you got my attention with this!

The characters have me so far, and I can't wait to see Griddle get some sort of comeupppance (it if happens at all).

Can't wait to see what happens! And I just hope we can keep eachother's attention with our fics!

PS - I thought I recognized the covert art. Sw1tchbl4de did the cover art for my fic too

7762903 Glad you're so intrigued, hope you enjoy it whenever you get around to reading.:twilightsmile:

7768577 Glad to know you're intrigued, and I can assure you this is not the last we'll see of Griddle either.:pinkiesmile:


77629037768577 Sorry for such a late response, my times become a little limited in the run up to Christmas.:twilightsheepish: Regardless, I'm glad you're impressed and thanks for the comments!:yay:

Damn... I really feel sorry for both Dragon and Cherry... I may not know the feeling of losing my parents or siblings, but I do know the feeling of losing a loved one...

7982048 Yep, it's a pretty harsh world. But they'll be more about what they've lost latter on in the story. Poor girls.:fluttershysad:

I want to give Cherry Pin a hug.

8009912 Yeah, she does seem very cute and huggable.

Visually, Dragonfire reminds me of my Sparkplug:

https://derpibooru.org/1231306?q=oc%3Asparkplug

They have similar neon stripes and manestyles.

I need to give you a read <3

8019066 Cool, I've never even seen that OC before, but they do look similar, at least in mane color. Sparkplug looks pretty awesome, though.

Thanks for the read too, I hope you enjoy it whenever you get around to taking a proper look.:twilightsmile:

If the main cast were voiced, what would they sound like?

8092285 I don't really have much to compare them to, yet if I was going to make a comparison to the show I'd say that Dragonfire's voice would kind of be similar to Rainbow Dash's, but a little lighter, perhaps somewhere between that and Rarity's voice. Star Strike would sound more like Big Mac, only more talkative, obviously. Cherry I'd say is like a slightly more bold version of Fluttershy, and would speak with less of a whisper.

That's at least how I imagine those three main characters, although I can think about more if you want to know.:twilightsmile:

Is that a Stable Pony I see in the title art? Ooh...

So now we have two new characters, but now a new mystery opens up... who were the ponies in the photo, and who is Lucky? Guess we'll just find out soon enough....

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