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Jongoji245


A fellow Brony, Bluthy (Don Bluth Fan), Dinosaur lover, G-Fan, and an animation student. I worked on fan fiction in Deviantart, and would like to submit them, revised, to you.

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Like us, Ponies take their first eye exam when they become six months old. It's then that a child's place as either popular or forever scrutinized. Today, this is Flurry Heart's first eye exam, and this would bring several... weird questions by the people of Equestria.


NOT canon with the Jongojiverse. It was a thought that was in my head for a very long while.

Now with an audio reading.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 26 )

This is beautiful.


Wat :rainbowderp:
Why glass of all things? Why not water??

That was weird. Didn't expect that

Headcanon accepted

Hahahahahaha!!!! :rainbowlaugh:

that explains a lot.

well done !

Okay, that explains the stained windows at Canterlot Castle.

Flurry Heart should get a royal pet.

Huh. That was amusing.

Where exactly did this idea come from?

7700821 Index of refraction! (This is why you can see a piece of glass that's underwater, BTW)

7703474 Ok, got it, thanks.

:trollestia: Trollestia strikes again! :rainbowlaugh:

So what I get from this is that pegasi, and therefore, by extension, alicorns, are unable to see glass. And this is why Rainbow keeps crashing into the library windows, and why Celestia has so many stained glass windows.

That is by far the most hilarious, yet plausible explanation I have ever heard so far. Headcanon accepted.

This is a very good one-shot.

:rainbowhuh: that felt... Anticlimactic...

I guess it's a different sense of humor

New headcanon. Well not really but a great story nonetheless.

Very cute fun. I love the vision idea, it's really unique. Your opening paragraph sounds more like a description than part of the story itself though.

JackRipper
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This review was brought to you by the group, "A for Effort".
Name of Story: Flurry Heart's Eye Exam
Grammar score out of 10: 8.5
Pros:
1) Interesting concepts regarding the eyesight of alicorns.
2) Funny visualization and imagery.
3) Unique concept.

Cons:
1) Switches between past and present tense randomly on occasion.
2) A continuity error regarding Rainbow Dash; if it only applied to alicorns, then her eyesight would be normal like everypony else.
Additional Notes: I'm not sure if I'm right about that second con, are you trying to say pegasi can't see glass either? That part was a little confusing to me. Either way, well done. :twilightsheepish:

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Alicorns are a mixture of the three pony races jongoji is implying that this deficiency comes from the pegasus lineage.

JackRipper
Moderator

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This review is like, 3 months old. :derpytongue2:

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