Discord comes down with a strange illness that leaves him weaker as each day passes. With a little insight from Zecora, the ponies travel to the source of Discord's magic disappearance, but what they end up fighting against is not what any pony expected...
I'm liking this story so far. Discord really doesn't look too good...
to her back seems right
>>KTPony
Thank you!!
Normally I dislike couple fics or fics that divert from canon, but I make an exception for Fluttercord
This looks interesting so far, I wonder why the Elements are attacking Discord now...
good story, um i think the last four lines are in the wrong font
7784460
Yeah I noticed that. I fixed it though
7784442 They realized he should still be a villain according to general literary rules for villain reformation and acted accordingly!
If you are going to cut off a sentence or a question don't put the period of the question mark.
7797500
Thank you for pointing that out for me! can you tell me where you found it?
The first spoken line of chapter 6
7797517
Thanks! Do I get rid of the question mark altogether and just leave the dash?
Yes
7797526
That is very helpful, thank you!! I'll fix that right now..
"Rainbow face palmed when she said that."
*facehoofed
7803589
Ah thank you! Auto correct can be so annoying!!!
Oh ponyfeathers...
i am reeally enjoying this story and i hope discord gets better
Just got caught up with the story, and I really like the idea of it.
While yes, the writing is not the best there is, but it is good(?). I would tell you what exactly is wrong, but Im afraid I dont know that much about writing to be able to tell... Either way, Im enjoying the story so far ^^
Love it! Very cute <3
Discord got ebola 10/10.
The Twin
Three days is really fast for her to become that thin, pretty sure it's impossible actually.
Also Fluttershy shouldn't know about the plan to destroy the elements otherwise she'd know they had no problem getting them from the tree.
Don't take this the wrong way I like this story but that is a plot hole and I felt like I should tell you.
7843155
I get what your saying about the 3 day time period. However, as you know, Fluttershy is a nervous, hesitant, little thing. I think it's natural for her to be nervous about the Elements leaving the tree, especially given the situation. Under normal circumstances, I don't think she would've given it much thought. It was a life or death situation, It would make anybody nervous..
7843155
Now that I look back on it, you're right. That doesn't seem right. I fixed it though! so it should sound make more sense!
*Gasp*
Ok I have only got to the part when Discord is moving the blanket away from his son's face but it is OK so far, I like it though I wish you made the part where you had them falling in love ( or maybe you did I don't know) and I count two mistakes. When Fluttershy is holding her son, it says 'without taking his eyes off the little bundle in her' and then it stops, you never finish the sentence. Then, when it says 'being he help create' shouldn't that be helped instead of help? I hope this information helped.
7854837
Thank you! I went back and fixed it!!
No!!! Discy!! He won't die....right?
Oh shit....
You know, when I first saw the title, I immediately thought of Cell from Dragon Ball Z. How'd you think of the title, anyway?
7995243
I just thought of the main plot, how Equestria is perfect when it comes to harmony. Since Discord lives in Equestria, his powers throw off the balance of harmony. Since Discord lives in Equestria, and his magic is imperfect to the balance in Equestria.
Therfore, Equestria's Imperfections. Get it?
Fluttershy should've asked Twilight for magical help.
Ooo. Now it gets interesting: Do we keep Discord alive and risk danger to the land? Or do let Discord die and help the land?
Well, so much for the dilemma.